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Awesome as always, can't wait to read about your friends "ideas".
Unless it's just part of how AJ speaks, shouldn't off be written with 2 'f's?
If it's just AJ's way of speaking (), please ignore this comment.
Just a typo.
Shouldn't it be "getting bred"?
I'm not pointing out the mistakes to be annoying.
This made me want to see what Blueblood is up to with Fluttershy more than anything. Maybe find someone willing to write it as a one shot side story.
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"What a beautiful little slut your are. I may just have to keep you. Wouldn't you like that, my dear?"
Marvelous.
Who the guy doing rainbow dash corruption?
A bit too wordy in my opinion - it took too long to get there
But i liked the reference to Fluttershy's Stocks
And that is the part where I scroll over to the Back button and get the hell out of here.
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I corrected it and thank you for pointing it out! I probably should have read over it a second time after finishing it. It is just that I am rather...impatient.
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I can imagine it being too wordy, considering I'm currently trying to improve my writing at one-on-one scenes. I thank you for pointing that out to me. I will try to get the hang of it in the future chapters!
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I admit the last sentence after 'prove yourself' is my least favorite in this entire chapter. I just seemed so...bad. Problem is I couldn't figure out some other way to formulate it. If you have an idea you are welcome to make a suggestion!
But you probably could have meant something over than the wording, now that I think about it! My bad! I would appreciate if you could give me some critique or pointers to help myself improve. I'm still relatively new to writing after all.
7414344 Don't feel too bad.
I have the same problem when I write. But the mistakes are WAAAAAAY more noticeable.
really, really, good keep up the good work!
great to see an other chapter of your story.
So hot, murr.
Hope we get an update soon
Any chance of another chapter please?
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There will be. I'm just more focused on 'Cheating Twilight' now. I will try to make progress and finish this story this year.
I wonder how much excersice Appejack will get. They don't need to physically restrain her so they could just have pastures for the broodmares.
Um... whens the next chapter coming up?
It's 2019 and I hope the continuation of this story :(
Um... whens the next chapter coming up?
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That is a good question. I do plan to finish it sometime. I just am busy. I hope that I get this done this year.
You should continue this one
Too bad this story is dead, it was a good one.