It is the year 2552. The Covenant has just glassed Reach with many Spartans dying to protect the planet itself. Luckily, not all hope is lost. The newest batch of Spartan-IIIs from Gamma Company have just finished their training and are ready to take on the Covenant. One detachment of Spartan IIIs, as well as ODSTs from the 105th Shock Troops Division, are ordered to evacuate civilians in the city of New Birmingham of the heavily forested planet of Victoria. But when a Covenant cruiser performs a slipspace jump at the same time others start glassing, many squads are EMP'd from the sky as they flee and are teleported to a land filled with magical talking ponies called Equestria. How long will a group of augmented teenagers with sociopathic tendencies, ODSTs, and an Elite survive?
This is a Halo and MLP crossover, so some feedback would be very much appreciated 
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Few things to note: the first chapter is more of a way to introduce some of the characters and what they're like; the story takes place during Season 4 and may progress into Season 5, everything after Season 4 episode 5 (Flight to the Finish) hasn't happened yet.
I have to make up some non-canon Halo lore to make the story fit with an MLP crossover; my version of the Gamma Spartans is that they aren't injected with the illegal drugs after augmentations, because that would just make them too OP for ponies to handle 
; the story is third-person limited but the POV switches around from character to character;
Sh*tty cover art made by me.
Nice Been some time since I saw a decent it will fit here . Keep going
interesting
the story seems good, the narration is not rushed while there's a good level of description. Nice start 
Nice start so far. Favor and follow.
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Oh, thanks guys!
Seems pretty decent, the only area of possible concern is how your treating the SPARTAN III's having not read the novels beyond some info looked up on Halo wiki, the only SPARTAN III's I know of is Noble Team so it's hard to tell how your portrayal of Gamma company is. They seem a bit too human at the moment, but its only an intro, and even if it wasn't child orphaned drafted/shanghaied/volunteered into a super soldier program is always going to be a tricky thing to write. So I'll be watching with great interest.
6635844 I see, thanks. The only books that I've heard of and read which talked about Spartans from Gamma are Halo: Ghosts of Onyx and Halo: Glasslands. The next best place I could think of for finding anything about Gamma was the wiki. I'll try and work on their personalities a bit more.
^These comments have more grammatical errors than your story. It doesnt feel rushed, though I feel I can already see the future story, so a plot twist would probably be favorable in the future.
"For a newbie, you wrote pretty good!"
If you get the reference, your a true halo fan.
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and sh#t I don't get the reference XD
Thanks man
6635910 Ha, I get it!
So your in JROTC? Neat
Anyway the story seems cool and I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes
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but high school, ya know?
Yup, and thanks. I really do hope I get the next chapter done soon
6636459 do you have a specific rank of anything?
I'm in JROTC too and that's kind of why I followed you
Anyway I'm just a fuzzy right now but what about you dude?
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Oh, nice man. I'm just a Private, so nothing too special. Got promoted a few weeks ago.
6636645 nice dude
Anything interesting happen at your JROTC?
6636697 Eeyup, I'll actually PM you about it so people won't get tired of us having a conversation
I would not wish the SPI armor on anyone it's a piece of shit. the noble team had energy shields because of them being a spartan 3 spec ops team the rest not so much.
6638465 That's kind of why I gave them SPI armor: because it sucks. I honestly don't think many characters from MLP would stand a chance at first contact if I gave the Spartans MJOLNIR armor. And from what I've heard, most of the Spartan IIIs were issued SPI armor
ill give it a try
most halo pony crossovers tend to die of painful horrible indefinite hiatus
so good luck
You say it was a little boring in the beginning but not so. I like it, it shows that it will be a great story, and I will like to read more. Keep being cool.
6644759 Yeah, I've noticed that as well. As a high schooler, there's no telling if and when I actually finish this. I'll try and keep a decent upload schedule, such as every 1-2 weeks between Friday and Sunday.
, I hope you enjoy the future chapters, if they're successful enough.
6646159 Thanks man
6646530 Most daf. This will be good to see how the younger people will act with the ponys.
Got to say for your first story this is pretty good. The story did not rush like most. Keep up the good work.
The plot twists and turns.
I can't wait for the next chapter! I need MOAR!!!
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it'll be there, promise
Oh yes, I also made 2 Black Hawk down references. The first one is really obvious and the second you might only get if you remember the first half of the movie
Yeah, Celestia is now fucked. You messed with the wrong Spartan. Then you erase part of his memory? Just be happy that the GATE can't be destroyed. But what about the walls?
Are you prepared to die?
This makes me moist
In all seriousness this is looking good
Do I get to see a rescue mission conducted by the fearless 105?
I've got ideas on where this could go if you don't
I can't exactly say everyone would like them.. But as far as I know they haven't really been done much
6712555 Thanks bro
. I will in fact make a rescue mission, but I'm still figuring out how it'll be done.
Btw, I'm in my journalism class right now and the first thing I see when I open my story is "I'm moist". Everyone just looks at me as if I'm crazy. You just made my day boi XD
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your welcome dude!
I have an idea... If you wanna see it then just say
Also do you have a Skype? I think it would be easier to communicate that way
This was a great chapter. I really like how this is going, good work on what you have down. Can't wait for more.
6712642 I wish I could use Skype, but my dad is really strict about what I can and can't do on the Internet
. I mean, I'm not one of those people who can barely have any fun on the Internet (I can do a bunch of stuff), but you can kind of get an idea why he wouldn't let me use Skype other than with people he knows personally.
6713043 Thanks!
One last thing since one of my friends asked me about this: if anyone else wants to know what "The Elite" looks like, go on Google Images and search female elites/ female sangheili. They should paint some kind of picture in your mind about what she looks like.
6713512 well I still have ideas bro
Ideas that i haven't ever seen been done before
They might be interesting
I'm not too sure though becuase if I asked my Skype buddies the idea would be shot down immediately
Probably because it would be my idea
To anyone reading this, know that I edited this a tiny bit to change the Spartans' Army ranks to Navy ranks
6713679 safe search was off
;-; and I liked it ;_;
6782970 If that's about the female Elite thing... heh
Egh, I love dis. Work your butt harder and spill some more chapters!
Just kidding. Work at your own pace. Still love dis doe.
6791398 Thanks!
Pretty good. We still need to play Halo at some point.
6792255 Oh yeah! Inv me whenever you feel like it. I'll most likely join
Great work, long wait but this was wroth it. Keep it up.
This is pretty good
Sorry I haven't read it earlier...
I wonder just how that turned out for a horse with 4 legs and hooves rather than feet and 2 legs...
I can't see it working
Anyway good job overall it was really good
Also Wish me luck on mass inspection pls cuz that's happening like soon for me....
Huh, they just met Rarity.
Okay... Either she's running away from Twiliy, or Skylar sounds like Twilight.
Update plz, i need moar!
Ooooooh craaaaaaaaaaaap