Awesome as always, can't wait to read about your friends "ideas".

“N-No, princess! It isn’t like that! Ah’m very grateful! All Ah’m asking fer is a chance ta work of mah debt!”

Unless it's just part of how AJ speaks, shouldn't off be written with 2 'f's?

If it's just AJ's way of speaking (), please ignore this comment.

It is well paid, but it ist he only job that I have to offer.

Just a typo.

Getting breed like a w**** and impregnated so that she could give birth to strong guards.

Shouldn't it be "getting bred"?
I'm not pointing out the mistakes to be annoying.

This made me want to see what Blueblood is up to with Fluttershy more than anything. Maybe find someone willing to write it as a one shot side story.

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"What a beautiful little slut your are. I may just have to keep you. Wouldn't you like that, my dear?"

Marvelous.

Who the guy doing rainbow dash corruption?

A bit too wordy in my opinion - it took too long to get there

But i liked the reference to Fluttershy's Stocks

“Good girl. But before you get to work, you need to prove yourself. So come here and suck my cock!”

And that is the part where I scroll over to the Back button and get the hell out of here.

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I corrected it and thank you for pointing it out! I probably should have read over it a second time after finishing it. It is just that I am rather...impatient.

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I can imagine it being too wordy, considering I'm currently trying to improve my writing at one-on-one scenes. I thank you for pointing that out to me. I will try to get the hang of it in the future chapters!

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I admit the last sentence after 'prove yourself' is my least favorite in this entire chapter. I just seemed so...bad. Problem is I couldn't figure out some other way to formulate it. If you have an idea you are welcome to make a suggestion!

But you probably could have meant something over than the wording, now that I think about it! My bad! I would appreciate if you could give me some critique or pointers to help myself improve. I'm still relatively new to writing after all.

7414344 Don't feel too bad.
I have the same problem when I write. But the mistakes are WAAAAAAY more noticeable.

really, really, good keep up the good work!