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Jordan179


I'm a long time science fiction and animation fan who stumbled into My Little Pony fandom and got caught -- I guess I'm a Brony Forever now.

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This story is a sequel to Post-Traumatic


Summer, YOH 1505 (early to mid Season Five): Rarity has recovered from the psychological damage of her captivity in Our Town, and the fomerly Equal Ponies have begun to recover from the damage done to them by Starlight Glimmer.

Secure in Spike's love and her own Fabulousness, Rarity is working on the designs for her planned Canterlot Boutique, when she receives an unexpected visitor -- a Pony she devoutly hoped never to see again.

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While that is a horrifying dream, the destruction of self (abandoning her goals and settling for mediocrity), did Dashing every really do anything? He's equally a victim of Starlight as Rarity. Maybe I'm not remembering the details though. Interested to see how this plays out for all involved.

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Dashing is but the innocent imaginary victim of Rarity's lurid imagination. He wasn't even a mean guy in the dream, just emotionally flattened by the Sameness.

Ah. Well, this is awkward, especially if Rarity tries to explain what just happened. And for that matter, why. Still, it will ultimately be good for her to clear the air, and Spike will be here for her.

Also, I quite like your tweaks to the Nightmare Rarity event. Though I have to wonder if Rush understood who and what he was ultimately working for at the time. The difference between ignorance and malice there says quite a lot about the person he's become.

As I've said in the past, the most challenging aspect of Sparity is determining why Rarity would fall in love with Spike. This story, along with Post Traumatic, do an excellent job of showcasing the answer to that question. You've got my attention, and I will be following this.

One thing, though.

Spike had seen off Rush and his goons by mean of his own Draconic might, leaving them with painfrul bites and burns. Mindbender, himself, had wisely fled as Rarity, in her despair and anger, accepted possession by a Night Shadow, becoming Nightmare Rarity, a Unicorn with powers even greater than those of Twilight or Luna, but consumed by hatred and compelled to do evil.

When did that happen? Granted, I don't really follow your work, but I've glanced through your stories once or twice in the past, and I don't remember anything like that.

Rarity is working on the designs for her planned Canterlot Boutique, when she receives an unexpected visitor -- a Pony she devoutly hoped never to see again.

Let me guess: Blueblood.

Let's be honest here: Have we seen any sane, brilliant unicorns in Equestria? Maybe one or two of Twilight's classmates, but it's not like we've seen them long enough to get a peg on their mental stability. Twilight, Rarity, Trixie, Starlight, Sunset, Moondancer... this is not a stable stable of mares. Fortunately, Spike can wrangle unicorns with the best of them, and thank goodness for that.

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No, but she probably wouldn't be happy to see him, either.

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It's true that MLP seems to be firmly in the camp that with great intellect (and creativity) come some degree of madness. The series as a whole also has a sort of overarching moral that what keeps the slightly mad sane is friendship: long-term stable positive relationships with other beings. Friends give one other viewpoints on life than one's own, and caring about friends, one becomes less obsessed with one's own problems.

This is certainly true of Twiight Sparke, Celestia needed six Element Bearers, but she was probably also worried that a friendless Twilight Sparkle might go the route of Sunset Shimmer -- or Luna Both of whom become saner when they open themselves up to friendship.

One of Twilight's advantages in keeping her sanity has been the love of Spike. And Spike has learned how to deal with a brilliant, slightly-crazy mistress. This, I would argue, has socially pre-adapted him to becoming Rarity's companion, as well.

this pony dude is gonna try to get the succ from rarity

let's hope spike stops him from getting that succ

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That general scenario has occurred to Spike, though Rarity's not that easy, and Spike knows it. But he is worried about the possibility of a rival.

I am really liking Spike in this story. Thoughtful, eager, and friendly.

Is Starlight reformed by this point? I wonder if Dashing Cape knows about that or not. I doubt it would come up anyway, I'm just kinda curious.

Huh, so Garter Stitch specializes in lingerie... Dashing Cape is good with, well, capes... Oh dear heavens...

COMIC FANS ONE AND ALL! SEE TO THOSE TWO FOR YON COSPLAY COMMISSION WORKS!!!

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Thank you. I like to portray Spike as intelligent. He's still young, but he's no fool.

In general, I like to show what Spike and Rarity actually see in each othet. Neither of them is shallow.

The story's taking place mid Season Five, so Starlight is still an enemy.

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Yep. And yes, I'm going with the fan notion that the main use of socks, save in very cold climates and paired with boots, is as lingerie.

Yes, they could outfit cosplayers. And we know there are fan conventions in that world.:pinkiehappy:

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Thank you for the confirmation. I know chapter 1 addressed the timeline, but I still wasn't clear exactly how far past Post Traumatic this story took place.

I actually had another thought after my previous post. One of the more uncomfortable aspects of Spike's age is the question of whether or not he's emotionally mature enough for a relationship. It's a rather valid question, as many people that age simply are not. It's easily the part of Sparity that's the most eyebrow-raising. Yet, you seem to be showcasing that Spike is emotionally mature enough for a relationship. He's thoughtful, able to read the situation and the needs of those around him, and did not take to immediately disliking Dashing Cape. There were some unfounded fears which might have led to some negative feelings, but they were more on a subconscious level. From the beginning, Spike never came off as anything other than friendly to Dashing, and that says a lot about the little guy.

Now, that's not to say he doesn't still have room to grow. In canon, he has an unfortunate habit of being a bit of a doormat. I worry that he wouldn't be able to assert his own needs, should such a situation arise. Mind you, I might just be overthinking the situation.

Either way, this is easily one of my favorite showcasings of Sparity. I look forward to more.

Ah. Rarity will be very sympathetic to Dashing's plight. (After all, it's not like she was born with that accent, though woe unto anyone who points that out where she can hear them.) I wouldn't be surprised if capes made a surprise resurgence in the near future.

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Jordan's my first name. Is Jordan your first or last name?

oh wow he actually didn't want the succ

then again that might change later on


hmm

I actually had another thought after my previous post. One of the more uncomfortable aspects of Spike's age is the question of whether or not he's emotionally mature enough for a relationship. It's a rather valid question, as many people that age simply are not. It's easily the part of Sparity that's the most eyebrow-raising.

When Rarity first met Spike in the SWSV, he was 9-10 years old and still emotionally a child, though a late pre-adolescent, who was already starting to find mares attractive (as witness his early interest in Moon Dancer). Rarity quite reasonably considered his attraction to herself nothing but a childish crush, and -- given that he expressed it in a chivalrous and polite fashion -- found it endearing. She did not then expect it to last very long.

Years passed, and the attraction if anything grew as Spike matured. They developed a strong friendship, and each brought the other back from the brink of madness at least once, rather clearly using the Magic of Friendship (or Love, or both; it's not entirely obvious).

In SWSV Season Four, Spike turned 14 and Twilight Sparkle 21. These are milestones: Spike attained the local Age of Consent (and the one which all three of them: Spike, Twilight and Rarity, grew up assuming), and Twilight Sparkle attained her Age of Majority (making her, rather than Twilight Velvet, indupitably Spike's guardian -- though Twilight was effectively an adult from 17 on).

What this meant was that, legally, Spike could consent to sex with Rarity, and as long as Twilight Sparkle did not consider their keeping company a problem, Rarity would not thus be "corrupting a minor." Legally.

Morally, of course, things were more complicated. Rarity does not want to take advantage of Spike's relative innocence: the thought bothers her all the more because she remembers how Rush Rocks took advantage of hers when she was even younger than Spike is now. She loves Spike, and would hate herself if she hurt him. Also, Twilight would be mad at her for doing that, and Rarity very much values Twilight's good opinion.

Around late Season 4 to early Season 5 Rarity's perspective shifted, and she came to see her relationship with Spike as seriously romantic: a courtship (though not yet an Intention or Understanding, in Equestrian terms). The reasons why were Spike's increasing age and maturity; Rarity's own increasing emotional maturity; their deepening friendship; the awareness of her own vulnerability to magically-induced madness or emotional flattening (key points: Discording, going Nightmare, the Inspiration, Tirek, and The Sameness); and the key role Spike played in helping restore her sanity or morale on several of those occasions.

As of His Inspiration, Spike and Rarity are still not lovers in the full carnal sense, though they do sometimes make love, and even sleep together on occasion (that last is a sign of extreme trust on her part). In terms analogous to our culture, they go to around second or third base (keeping in mind the Pony anatomical differences).

Rarity is only this restrained with him because of his youth. If he were her age, she would give herself to him without hesitation. She loves him more than she has loved anyone else she has ever known.

My Rarity is a bit prudish by early 21st-century standards, but not by the standards of my Equestria. And my Equestrians would not be shocked by premarital sex between a seriously courting couple.

Yet, you seem to be showcasing that Spike is emotionally mature enough for a relationship. He's thoughtful, able to read the situation and the needs of those around him, and did not take to immediately disliking Dashing Cape. There were some unfounded fears which might have led to some negative feelings, but they were more on a subconscious level. From the beginning, Spike never came off as anything other than friendly to Dashing, and that says a lot about the little guy.

Spike is loyal to Rarity: he would not sabotage her intent. But had Dashing been a worse Pony or clearly interested in Rarity romantically, Spike would have carried them out with a less friendly attitude. He would have honestly tried to get Dashing to come back in any case: Spike is honorable.

Instead, Spike found himself liking Dashing. He reminds Spike in some ways of himself, in some ways of Rarity, and in some ways of Applejack (who Spike likes and respects).

Mind you, if Spike wasn't who he was, Rarity probably wouldn't be in love with him in the first place.

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Yes. Rarity's original dialect wasn't quite as far from upper-class Canterlot as Dashing's, but it was recognizably lower middle class. So a well-founded fear of being rejected for too low class or rural an accent is something with which Rarity can sympathize.

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My Rarity doesn't give random oral sex to visitors. I'm fairly sure this is true of vanilla canon Rarity as well.

Funny thing is there are like 4 other Jordan's I km w:derpytongue2:

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