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AppleBloom is sent to track down Spike after he escaped capture, She wants to make sure that if anyone catches him, its going to be her.

Sequel to Gummy's Secret Life.

Chapters (8)
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Nice idea clearing up how Spike Escapes in the first chapter, but I do wonder how does Twilight take the disappearance of her longtime friend ? :twilightblush:

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one.

39121 do not worry, I have it thought out:pinkiehappy:

AWWWWWWWWW YEEEEAAAAAAAHHHHH AWESOMENESS WILL INSUE!:rainbowdetermined2:

I like the Twisted Metal Black reference you threw in there.

This was awesome, first off it helps if you read Spike's dialogue like he's voiced by either Alan Rickman's character from Die Hard or Clancy Brown (AKA Lex Luthor from Superman: TAS). The whole breaking out, killing the guards and driver and proceeding to highjack the prison transport truck while monologuing is right out of a movie, especially the part where he starts talking to a dead guy that reminded me of Sin City. I really like that you made the tiny dragon very emotionally unstable, psychotic and very threatening.

For people that complain about character personalities, just treat it like a very well done "Else Worlds" story like Superman: Red Son.

Peace Out.

I'm in so deep, I can't see the sun anymore. Awaiting the next chapter

39678 o-o did you really read all of gummy's secret life and this chapter in a 20 min span? :rainbowderp:

Too much fun writing? Amen to that, brother... :scootangel:

40743 :pinkiehappy:
:flutterrage: : Can i get an amen brother?!
:moustache: : Amen.

Uhm...you could try using more pronouns. In the first 4 lines i read Applebloom 3 times and it managed to desmoralize me to continue reading this fic.

I wonder who the new agents will be...:rainbowhuh:

40890 Hope you enjoyed your stay. I wouldn't like picky people reading this anyway:rainbowwild:

Great update and an interesting cover-up that the Agency used to fool Twilight.

I do wonder who will assist Applebloom on her quest and if she can bring Spike back...alive ? :twilightblush:

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale as you are writing a wonderful and entertaining story.

Must have happy ending.... MUST HAVE HAPPY ENDING!!! LOVE AND TOLERANCE! LOVE AND TOLERANCE! EXTERMINATE! Wait... Uuh, yeah so um... Awesome chapters can't wait to see what happens next!

This counts as a review for both the previous chapter as well as this chapter.
I loved when Spike got stopped by that one guy and just BS'd his way through the situation. It came off kinda like a bad 80's action show where one of the heroes is undercover and had to ask someone in a very stunted and unnatural way, "Do you know where the drugs and criminals hang out?"
I was expecting the Schwarzenegger one liners from Commando, "Don't disturb my friend, he's dead tired" as he points to the dead body.
Last, there was that scene involving Gilda and her gang and all I could think of was Spike showing up in their hideout and the leader is like "I don't trust him" or "enough, kill him!" Then Spike's like, "Wanna see a magic trick," puts pencil on counter grabs a gang member and jammed said pencil in his eye, "TA DAHHHH, IT'S GONE!"

As for this chapter I thought it was well done and I loved how Applebloom doubts her own sanity.

Sorry I've been in kind of a Dark Knight kick recently.
Peace Out.

41487 I own dark knight and i've watched it like 4 times this week :twilightblush:

Wow, who knew Applebloom had it rough. :applecry:

I must say it will be interesting to see Applebloom in the big city. :ajsmug:

please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one as I do hope to see some of the Applefamily distant Manehattan relatives in this tale. :ajbemused:

Why do I have a bad feeling about this....:twilightblush:

I mean I would have thought that all that time under Twilight's care, Spike would have thought of something more clever like this. :moustache:

Still it was a nice update and I wish to encourage you to keep up the good work upon such a great tale.

42439 He lost everything, he has to be resourceful lol. besides I still have ALOT of plot to go over :pinkiehappy:

Thoughts:
GTA: Manehattan
I'm gonna say it before anyone else gets a chance to say it.
"Flawless Victory, FATALITY!!!"
Seriously, that little midget dragon will fuck your shit up.
He should have shown the gang the armored prison transport full of dead cops he had been driving.
The only song that kept on popping up in mid during all this is Voltaire: When You're Evil. I fucking love this song. Oh, and some of his music was also used in The Grim Adventures of Billy and Mandy.

42619 I suppose you can call it GTA, even though i never really liked that game myself, I'm looking for more of
'The Warriors' theme.

Great update and as usual you wrote a great Pinkie Pie moment. :pinkiehappy:

I read your note about taking a break from this tale, and I find that is a great idea to do in case you feel stuck on something within the storyline so far. So take a good rest and I will be waiting for you to return.

Good luck and keep up the good work upon such great tales like this one. :yay:

45149 Yeah, I feel a bit stuck on making the details right for this story, my enthusiasm is a bit low in writing it. I'm sure it will be back after im done writing purple skies:pinkiehappy:

For some reason Iike how you always spell minute wrong it grew on me

write it please i love this story :)

Wow, so that Necklace of hers was a plot point. A true trap for Applebloom to fall for. I wonder how she will react when she learns the truth about her little Trincket ? :fluttershysad:

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one. :moustache:

I dunno know whatchu talkin bout Winter, that was great and it sets up that final chapter just the way I imagined it.
A cool line you coulda you used for Eye Patch when he was explaining the wall and what it means to be an agent:
."We are Legion, for we are many."
Why do you sell yourself short man this story will end and end it will gracefully and not as a train wreck. It will satisfy just about everyone. Those who love action, those who love drama, those who love romance, those you love gore, those sci-fi and those who love a feel good ending. I'm proud to be part of this. I'd take this story over a McRib any day.

As for this chapter it's almost how I imagined it, I like who you keep you're Warriors reference in there and layered it on thicker this time. The chapter ends just right and sets up our final chapter. Avoiding Spoilers: With our fight scene, our surprise ending, our goodbyes, our scene at a coffee shop and a leaving on our happy epilogue view to the future of our protagonist.

Peace Out and as always it's an honor being part of this and remember it's not about what a few negative comments or ratings say, it's all bout what you like, hell I've seen a story with 1 1/2 stars get 12 chapters. Yeah it was bad but author obviously cared about their work to tell the haters to suck it.

You've caught me with the concept of a street gang ruling the world.

Never quit. If you start a journey you may as well finish it. I love this story, and I want to see it through to the end.

Well done brony. A fitting end to a spy drama with some of the Dr. thrown in there.

I thank you Winter, for bringing this fic to a natural conclusion it's almost everything imagined. To be honest I could stopped at the Die Hard reference and been happy with this fic. I like how you humored me and put the Commando lines in the fight scene.

Remembered when you said making this like the movie "The One" would be confusing and wouldn't work?
That's where my multiverse ending came from and it worked well with the actual plot, so ha ha ha (with all due respect).

I can't review the chapter myself for several reasons.
1. I wrote and outlined a good portion of it.
2. I am biased and giving it a favorable review would ruin my journalistic integrity.
3. I knew how it was going to end.

On another note I like the surprises and curve balls thrown in here.
This was awesome and I can't wait for our next project.

Peace Out.

YAY YAY YAY HAPPY ENDING YES! Sorry I just love happy endings with no strings attached. Though now I am curious why that Applebloom was dying. Anyway great work, a beautiful way for me to go to sleep. Best wishes!

54971
There was an accident involving a pottery kiln at the rec center at the town hall. that explains the cuts as for why there isn't any burns it's due to shrapnel only she was far enough away from the exploding oven, but couldn't avoid the sharp debris and pressure wave. She was the only casualty and there were six others injured.

54993 I never added the cuts, just a head concussion, and i don't see how cuts could kill someone unless they were deep and all over

55006 Shhhhh don't tell anyone, it'll make it look like I'm unprofessional. If you couldn't tell I wanted to B.S by way through a response and pulled that explanation out of ass in literally one minute. But since the story's over I can mess with commenters. lol

55025 lol :D
your such an evil waffle.:heart:

Well done, sir. My hat goes off to you.

55116 I wouldn't put it on the ground, it might get dirty and its a nice hat

Its official this was amazing thumbs up my words cannot describe how awesome that ending was..... (speechless) :yay:

230260 Thanks, I really liked this series, this was supposed to be about 20k words longer but I started writing Shipfics and I lost interest at the time, but I'm glad it still came out good. :pinkiesmile:

It's good but the end is a little to "deus ex machina" for me.

452341
That's a video game right?

452487
A deus ex machina ("god out of the machine") is a plot device whereby a seemingly unsolvable problem is suddenly and abruptly solved with the contrived and unexpected intervention of some new event, character, ability, or object.

452507
alright, so your saying its rushed?

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