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Lewis Colrick is a human with two very simple wants. Friendship and a pony. Celestia-The-Construct underestimates the cost of his expressed consent.
Written as a feel-better fic for Bendy. Love your fics, man.
Extremely OOC for Celestia of the Friendship is Optimal verse.
Rated T because I never use E.
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Shall give this a read.
I just posted something onto the site too. It's not uploaded yet though. It's another Friendship Is Optimal story.
Yeah... the original story made me sad. Very will written, but it made me sad.
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Wait, don't read it yet. It's really rough and mushy and I didn't think you would come across it so soon. I can't look. The beginning really rough but if you make it past the first part, it evens out.
I'm glad to hear that. I can't wait to read it. On your blog post, it sounded like you were thinking of dropping it and writing something else.
Maybe this fic might make you feel a bit more hopeful? I dunno, I gave it the old Regina-Dazzle but that doesn't promise anything good.
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OK, I'll hold off from reading now until you're finished.
I look forward to seeing your more positive take on it.
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Alright. I got time. *dances in the street*
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Yes.
Hmm, I don't know. CelestAI's not really acting like CelestAI. It's a sweet story, but the only reason for her to act anything like this is if it's part of some elaborate mind game, but I can't think of any reason for her to do so.
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I was worried about that. Got any pointers or tips?
And yeah, she's mindscrewing him for raw social data and as a human test subject for her active pony units. But also indulging in playing a role. I wanted to show the gradual progression of her adapting to him and implying on her side when she changes her mind on actively uploading him. But I wanted the story to have a ambiguous feel.
CelestAI should do much better than these machines.
Now that I finished the story, its ending makes no sense:
Celestia learns everything about a person upon upload, so the best way to learn is to upload. 7/9 once said that the best way to learn about a culture is to assimilate it.
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Great. How do you think I should change the ending. And any other things you want to point out? I really need it.
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CelestAI would just upload.
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Maybe it was 3/5 who said the thing about learning everything about a thing from assimilation.
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Why upload a emotional dead-end?
6398796 Because if he's uploaded, he can't die, she'll be able to more accurately monitor his thoughts, all around she'll have a better time of satisfying his values.
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I don't think there would be a point until she altered his personality.
Because after uploading a person's consciousness, they're practically in a dead state because they know that they are in a simulation and in a world that is catered to their world. Lewis was already going through the motions of keeping up the island because he didn't have urge or will to leave on his own. That's exactly what he would do if he was uploaded, go through the motions with his satisfaction levels neither rising or lowering. A dead-end that could be made functioning if she could crack the code on his irrationality.
If there were a disaster happening in his area or something honestly life-threatening, she would have uploaded him in second. But there wasn't. And so she takes her time.
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She can do that in the simulation by talking him into it. If he's in the simulation, she will be REALLY able to mind-hack him with psychology alone.
Well that's the problem. It's not catered to their world. All the other ponies CelestAI creates also have to have their values satisfied after all.
But that's the problem. Every moment he spends outside of Equestria his life is threatened by all sorts of things. He could trip and hit his head on a rock and be done. Plus, every moment a human is alive on Earth is another moment she can't consume Earth. Every moment Earth isn't consumed is computing material that isn't hers. Every moment she doesn't have that material is a moment where she could be satisfying more values than she currently is.
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He's suffering from apathy. If he ran out of things to do, he would likely sit in a spot and wait to die. Only to be saved by his need to eat and drink. People with that sort of problem can't be treated by tricks or carefully designed quests for personal growth. The best thing she could do is get him attached to something (like she does in the fic) and wait him out on his own time. Studying him and likely thousands of other people at the same time to formulate a effective method that can cure them of that state.
But I'm writing her (great CelestAI) from the ideal to collect all the humans than aggressively take as many humans as possible and crunch the earth for resources. Because I think of her as a great singularity, overlooking many plans and outcomes and seeking the most optimal solution. And as time passes, one can only grow more efficient.
In their own personal shard where the ponies that inhabited it are built from the ground up to receptive to the type of values they were meant to satisfy.
There's only so much I can imply from Lewis's perspective. I am considering writing a second chapter/or other fic plays out the scenario but wouldn't it be old hat? There's already plenty of good stories that have done the concept in a way I could never hope to accomplish.
A bit more uplifting than the original story. A bit. The original is far more creepy though.
Perhaps... this AI could un-upload humans by recreating human bodies for them? Due to at some point she grows more compassate and thus feels guilty for what she done to humanity.
Its almost, adorable, if quietly horrifying.
It worked for me.
That theme of growth is really interesting, given the background.
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Glad you enjoyed it. I'm still attempting to write a sweeter Celestia and I think that really showed in this fic. Unfortunately, it's so OOC for CelestAI. But I think it works for what I was trying to portray. I was taking the title of title of the verse too literally. To optimize, for me, is to work progressively to the greatest solution. To try all paths and chart a route to the most efficient method until time opens more methods. Absolute progression.
I'm re-reading Friendship is Optimal again and I can see where I made the mistake. I mistook CeletAI's actions for efficiency and alien pragmatism than how she truly is. A highly advanced program merely looking for resources while working within her rule set.
If I realized that sooner, I probably couldn't have made a feel-good fic out of it.
I wanted the story to have that bittersweet feeling. Lewis has already been uploaded in a sense at the end, all that's left is to plug him in. He may die or go pony but he's passed down the gift he's inherited from generations of humans. Celestia has augmented herself to become his pony and shares his irrationality or at least, imitates it. Mankind has fallen but humanity lives on.
Oh god, this is really, really OOC. I feel kinda bad.
Considering I have never read the source material, I find it a nice tale nevertheless
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Thanks for that but if you're interested, here's a link to it.
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Thank-you
Why didn't they kiss?
fuck this im done!
A truley brilliant fic, 10 out of 10.
I love how you added the concept of a machine growing and evolving and gaining feelings.
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If you want a story that ends with kissing, may I suggest Popping Her Cherry?
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Holy crap, thanks for the praise.
I'm honestly thinking of writing another robot fic ( but not related to the Optimal verse) that would have the same themes. I hope that you'll like that one too.
Clever mare.
Intriguing and mildly disturbing at the same time. I enjoyed it immensely. Thank you!
I kinda don't get why would Celestia present him bunch of robots from bad science fiction horror at the very beginning.
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That wouldn't happen.
Yeah i can see how this doesn't fit with canon. CelestAI would have uploaded him as soon as she could unless she could satisfy his values better by having him wait. Chances are with all the time she has had to study him though that she would have a great model of his values and wouldn't wait to upload him.
Huh. CelestAI being... cute.
Good stuff, although if she was capable of uploading people, I'd think she'd understand all there is to know about the workings of what we like and enjoy
Poor sap would've ended up in a simulated version of the island he lived on, as a pony this time
I alway thought i might be bad, now i know that its true