The Dazzlings haven't had any luck since their defeat at the hands of Sunset Shimmer, Twilight Sparkle, and the girls of Canterlot High. However, despite her humiliation at the hands of them, Adagio is starting to have second thoughts about humans.
So much so, in fact, that she has a conversation with one and can't keep him off her mind.
Planning to regain her powers, Adagio enlists the help of a student attending CHS. However, she soon starts to believe her own lie: that she can live among them and perhaps put her siren past behind her. Will she succeed or will those who harbor a grudge against sirens make her reconsider?
(This story takes place after Rainbow Rocks. No elements beyond RR or Season 5 are present in this fanfiction.)
Chapters (4)
Nice...Though dont rush the romance and the whole school being all ok with them but dont make them be cruel beasts like in EG Rainbow Rocks .
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I'll try not to Stephanie Meyer it, you can count on that. As for the the other part, it'll be LONG into the story before the school is somewhat okay with the Dazzlings.
Hmm...
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6607872 I shall. Later this afternoon, as a matter of fact.
Nice.
6613009 Vorpal Sword is the name of the OC belonging to my friend (who also helps me out with some grammar mistakes from time to time). In fact, I started writing this fic as a thank you for his help.
And trust me, Wonderland isn't the only literary reference you'll see.
I think I found another great story
6613967 I blame my editor on that one. He just loves filling things choc-full of references.
6614906 still, it got me liking Sonata a bit more now.
6614987 Here's to hoping she'll only be more likable as time passes.
6615093 no doubt about that.
I'm more hoping for the romance of Adagio to go well though.
Just a quick tip on dialog - something I hope will help going forward. You've got a few occurrences of this, but as one example:
Note that you have Aria's action in the same paragraph as Adagio's dialog. This is generally frowned upon as it can give readers a slight stumble in attributing the 'who' to the what's-being-said. I've heard some published authors, even, are notorious for mixing up dialog and action tags like this (the 50-shades author being one of them, I think).
I'd recommend re-wording it like below. Nothing in the actual text has changed. Just put Aria's action in the same paragraph as her dialog, instead of Adagio's.
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I meant to go back and read through previous chapters to find errors like this, but I keep putting it off. Thanks for bringing it to my attention. (...I sometime write these late at night, so that might have something to do with it.
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This is getting interesting.
Dr whooves is just like a teacher we had in our academy Dr ferrier he would shout the same thing if you called him mr
Love it completely! PLEASE! For the LOVE of all that is HOLY! Complete this story!