Sweetie Belle steals Rarity's footwear so Rarity tickles her for information on where they are
Rewritten By Captain Yoshi HD
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5,363 words? Is this still Flutters writing?
I need to read this now. It looks like it will be cute
7945231 I had a lot of material to put in the story that's why it's so long. Don't worry you'll love it
third
7945235 You wanted to have the first comment huh?
Some spelling and grammar mistakes
And a *little* long
But other than that I liked it
7945255 Sorry it's longer than my other stories. I had a lot of material to put in this story. I'm glad you liked it
Tickle torture?!?!
You monster!
funny one you wrote though
7945315 Hey she had to find out someway I'm glad you found it was funny
Why is this story rated Mature?
7945330 You have a point nothing mature rated happens in this story. I guess the way the bondage was made me rate it like that....I'll change it
Poor Sweetie Belle
Also, have you ever watched a anime called Higurashi? The beginning of the tickling reminded me of a kid friendly version of a scene where this girl Satoko dies in a cross.
Also, you need a EQG or Human tag.
So cute nonetheless. Take a like
Can you do another story like this with Sci-Twi and Sunset Shimmer?
7945354 I know
poor Sweetie Belle was tuckered out by it all. She learned her lesson. No I have never watched that anime but that's cool that there was a scene you were reminded of! I forgot to add a human tag when I posted it sorry. I'll fix it. I'm glad you enjoyed it 
I'll think about it
7945366 It wasn't tickling. You can find it on YouTube, but watch at your own risk.
7945380 I'll watch it :)
wow much improvement my friend i never thought i would say it but i give ya a like
7945522 Thanks!
I have a feeling that this may contain some foot fetish....
Edit: I was right!
Over 5000 words? AND positive comments? o.O
Wow... OK, I'll read it.
7945588 You guessed correctly XD
7945589 I really hope you like it!
OK, let's be honest here. You all know that I'm gonna rip this into pieces anyway, right? It's a lot of fun xD
Since it's so much longer than usual stuff, I'm not gonna nitpick everything cus I don't have all day. Plus that comment would be WAY too long :P ; OK, so Rarity... tied up Sweetie Belle. Um... OOC much? ; Also, Sweetie here is 18 years old? I think that would make her much more mature than in the show, wouldn't it? ; Hm, never knew that one could panic in a scenario like this. It's just your sister dammit ; And one more thing: this fic is about tickling... Is it like a legit fetish or something? ; Apparently we have to be told few times that Sweetie's toes were big... wut? ; OK, how exactly Rarity knows that Sweetie took them? Oh... Sweetie confessed. CONVINIENT! ; Also YOU'RE FOR FUCK SAKE! ; Why do I feel like I'm reading a foot fetish based fic? ; Sweetie... Why are you so Out Of Character? ;
What? ; This dialoge is sooo forced... Help pls ; OK, skipping some of it, it's just repetitive stuff. Rarity tickles Sweetie, asks her about heels, Sweetie refuses to talk, repeat. BORING! ; Chocolate cream? Uh... what for? ; What the... Seriously, WHAT THE FUCK? Rarity was eating chocolate cream from Sweetie's FEET? FS, WHAT THE FUCK? ; And now she's tickling Sweetie with her own feet... I find that weird ; Tickle powder?
Seriously?! ; I'm seriously skipping parts of it cus reading about sweetie being tickled by different things and repetitive cycle of dialoge is boring as fuck ; "We're you mad..." ....... 
You can't into English. You just can't ; OK, Sweetie apologized and stuff...
... WHAT THE FUCK DID I JUST READ? Seriously, this fic is so weird and disturbing that I'd rather read fics like Rage or Bitterness than this. It's a foot and tickling fetish based story, and I don't get neither of those things. For real, Rarity was EATING CHOCOLATE OFF OF SWEETIE'S FEET! How fucked up do you have to be for that??
And even that aside, characters are so OOC that it's painful. Seriously.
*Sigh* ... I'm sorry, but the only good thing I can say about this story is that it's much longer than usual. it still has the same grammatical errors, there was only ONE COMMA in the ENTIRE STORY, characters could be replaced by anyone and nothing would've changed, the overall formula for writing is still the same.
I admit, my opinion can be bias because I don't understand foot fetish, nor tickling. I really don't get why people find that cute...
Ciao!
7945673 Yes this is a legit fetish but Me and some people are into that stuff :/ Yes the chocolate part...I know it's wierd but i didn't think it was that weird Their was repeated diologue because I didn't focus on adding different diologue sorry. I thought it was pretty good. :/ Maybe you didn't like it because your not into that sort of thing sorry for missing a few commas :/
This was very disturbing >~<
7945737 Sorry you felt the story was like that :/
7945691 Like I said, I don't get it and my opinion on this is bias. I guess for people who are into this, that story can be... interesting.
Oh, an "A few" commas is an understatement. It needs DOZENS of commas -,- And one more thing:
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PLEASE LEARN THIS FOR CRYING OUTLOUD!!
7945848 Yes it is bias. For me and other people it's great. Sorry about the commas
7945848
Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeehhhhhhhhhh- the writing style is better than most of your other stories, good job. The dialogue feels forced in some areas, while I'm not a huge fan of Humanized pony stories, I do see an improvement, and if you keep improving, I can see you getting better. I'm not gonna upvote or downvote this story though
7947867 I'm glad you see and improvement. Sorry about the forced dialogue
7947868 I will be honest though, while I can see Rarity doing this with Sweetie Belle, it's pretty disturbing to see her doing fetishy stuff to her sister.
7947913 I didn't mean to make it disturbing but yes I can see your point to this type of stuff would be more between lovers
7947945 And what I meant by "I can see Rarity doing something like this with Sweetie Belle" is just her having tickle fights with her sister, and other things that you can expect siblings with a good relationship to do with each other.
7950510 I know they would have regular tickle fights. This would be uncommon
Wow, that was amazing. Can you make the tickle story with Spike and Rarity? Remember Spike will tickle Rarity's belly and hooves.
7957273 I'm glad you liked it! :) I'll think about it
7945354
About version with Sci-Twi, it would be AWESOME
I would realy like to read that
8475231 I'm glad you liked it
This really reminds me of a spanking story.
8558470 It does?
8558897
Yeah, it reminds me of a story from Krysnakrak.
8558906 Cool!