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A sudden turn of events have left Taylor, A 16 year old living in Minnesota, sitting in Equestria, wondering what the hell kind of children's fantasy this is. Now, he has another chance to start over, make new friends, have new experiences, and possibly get a relationship. (yet the thought has yet to come) How will he do? And how will he get along? only time will tell what events lay ahead with his 'second chance'.

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Before I say anything else, listen now, I decided I wasn't to happy with the previous naming and all that of the story, so I ended up deleting it, I'm sure I could have changed it somehow but I was too lazy to do so. :facehoof: ANYWAYS!, posts may be slow at first, I did JUST decide after reading my fair share of fics to start on literature, just trying my hand at it and I never thought I would actually try and write one. So yeah, first chapter of my first fic. nuff-said.

Okay holy shit, this went WAY longer than I anticipated :twilightblush: , I thought I was going to get this done yesterday and begin to start chapter four and five, but alas, over FIVE THOUSAND WORDS THOUGH. :pinkiehappy: I hope you like all the grueling work I went through the last eight hours I sat on the computer, coffee in hand for. Hope you like it though, I'll say again, comments and ratings along with some constructive criticism are GREATLY appreciated, THANX!!! :derpytongue2:

139059 This might be a VERY late comment, but a little hard work goes a long way :twilightsmile:

I think you might have stretched the "I'm-dazed-and-have-no-clue-what-is-going-on" behavior. Based on the first chapter, Taylor was a watcher of the show but has no idea what place he is in. I suppose that he could have some memory loss but he must have hit his head pretty hard back there. Other than that I didn't see many grammatical errors. Just a couple of typo's like "or" instead of "of". I'll give it a 3.5-4/5 for now.

Geussing his perants died in a plane crash:pinkiesad2:

I can't, and won't stop being amazed by these stories. :twilightsmile:

I love HiE stories, may this one and many others continue.

Well after reading the first chapter, my interest is drawn.

I wish you'd put more breaks in between those 'walls of text' however.

Will read on now! :twilightsmile:

Very good but remember that the Enter and Tab keys are your friends. They will not hurt you, or threaten to stab you because they cannot speak.

Time for more wisdom!

The earlier chapters seemed to be overdosed with apostrophes... like way too many. Also good to watch for capitalization, and I hope you take the advice and revise the earlier chapter's 'wall of texts'.

It was not nearly as bad here, but still you should watch out for it.

Current Rating- 4.0

Let's see where this goes.

224215 thanks for the reassurance and I will :ajsmug:

Why does he have MML (Magical Memory Loss)? You said he was a fan of the show, either he's in denial or does not know how to put two and two together.

241410 I think its because of the severe trauma both physical and mental.

nice keep up the good work:twilightsmile:

:moustache: I politely demand....... MMMMMMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

love it and as most people have said MOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:
enough with that though. also what a twist

Alright! No more hiatus as of today! I am back for good now, however typing ever so long in the day is still restricted to about an hour a day, I am still typing now. :twilightsmile: I have a storyboard set up for the next ten to fifteen chapters so yay me, also, on a better note, I have my friends online, helping me proofread my stories so I don't make so many mistakes and so that they can throw ideas out at any time for inspiration later on in the story. Updates will be slow at first... but they will begin to speed up, I did manage to get a job this week :pinkiehappy: my first being, I will start in the next week or so, so that will add to the increase in time between updates. But, all in all, I'm here for good now! no more hiatus ever AGAIN. Comments on how I'm doing are GREATLY appreciated, Thanks.

Please let Celestia and Twilight save them.:fluttercry::pinkiesad2:

Also, I'd be glad to help proofread if you need it that is

And then, Captain Falcon saved them all! :pinkiecrazy:

254771 Why didn't you tell me you were off hiatus?!?

wow I've read all but three of the stories in the you may like this list thing

They can talk. THEY CAN TALK. How stupid are these ponies? Why would they kill each other? How do they plan to get them to kill each other? Find out on the next episode of: Equesteria's Dumb- I mean, A Second Chance!

255840 They're not trying to get them to kill each other, they're in a "storage" of sorts. The arena is separate.

256501 QUIT GIVING AWAY ALL MAH STORY PLANS!!! :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage: YOU JUST PROOFREAD AND STAY QUIET...

My Reaction:

Before Reading: "sounds interesting"

Half-way: "Not ba- OH SWEET CELESTIA THAT'S A LOT OF WORDS!":pinkiegasp:

After First Chapter: "Very well written and executed.":moustache:

:fluttercry: That is just despicable. I hope they can all escape soon.

As it's always been, this was a real blast to work with you on. Although I'm sorry for distracting you so much.

-Travis

It's times like those where I'm sure a shotgun would come in handy.

I like this approach. A good number of the HiE fics I've read so far have been slice of life, so I greatly enjoy it when I see one that takes a more adventure-driven path. Great work.

272246 I agree with your comment, a lot of HiE's out there are primarily 'slice of life' and not enough 'adventure' and they're not too into and action and climatic plots really, :twilightangry2: but I manage with my own story, and I'm proud of myself for this original plot twist I've implemented, :twilightsmile: I plan on trying to make sure that the story is original, and not too repetitive of others as well. :trollestia:

Well geez, practically out of the gate with this story and already the protagonist is neck-deep in shit. If that doesn't catch someone's attention than I dunno what will.

I'd had thoughts about storming up an HiE fic that was more action-packed, but I think I still enjoy reading other fics than writing, at this point.

Another Chapter? So quickly? HOW CAN THIS BE??? :pinkiegasp: I'll tell ya how, I now am having the first official snow day in three years! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: Pretty exciting right, I've been writing for 5 straight hours to get this chapter done, I hope it's still closed tomorrow though... but still, really happy that I got my next chapter out so quickly! I need to take a break though... my back is freaking killing me from sitting over the keyboard for so long, :fluttershbad: anyways comments, likes and all else are greatly appreciated! hope to hear more from you guys soon, thanks!

It's gettin' good, er better! :pinkiehappy:

:pinkiehappy: YAY! Freedom! I hope they can get to Ponyville and I really do hope Twilight is ok.

So his parents died in a plane crash do to some implications?

Never anything wrong with throwing an over-the-top escape plan into a story to spice it up. Those are some of the most interesting moments of any good story. Well done. :pinkiehappy:

I find it ever-so-funny to see that everypony thinks his parents died in a car or plane crash... WOW you guys are WAY OFF!!! :trollestia:

" I see, How did you happen to enter Equestria?" she asked.

"Well I saw a star, made a wish, fell down, and now I'm here!" Explained Taylor in a very quick and somewhat comedic way.

275803
So a heart attack?

Ps
Them daggers sound badass!

224215 do I sense a portal reference or am I going batty?:derpyderp2:

275803 Yes, 'tis quite humorous. :rainbowlaugh:

Got to help actually write the thing FINALLY! :pinkiehappy:

Oh, Taylor, please be OK. :pinkiesad2: UPDATE NOW PLEASE!

MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage: pwees?:fluttercry:

I've never actually helped before, can I help? Um, if you want help, that is...:fluttershysad:

287970 Well, umm... You see... One moment. Tridon- F**K it! TAYLOR! TAAAAYLOR!!! HEEELLLPPP!! :twilightoops:

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