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After a long-term human preservation test--called cryonics--goes horribly wrong, a twenty-year-old man finds himself stuck many, many years into the future with no hope of returning to his own time.

And this future involves uncannily intelligent, brightly colored, talking magic horses that call themselves ponies.

Now he has to figure out how to adjust to a world where, among other things, the laws of physics seem completely wrong, many animals speak and are intelligent, the leader of the country is an absolute monarch, and society seems...off in some ways.

This won't be easy.

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Set about twenty-five years before the return of Nightmare Moon.

Chapters (17)
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Comments ( 79 )

Nice story you got there. I like the way you write. Looking forward to next chapter. It's gonna be interesting.

I agree with Kratz i like where this is going and i cant wait for the next update.

7165081 Thanks! I appreciate that! I wasn't sure what to expect after posting my first story, but I'm glad you like it.

7165233 I must admit I never expected anyone to say they can't wait for an update from me. Thank you.

It's aight. Mechanically, it seems fine. Too soon to tell with the characters and whatnot anything else. I'm going to read it and see where it goes.

7169185 Thanks for the feedback. I would have made this chapter longer, but I really couldn't think of what else to put in there. Patrick will interact with more characters in the coming chapters, and most if not all of those chapters will be longer and have more in them than the first one, which was more of a prologue than anything else. I hope to bring out some more of his character.

i enjoyed this, a lot of stories about cryonics (the actual term, cryogenics refers to the science of making things cold) focus on what comes afterwards, completely glossing over the intense mental preparation and/or sociopathy that willing to abandon time requires, as well as actually being in the machine itself

that being said, one of my main problems with fimfiction, and it has been here as long as i have (since like... season 2) is that most stories are filled to the brim with overused cliches, one of the ones that bugs me EVERY TIME, is the description that goes into describing a pony, we all know what they look like, if we're here, then we DEFINITELY KNOW, that a pony is, at the least, a reasonably intelligent quadraped

this was REALLY good, though, i enjoyed
did i mention that?

This is a good start to a very good story. Please write more you can.

7695762 Thank you for the inspiring words! I'll try to write when I can!

This is a very good chapter. I am glad that you updated this story.

7797957 I myself am also glad you updated this story. It is very good.

Is that the kind of migraine where you can hear your own breathing like you got a stethoscope to your chest, and each puff hurts?

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7797983 Thanks; I'm glad you enjoy and I will write more when I can!


7799133 Crap, that sounds terrible. I haven't heard of that kind; I was just thinking of the kind that attacks half the head and throbs horribly every so often. That's the kind I get.

So we got a man out of time and possibly out of place, and a wizard that is trying to figure out how that man has violated what probably is one of the basic laws of nature. Not to mention Jeff the Intern, who left the man known as Patrick frozen while he left for lunch, and then never returned.

It's like a dramatic, and less comedic first season of Futurama, but with magic.

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He's basically thinking to himself that he is surrounded by backwards dogmatic savages. Whelp, let's watch it unfold.

Looks like we found another cryochamber.

logical no experiment could be considered valid with only 1 subject. The 2 million years isn't hard to imagine after all a thousand years is a LONG time considering the life span of humans

Polaris? Isn't that a Megadeth song?
*goes to look*
Yep, looks like it is... Hopefully not a relevant one, although if it was, it would explain a few things, wouldn't it?

7908035 I had no idea that Polaris was the name of a Megadeth song. Probably because I don't listen to Megadeth. Polaris is also the name of the North Star, though, so take from that what you will.

I want more. :pinkiehappy:
I! NEED! MORE! :flutterrage:
Please? :scootangel:

7937602 Well, since you said the magic word...:pinkiecrazy:

Glad you enjoy, and thanks for the favorite, too!

This chapter was little blah but not all chapters can be exciting.. In a way little surprised there wasn't more test subjects over all 9 isn't that many and odds are with such a long time passing not all of them would've survived. A little surprised that out of teh subjects found none of them knew about any others \
Looking forward to future installments

Now this is interesting...

Please.

I.

NEED.

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Please??????????????????????????????????????????? :scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel:

It's like magic is radiation in this story.

7970967 That's the feeling I'm getting as well... and if so, then maybe his body will somehow genetically adapt to it... hopefully. :pinkiesad2:

Comment posted by LongJohn 03 deleted Feb 23rd, 2017

why do i get the feeling he is going unicorn XD

Been wondering how long it would take for the pony transformation to become evident ever since you mentioned the doors opening to ponies.

Mow to see if you'll actually go through with it and how you'll handle it, or if you have something else in mind.

I hope he becomes a draconiquis

Almost sounds like radiation sickness except for a couple of symptoms

Damn you cliffhanger god, when I found you I have exactly one hundred and forty two torture methods to try out.

Death by radioactive poisoning. Worse way to go.

OK now I am confused to say the least. Looked at both chapters posted. At least reading them out of order did nothing
at a guess Walker has been changed into a pony. Maybe over riding magic of somesort

So Walker been turn into an Pegasus his name slightly been changed and his memories changed, on top of that Fire also seem to forgotten or force to have his memories shut off from the last few days.

Question is. What or who did this? Did the magic in the air change Walker?

7996279 I can't say too much without spoiling anything, but I will say that it's not the ambient magic's doing.

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Well you peaked my interest with that said I got a few ideas what going on now.

7997093 I have a feeling that it was Celestia's (curse you, xenophobic Tyrant!!) doing.

All right, what the flying fuckery? I'm going to go out of my way and say that I'm smelling brainwashing conspiracy, mind transfers, and the nefarious force known as magic being somehow responsible for human extinction.

Said it once, I'll say it again... CURSE YOU, TYRANT AND XENOPHOBIC CELESTIA!!!!!

8036526 How does Tyrantlestia have to do with ponifying Walker?

8036568 Hold it, he couldn't survive the Equestrian atmosphere, right? Rriigghhtt... Nevermind.

8036707 Well, at least Patrick Walker and the lady can survive the Equestrian atmosphere for two days at best before their memories are gradually wiped.

8036715 But there should a cure somewhere, right? RIGHT?

8036763 Since when there are cures for memory wipes?

8036801 A memory retrieval spell?

8036831 That seems like something Celestia and Luna would know.

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