During a fact finding mission, Lyra Heartstrings accidentally brings a human into Equestria, but this human soon finds out that he might have a few extra strings attached to his relocation.
Dark ambitions, cruel jokes, and more surround Eric Hayes. Can he find a cure for his curse before he gets swept up in the problems of others?
Or will he pay the ultimate price and die as untouchable as he lived?
Some tags are there for the start, some are for planned future events and others will be added if they become applicable. You never know where even a planned story can take itself.
Chapters (18)
This looks like a beginning to a great story
7423173 Thank you for the corrections BestieBest, and thank you for the offer but with my erratic schedule I can't really bring in a proof reader nor editor.
7428983 As much as I would love to put out content that fast I feel like it would start burning me out if I increased the pace.
So the shield only activates when he is going to get harmed?
7430199 Twilight never actually touches Eric in this scene.
She stopped before coming close enough.
Don't worry, the full capabilities of his magic will come to light eventually.
(I'll rewrite the chapter ending shortly to make it more obvious that it's only residual body heat.)
New chapter
Yes!
7440253 Imagination allowing it should be out tomorrow around 3pm AEST.
Nice story dude, but you're coming on a little strong with this Eric X Twilight thing.
7451452 I admit that yes, I'm pushing it a bit strongly but with his position I think that's okay.
Between his anxiety issues, Twilight's lack of romantic experience, different species and the magic barrier it will be something that is there but will take a long time for either to admit it. So the more I show them having feelings for each other but not able to express it the more I can do if I choose to take it further. (While keeping the story age rating low.)
Hmm, quite enjoyable so far. I wonder will happen in the future.
But all I can do is speculate and try to 'guess' what is going to happen.
Anyway, keep on writing and I shall await the next chapter. Good job.
7457455 Sometimes you just need some down time. Even in a magical pony world.
Good plot so far, but please refine the story. It feels like you are not sure just what to write.
Also, please work on grammar. It hasn't detracted from the story so far, but better to prepare ahead of time and prevent such a thing. This is secondary to anything else, tbough.
7457982 I will readily admit this story is very raw. Due to a hectic schedule and releasing a chapter every day I don't really spend a lot of time refining the story.
This may sound like it means I am being lazy but that is far from the truth. The biggest intention behind me writing this is that it's an attempt of mine to improve my writing before it ever gets to the editing stage which will improve my overall writing ability and speed.
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At least you're doing good with grammar. I tried to read some stories here (this website), only to stop on the first page because the bad grammar was giving me a headache. I'll continue to read this story, because it has potential.
May the Sun shine always in your heart!
7459844 Thank you. I'm still learning but I'm trying to get better every time I write.
May Luna guide your dreams to peaceful fields.
7462882 Yeah. :)
7462915 Well it can't be easy for Eric, that would be boring. :P
Looking forward to next chapter.
I bet spike was planning on eating that gem
Ohh this is nice, now they have to find new Elements of Harmony since 5 of 6 of the old ones are unworthy.
Nice, very nice indeed. And that plot twist completely caught me off guard.
Holy moly, this is going to be fun.
7474033 The blue gem is the element of laughter. (Yes it seems weird for Luna to have it but it will make sense.)
7474042 All good. :)
I've had to go back and check so many things while writing this story just to keep all the details constant.
Amazing chapter, I greatly enjoy reading this all the while feeling sorry for Eric. But hey! He got a Woona!
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Thank you. It means a lot to hear that people enjoy my work.
Dear god Hes got a anti-pinkie shield
Shows the consequences of overreacting and 'going with the crowd'. Fluttershy, I kinda pity, but the others... well... backlash is going to be a bitch. Wonder how most ponies will react knowing that the 'most generous pony' screwed up so badly that she's no longer the Element of Generosity. I'm personally fond of Applejack and Fluttershy, but they done screwed up royally.