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Nightmare Darkness


Art compliments goes to its proper artist. (Not me) original idea by PoorYorick on DA

Times are dark when the land is ripped apart by the disappearance of the sisters. Everypony seems to be out for themselves. Even the mane six have split to form their own houses. Equestria is Divided, and needs hope again, but who will that be?

Proofread by: Typoglyphic (who is awesome)

Chapters (13)
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Comments ( 39 )

why do this sound like an Skyrim crossover

6669340 ha I guess it could but trust me...no dragon born.

Twilight, what have you become?! :rainbowderp:

Twilight has lost her mind, and Rarity is cruel rather than generous.

I added your story to the Equestria Divided group if that's okay.

6919310 I don't mind I scored some great sorce material from that community so I don't mind at all.

Well... that turned dark very quickly...

6920810 Yeah. I'm fine with it... :pinkiecrazy: May the Laughing Mare forever haunt your soul...

You need an editor, there're a lot of grammar or spelling errors including basic stuff like using "your" instead of "you're" and a lot of the writing is an exposition dump but the story itself is interesting.

6922158 yea I'm looking for editors. Hard to find people who are committed to it.

This story is awesome, keep it up. :pinkiehappy:

Imagine how many times Hasbro would've had to bump up the age rating on MLP if this was canon...

Sounds like different lantern corps to me

Woop-de-doo, bacon mane is here.

Nice chapter. Can't wait to see whats next! I never figured out why this universe never sees much attention.

6988011 I hope you enjoy the next chapter, I wish more people became interested in it but thats not why I write. Thank you for your continued support :3

No problem. Just showing support. :ajsmug:

well those two will fall in love and make a tons of foals and die happy

6999758 Haha your already shipping eh? Well i do promise some romance for sure :3 but it cant be the main focus... After all Scootaloo has to escape...oops a leak in plot :rainbowwild: oh no!

Cant wait for you all to see the next chap. :raritywink:

There a few grammer mistakes but, I'm enjoying this fanfiction.

Twilight gave in too easily I think, but I doubt Rarity would be that mercenary as well.

It is a good story I must say.

I think I have understood it, but I still ask in hopes it still could be so.
Is this maybe a second Rarity, some kind of clone they are going to accept without messing up the characters personality, or is this really only all the main six doing their own thing to keep it simple.

“Exactly I can't do anything really so I do it anonymously.” Sweetie Belle said looking sullen.

While most ponies would be In danger for this I bet Bitchtress Rarity knows about this and finds it amusing.

Not many people have heard of it would be my guess

“It’s a diamond dog, commander!” he said. Applejack’s eyes widened, and she rushed past him, followed by Applebloom. Bounding down the steps, she burst out of the door to see Granny Smith fawning over the body of Big Mac. A black diamond dog stood beside them, looking up at her as she made an entrance.

No way Granny is still alive.

“What are the locations of the your house spies in our territory?” She asked with a smile. Scootaloo gave a weak smile.

There is no reason whatsoever to assume Scootaloo, a scout, would have that intelligence. It would likely be classified

Scootaloo is the head scout so she woul know classified information.

I guess. It just doesn't seem something rellavent to her job. She may have a way to access the information but it is very unlikely she has it memorized. I doubt the navy commanders have intimate knowledge of the air force. However I am likely...probably...definitely overthinking this as I overthink just about everything. That being said information as valuable as spy locations would not likely be givin to anyone who has no use for that intell, the less people who know the info the less likely for it to leak.

A shame this is a dead story. So much potential.

Darth Sidious approves this course of action, though he would disapprove of Cranky's loyalty to The Laughing Mare.

Yeah, I can imagine that.

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