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Yoshi89


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Nightmare Night, the one evening where all your worst dreams come true, is almost over...or is it? With Luna's moon still glimmering over Ponyville, the Apple family gathers together in their storm cellar to exchange scary stories before turning in for the night.

Some comments contain spoilers!

Entry for HONORABLE MENTION in the Poniverse Nightmare Night Contest

Don't Sit Near the Apple Tree (with Anypony Else but Me) - told by Granny Smith: A young Granny Smith finds a dying apple tree in the orchard. Anypony who goes to chop it down is never seen again.
I See Dead Ponies - told by Apple Bloom: Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle spend the night in a haunted cottage but when their stay becomes miserable, they receive unlikely help.
Fiddlin' Amok - told by Applejack: Fiddlesticks auditions for the Canterlot Chamber Orchestra which soon becomes cursed when she doesn't get in. Contains gore.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 47 )

Apple Bloom doesn't know about and has never questioned giant storm doors on her own farm?
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Seriously?!

Well, you fixed it. That's better. Point redacted.

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She maybe could get a pass since she's a school age filly but yeah that does sound kind of awkward. I'll tweak it once I post the second story.
Done.

I wonder if one can get sued for fanfictions? (Cause I get the feeling that M. Night Shyamalan would have a field day with this one. :rainbowlaugh:)

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Cutie Mark Crusader defense attorneys! Yay! :scootangel:

Celestra

typo.

NOICE!
I like it. Keep up the good work.

EDIT: I have no idea how I found this, but I like it.

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Thanks. :pinkiehappy:
Watch out, story #3 will be posted shortly.

Overall that was a fun story. The telling was good and the characters came through. Nicely done.

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Much appreciated. :raritywink: Thanks!

HAHAHAHAHA, great ending to this story. Never expected Octavia and Vinyl to appear at the end; nicely done.

This was a really good story!! Especially with Halloween just around the corner :pinkiehappy:
Thank you for the good read! :twilightsmile:

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Glad you liked. :raritywink: Wanted to end with a scream, er bang. :rainbowlaugh:

That was the grand finale? I haven't been that disappointed since seeing 'The Village.' I mean the bit with Vinyl was nice, but somehow I expected more from 'Fiddlin' Amok' than was there. (You know, maybe if the fiddle was actually possessed or enchanted. It just felt like I was reading an episode of Scooby Doo, minus the clues.)

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I was going more for more of a horror theme in "Fiddlin' Amok" than mystery.:twilightblush: I did throw in a few clues, including the woodcarver fixing his hat to hide his unicorn horn. The fiddle as the weapon of choice in the murders served as a magical red herring. Without possessing it, the killer ran out of options but made his demise evident by sneezing. On a positive note, I had fun writing the parts with Vinyl.:raritywink:

so far so good

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Awesome, thanks. :raritywink:

well that was short

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It's a buildup to the next story, that's all that is.

Once again that was short

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Didn't see that coming? :ajsmug:

thats messed up as hell lol

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Haha, thanks. :raritywink:

Holiday Stories ~ ACCEPTED!

Can't say I'm a fan of this one. Lot of extraneous detail and not enough use of imagery. Where is the "crimson blood oozing down her body"? The "towering parapets of Canterlot castle reached to the skies"? Lot of boring language here, whole story seems to be in list format. "This happened, then this happened, OOOOH ARE YOU SCARED YET!?"

No, no I am not.

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I admit the third story was when "Show, don't tell" was still one of my weaker points. As much fun as I had writing the first two stories, I kept writing myself into corners on the third. Like you said, the suspense factor suffered because of it.

On a positive note, I appreciate the favorite.

Anyway. I really enjoyed this story. Both the idea of the Apples telling each other scary stories, and the actual...scary stories. Just the right level of spookiness and campiness. AJ's was the best , Bloom's was the weakest. :ajsmug::applecry:

If you ever do a volume two of this, include story based on the Slendermane video that featured Granny Smith! Heck, the picture you have for the story is FROM that video!

Comment posted by BladesAndAshes deleted Jul 10th, 2020

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Well, thank you for the positive response! And hey, I really appreciate the spoopy stuff!

Princess Luna ferries the dead? Seriously, what was Luna doing? Or was that not her?

This tale ended just the way a cartoon would! I could almost see a circle closing out in a black screen around Granny as she facehoofed.

Ghost stories are always sad to me. I mean, I can understand why they'd be scary to most, but.... I guess instead of sympathy for the devil I have sympathy for the ghosts.

Also, very cute that she nicknamed him Tater.

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Well, interludes are just meant to be breaks in the main feature of something.

Hm... took a bit to get to the "scary" bits and then the ending was a tad disappointing, especially no resistance taking place.
But it was very SCP-esque for a part of it and I did like that.

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Yeah, I was a little disappointed when it turned out to be the unicorn and not something like he passed on the fiddle so he could be free from its curse.

Yay another cartoon ending! I love that. It ties into it being MLP at its heart.

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