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James Cribb
I'm just someone that trying to write a story.
James Cribb
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What kind of transformation for this story?
...Whoa. Editor.
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I know I did it myelf.
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Chemical Transformation
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The transformation of the English language into some kind of Eldritch Abomination, apparently.
Utterly unreadable. You need to scrap this, find an editor, and consider the reason for posting this, because I would be embarrassed if I were you.
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Only in the universe I made for the story. I would say yes I am.
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What that?
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What's what?
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That chemical transformation thing?
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In the chapters 3 & 4, the transformation that was used the main 6 and Spike with crossbreeding my DNA with their own. In the near, the end of the 3th chapter was done by briefcase with samples of them and my. After they drank it mixer they begin to transform into their human forms. It was explained in the 4th chapter the reason for it as well. The transformation as some side effects with mix with my and each one of their DNA. Also in the I did told them it was only temporary. I hope that answers your question. If not let me know.
This "story" gave me douche chills.
From the level of grammar in the description alone, you've lied to fimfiction when you posted it. You have to be 18 to read mature stuff. You write like you're twelve.
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I'm 23.
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So find an editor and get this fixed. The level of misspellings and improper format is atrocious.
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Everything I've seen from you implies you're underage and not supposed to be here.
You do know that's against the rules, right?
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I am at legal age. Counterpoint to your argument.
What the fuck is this shit? Do you even know how to English? My god this is such a butcher of the english language that even reading what is placed on the front page is causing me cancer of all types, aids, all of the STD's and even a terrible case of explosions. Go back to school, take an english class, learn how to english properly and for gods sakes get rid of this story and rewrite it from the ground up.
*stops reading halfway through first chapter because of crap grammar/spelling*
Well, it’s been two months, maybe he’s improved over time.
*reads first sentence of ch.23*
Nope
Simply writing your rough draft in Word would correct a significant amount of errors in your writing.
Ok, fellas. Evitus or James Cribb.
Who is worse?
But all in serious. You need to get an editor, bad. If you want this to be successful you have to prove-read in order to make sense of what you are writing about.
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I'd have to go with Evictus. This guy only has 1 terrible story up. Evictus is responsible for over 200 brain damage inducing pieces of drivel.
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The description just by itself is a dead giveaway and looks like it was just written as a sudden idea and left as that. And I'm counting the rest of this typed... stuff is... Well... I'll just assume the rest is just as cancerous honestly. For I not even dare tread down this path. And I can survive reading through constantly repetitive styled Displaced stories...
Truth be told, I originally came here to see the shit show and finish my leftover popcorn after watching Terminator 3... I think there's some ice cream in the freezer...
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Weather that statement is complete bullshit or not, I don't give a damn. Age does not factor in one's true wisdom. Thus, it doesn't change the fact that people are killing this one straight outta the box. I suggest you be honest with yourself and figure out on improving yourself. I, truth be told, made a horrid first fan fic on this site. Grammar nazis be rolling out of their graves at it's many crimes to even exist. And I got pretty much the equal amount of reception as you are getting as well... But I (thankfully) learned my lesson and continue to improve from my many, many mistakes throughout my time on this site and in the real world. I hope you don't go Sonic Joker (or whatever the fuck is his name is now) and block out any slight criticism. Good or bad, it helps to admit and learn from those mistakes.
Please, if at all, take my honest advice.
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Thanks for your feedback and helping me out on this for later stories down the line. Let me asks you this? I'm still looking for an editor. Do you know anyone that can help me out on this and future stories?
Thank you, James Cribb
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Evictus. I used to edit a couple stories for the dude. Only once have I not had to rewrite the whole thing. And it's pretty easy to tell which ones were edited/rewritten compared to his usual fics.
Anyhow, I spotted this on the frontpage just from the sheer number of dislikes.
Also:
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"Chapter One: An Unknow Guest"
This is going to be good
William Shakespeare is currently writhing in agony. This is like the Dawn Dusk of Fanfics. That bathroom scene gave me erectile dysfunction!
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Pardon?
I have read some stories with bad grammar but this easily takes the cake as the worse. I wanted to see why this was so down voted and got my answer within the first paragraph.
This story looks like it was written by a child who is way to young and should not be allowed to continued. Mainly because your grammar leads me to believe you should not have a story with the M rating.
I very rarely get on people about grammar, because most of the time (from what I've seen), the grammar mistakes were from rushing a chapter or story and not taking their time. But this is clearly a lack of basic grammar skills that should of been learned many years ago.
If you were actually 23, you would NOT be having these issues.
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There is no way you could have read through all 29 chapters and I working with what I got.
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I never said I read through entire story, I quit after the first paragraph. I actually got a headache trying to read it.
Even if you grammar was ok, the pacing of the story 'seems'
to be terrible, too much happened in the first paragraph to properly convey what was happening.
Also, your reply to me just makes it even clearer that you should not be writing an M rated story as your grammar is, again, lacking.
Step 1: get an editor.
Step 2: get an editor.
Step 3: get an editor.
Step 4: put this fic out of its misery and rewrite the thing.
......... *facehoof and hits my head into the table* What I have to say has already been said way to many times in the comments so....yeah...
Thought I'd read this again to see if there was any improvement.
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Nope, still garbage. Just what did the English language do to deserve such treatment?
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Myself*
My 6 year old brother literally has better grammar than this. Is English your second language?
Setting aside the horrible punctuation, capitalization, and regular grammar for a second, having multiple characters' dialogue in the same paragraph is a huge no-no, even in a first-person story.
An editor isn't needed at this stage, no editor should have to put up with this many mistakes. I'd suggest taking an online course in writing. Improving takes work.
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Thanks for your import and your right but I've learned from the first chapter. But just remember I have a lot learn to try to get the story right on the grammar end of writing.
But I'm thinking about going back into the early chapters of the story to make a better scent of what going on. Also there one thing I would like to make is that is the first time seeing Twilight and the others in my world.
Let me ask you, folks is that you see Twilight and her friends for the first time without even knowing your name. How would you describe them?
9132739 You do have a lot to learn, but this learning isn't done by doing, it's done by teaching. Seriously. Go to Khan Academy for a start.
Your writing has gotten bulkier, but I wouldn't say that is better. You are still making the same mistakes (in the latest chapter).
As for your question, the following would probably be a simple description of them.
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I do thank you for the link and I'll take a look at when I get a chance.
Is this story really as bad as everyone says it is?
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Yes. Yes it is. Just a quick read of the comments will point out everything wrong with it. I ignored the downvotes and read it myself.
Time of my life I will never be able to get back.
Forty chapters in and I still have no idea what's going on.
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You and me both. By this point in most stories this long, you have an idea of what's going on and where the story is going.
I don't think even the author knows where they're trying to go with it.
Ah... nope. Nope, nope, nope.
Editor. I'm begging you, for the sake of your readers, for this story, for yourself, and for the English language, bless its poor soul, get. An. Editor.
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Don't bother. People have been saying that ever since this... Thing, started, and nothing has changed. The author refuses to accept that this abomination against all things story related isn't getting any better.
I don't even think the author even has a plan for the story at all.
Wow... You know something, I'm genuinely impressed. Not by the story, the story is something else entirely. I'm impressed by Cribb. Firstly, I respect that you haven't disabled the comments or turned off the vote ratio. A lot of authors would have disabled them as soon as the dislike ratio outgrew the like bar, but you haven't, which I can genuinely respect. I can tell that you're writing this story and updating it for your entertainment, not our praise, which is something else I can respect as well. Personally, I write more for attention than my own joy, and seeing an author go all out on a story that they like is something I always find interesting.
The writing oh god the writing
Jokes asides, the way I see what you done is hilariously making the grammer nazis mad lol
I do like to give some wisdom... you done well, and you place this chapter with pride. Even though many people hate it... however it's too early to judge it since it's clearly not finished yet. This fiction may have value... from 2017 to 2021.... that's 4 years writing this. This is not great but so far. I'm impressed.