Glad you stopped by, but I don't know how much longer I'll stay.
I wanted to do better than the original story I wrote. It will be a little different this time, hopefully. (This might have a sequel if you chose the right choice.) Click here to see the original .
Rainbow Dash tried to prank the entire town but Pinkie had an idea to prank her back. A lot of things go wrong, just because of a lesson Rainbows' friends tried to teach her.
Edit: Sequel on hiatus.
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Option 2. I'm a sucker for happy endings.
But given that this has the "Dark" Tag, I guess we'll see which option wins in the end, huh?
To be entirely honest, though, I was kinda waffling back and forth between Option 2 and Option 3, but 3 kinda scares me.
I like option two, but if option three is what I think it is (namely that Dash's trust in the rest of the Mane 6 is shattered), then I think option 3 has much more potential for a good story.
2
3
Option 3
option 3
3 looks great... for it could make a good story
1 can also make a good story
2... just end the story there
For me, it's a 3
3
Option 3 for me.
3
2 but show us what the other endings are afterwords.
Option 3
Option 3
Option 3.
I understand that Rainbow was going too far, just like how I understand that she was going to far in "Mare-Do-Well."
But if you have to trick your friends into behaving how you want them to behave, you're not really acting any better than them. You do NOT have the moral high ground.
In many aspects, this episode is WORST than Mare-Do-Well. In that episode, all that was hurt on Rainbow's end, for the most part, was her pride. As this fic points out, the Mane 5, and the town as a whole, was willing to let Rainbow think she KILLED them, because they didn't like the way she was behaving.
I want Rainbow to live, because she doesn't deserve to die. I want the Mane 6 to TALK about this. Forgiveness is optional; Rainbow's feelings are her own. But if she and the others are to move past this, they need to discuss this like the adults they're supposed to be.
Option 3
I pick option 3. But only because I never tire of the bizarro-logic by which pranking is okay regardless of safety and consent so long as it's by Rainbow Dash but utterly beyond the pale if it's happening to Rainbow Dash.
I'll close the votes in a week. Those who have an account may have already commented but I'd like to see what more people think the ending should be.
And why do I love to make Rainbow the one to suffer? Gee, I don't know why but she's my favourite character. Bet this is why I like to use episodes like this.
//option 3, but could you maybe give a brief description of what the other ending would be like afterwords?
Hmm I choose option 3. I want to see how that goes.
Option 3!
Option 3 definitely.
Option 2 time 1000!
7816664 Option 3 times INFINITY!
7817409 Oh yeah, well Option 2 times INFINITY and BEYOND!
7817456 oh yea? well Buzz Lightyear called, he doesn't appreciate you using that quote that doesn't mean anything!
I should have seen this coming, but using Dr. Whooves like that to make her part Robotic was Perfect, can she fly with that metal wing though and is the rest of her body that is made of metal going to slow her down if she fly's or what. Will she regain her memories by any chance as time goes by, because I think it would be nice for her to regain them slowly over the course of a year or two.
To be VERY honest, I'm NOT that fond of this option (would have preferred Option 2, or, as a last ditch scenario Option 1, if it meant a possible sequel) , but I will continue to read this, just to see what happens.
But Rainbow as a cyborg that doesn't remember who she is, or anything about her life?
MY reaction to that?
Anyway, I'll continue to follow this, if only to see what happens next.
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Thanks, I appreciate the support
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Sorry, more people voted 3 so
So yeah, sorry for you not getting the ending you wanted.
And sorry for tricking the readers to thinking this was incomplete, I just forgot to change the sign when I finished writing this.
I...what?
I got nothing. I have no clue how to react to that.
7831175 Well, I understand that. I'm just a gal that likes happy endings, but that isn't always what happens.
Not even with MLP fics.
And it's YOUR story, not mine. If that's what you asked for, for us to vote on the options, and that's the one that won, that's all that matters.
And I'm cool with that.
Not hard feelings for what I said, okay?
As to that last bit, as far as I'M concerned, stuff like that happens to writers on here all the time, so it's no big deal.
Now, THAT said, I really hope that you do a sequel to this (it's okay of you don't, too), as, despite my initial grumping about the whole "cyborg Dash" thing, I'd really like to what happens next.
(It'd be REALLY nice to see how Equestria's two senior Princesses reaction to what the result of Twilight and the town's foolishness in this matter would be.)
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Yeah, I just take words seriously, infact, too seriously.
I guess I could add the part with the Princesses reacting to this. I wonder how that will end out.
This gives me a boost. But with you counting on how the Princesses react kinda makes me a litte nervous. I'm not a confident person so I might be afraid that it might not go how you wanted it to. (Wow, I really am not confident, at all
)
And yeah, I will be working on a sequel.
wait it's complete?! i thought there would be more! I CHOSE OPTION 3!
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Sorryyy~
Like I said, I will be working on a sequel. So don't worry.
Hopefully (famous last words)
7834132 Could I say something?
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Sure, I guess
7836555 I happen to know a few punishment ideas for the residents of Ponyville for this whole ZOMBIE stunt. Want to hear them?
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Umm, ok?
7836746 I'll separate my punishments between the "BIG PONIES" & "THE FOALS". And to top it off, the entire town receives a TWO year ban from Nightmare Night.
BIG PONIES:
Twilight: Three months Grounded. Striped of her title and powers, sentenced to 1000 hours community service.
Applejack: Two months Grounded, Striped of apple-bucking privileges, 1000 hours community service.
Big Mac: Two months Grounded, Striped of apple-bucking privileges, 1000 hours community service.
Granny Smith: Two months Grounded, Striped of apple selling privileges, 1000 hours community service.
Pinkie Pie: Three months grounded, Striped of holding any parties of anything or for anyone, and 1000 hours community service.
Rarity: Two months grounded, Striped of her powers, no fashion designing, 1000 hours community service, and 10 weekends of rain gutter detail.
Fluttershy: Two months grounded, striped of animal care taking privileges, and 1000 hours community service.
Derpy: Two months grounded. 1000 hours community service.
Mayor Mare: Relieved of her position, 1000 hours community service.
Mr & Mrs. Cake: Two months grounded, no sweet's baking or sales, 1000 hours community service.
Mr & Mrs. Donkey: Two Months grounded, 1000 hours community service.
Ms. Cheerlee: Two months grounded, striped of her teacher duties, and 1000 hours community service.
FOALS:
Applebloom: Two months Grounded, Striped of cuite mark, striped apple-bucking privileges, no crusading with friends, and Two year ban from Nightmare Night
Sweetie Belle: Two months Grounded, Striped of cuite mark, striped of singing privileges, no crusading with friends, and Two year ban from Nightmare Night.
Scootaloo: Two months Grounded, Striped of cuite mark, striped of stunts performing privileges, no crusading with friends, Two year ban from Nightmare Night, and no Wonder-bolts privileges.
Spike: Two month Grounded, Confiscation of comics and secret gem stash. Extra chores duty and two weekends of library cleaning detail. Two year ban from Nightmare Night.
Cake Twins: One month grounded, no sweets privileges, Two year ban from Nightmare Night.
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Oh feathers, uhh...
I might wanna take it easy on Derpy though...
And the Cake twins... jeez.
For the rest.... I might be fine with it. Maybe.
7836927 I'd figure those who take the fall together stay together. Besides with my two year ban on N.M.N, Luna surely will be lost without them.
Plot Twist!
Ok. Some things I have a problem with....
First thing first.... the story is rushed. The first chapter was not as rushed as the second, and could be accepted due to emotions flying high and that's going on.
But the second one....
- Random strange miracle doctor enters the story with close to no exposition or build-up, due to some 'Deus ex machina' reason?
- The letter to the Princesses should have been more than just a simple footnote. What was their reply? Did they offer any help to heal one of Equestrias main defenses against 'Big Bads' from the past?
- A time skip like this should have a 'situation report' of some kind. I.e. Twilight's POV or third person POV.
- Apparently Rainbow ''just'' got broken bones.... No concussion, ruptured or pierced organs or spinal injury.....
- Suddenly... Rainbow ''Robocop'' Dash™. Crush! Kill! Destroy! Swag!
- 11%.... At most she would have the collective knowledge equlient of a 2 or 3 year old foal (11% of what... 16 to 25 year old dash?)?
Not to mention... while we are on the matter of ''RoboDash'' entering the ''Community of Binary''. Since Rainbow seems to be somewhat computerized, those 11% is probably just fragments of full memories.
- The 2nd chapter enda to abruptly with way too little explained.
And the 'Pies de Resistance'...
The story is marked COMPLETE.
This story is not complete, this should either be continued like that Pinkie Pie story where she have amnesia or Just a simple epilog exposing the consequences.
In short, I think you should revisit the 2nd chapter.
Keep on writing. As with everything else, practice makes perfect!
Plz, let there be a sequel... I wanna see if Dashie gets her memories back...
And if she does, if she'll out for broken bones and wailing hearts after what those STUPID townponies did to her!!
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11 years old? I'm impressed.
Umm, you said that the sequel was on hiatus? Do you mind if I try to come up with one? I’ll credit you, obviously.
By the way, I’m not sure of this idea so I put emphasis on the try.
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Of course! I’ve basically given up on it anyway.
You can do whatever you please.
Let’s Hope
Rainbow Dash doesn’t turn into Cyborg Superman
Losing Sanity, going rogue, obsessed with revenge and hellbent to destroy the main hero.
I honestly want to see all endings.