(-Very light dark-)Sweetie belle and the other Cutie mark crusaders are attempting to get their cutie marks again - what will happen?
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Hehehe. I like this.
Why does my stories always pop up at the dead of night... oh well.. guess it was fun to write.
One thing that I want to mention is that the build up to Sweetie Belle dying was a little long. By the time she died I had forgotten that it was a Magical Pokaan parody and the build up was a little dramatic and Applebloom was crying and Sweetie Belle was crying and... a-and... And I may have joined in a little as well.
On another note, great character selections! Though is it just me, or could Fluttershy have stood in for Aiko just as well as Twilight? Meh, who cares, this was great either way.
172326 YES ANOTHER FAN. I have loved Magical Pokaan and I wanted to do a parody. I picked Twilight because she is super smart and Aiko is a super computer. Yeah flutter could have worked but I went with the intelligence other than the nature - besides I can't imagine Flutter being a demon.
And I had hoped that scene did the trick
This was great. Keep writing 5/5
172456 Thank you so much!
I do hope they patched her up before putting her mind and soul back in, or Rarity is going to be *so* cross about the mess....
173295 I would imagine that her body wasn't much different when she fell, even so it would probably have been fixed, they wouldn't bring her back to life in a crippled body lol
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Heh - yeah, this isn't The Monkey's Paw, after all.
Haven't actually read Magical Pokaan though I have heard about it before. I will probably have to check it out some time. Anyways the story was quite amusing, not only is Sweetie Bell my favorite CMC but the thought of her trolling her way through hell cracks me up.
I felt that she was OOC in Foal Limbo, but other than that you portrayed her vary well.
174313 its an anime, and OOC in foals limbo?
She got angry, but then had some fun in pushing over rocks.
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Ya I know its an anime, and I think there was a manga for it not sure tough. Anyway about Sweetie Bell, I felt that she was acting like a bully in Foal Limbo. Ya I know she was entertaining herself, but I can't imagine her purposely making some one else feel bad unless they were being mean to her or her friends. In Foal Limbo on the other hand I can understand her being mean to "AJ", but she was also making the other foals cry and they had done nothing to her other then one ignored her when she tried talking to them.
174518 hmm. well I'm a nice guy most the time, but if I had to chose between stacking rocks and getting them knocked over and knocking over others rocks I would prob pick the second. Your already in hell right lol?
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181235 Sweetie Belle in hell.
Read desc.
I liked this story. It was original, funny, and quite entertaining. Nice work.
You've earned yourself a watcher.
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Um. This is ... an interesting idea. I don't really have much else to say.
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It's a parody.
Yes, I know it's a parody. Still interesting the way you did it.
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Oh?
Are you a fan of Magical Pokaan?
Not really. But I do know a bit about it.
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172269 I know what you mean. I wrote a story at night and waited until morning to post it and it finally got a approved and everything at midnight.
181235 i agree how do you get BANISHED FROM HELL!!!!!!!
I've always suspected Sweetie Belle of being spiteful. I've even written a story about it.
Glad to see I'm not the only one with this view.
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