• Member Since 2nd May, 2014
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Mister Phoenix


Since the show over, I'm gone, no more stories from me

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Once Granny Smith hears that Twilight is thinking about getting some guards in Ponyville to make the town seems a little safer. The other girls are finding it hard to decide, so Granny Smith tells them about the tale of Ponyville guardian. A unicorn and how Ponyville itself was almost destroyed.

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Okay, not to be mean, but you really need to have someone edit and proofread your story. I get the feeling you are not a native English speaker, so the mistakes are understandable, however if you want to write you need to do so in a manner that is not distracting to the story. Numerous grammatical errors will disrupt the flow of a story and make it difficult for anyone to finish it. Get together with someone you know understands writing and work with him or her. Don't stop writing. Instead, use it as a tool for improvement. You have the seed of a good idea with this story. All it needs is proper syntax and you could easily have a winner.

7841392 That does make sense my new cellphone isn't as good as writing like my old one. I might have to move my writing to Google Docs, and I just got dyslexia. I have no idea why people don't think I speak English, that and I couldn't be bother to go over it and edit it. My laziness my greatest enemy, but closer friend. I only going to write one more story after this which might be What About Mummy.

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