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Mochas Dungeon


My darker (fun) side resides here.

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well this took a turn. can't wait to see what happens next.

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life and love are full of challenges, their world should have problems behind the scenes just like ours does.

I imagine we see the icing while our imaginations make up the cake and fillings.

6037174 wow, that was one of the most view changing replies i have ever gotten. i salute you.

6038196 that was a great saying.You should copyright it:rainbowlaugh:

Comment posted by Mocha Star deleted Jun 7th, 2015

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So what do you think of the story so far?

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problematic?
Care to elaborate?

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Lol.
my wife who had no experience.

I've asked dozens of times but no one answers yet.
:/

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:rainbowhuh::rainbowderp:
still confused kind of but thanks!

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:rainbowlaugh:
I appreciate it.
Don't get me wrong.
I was expecting criticism is all.

Thanks bruh.
Our Chica.

Personally my largest concern is that I have a bad balance between show and tell and keeping their personalities in line

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interested?
In proof reading?

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:rainbowlaugh:
that's all you have to say after 6000 words?

That's it. I'm gonna make my own Equestria. With black jack.
and hookers.

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well, we'll have to see what happens together!

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I'm certain soarin will have learned his lesson and all well be fine.
Maybe he'll become the seventh element bearer!

:rainbowlaugh:
:rainbowwild:

Maybe not

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I'm politically correct.

Hoof bump.

:fluttershyouch:

hmmm, i'm interested to see where the whole accent thing goes. maybe she winds up having a brain issue that makes her think that the way she speaks is the norm?

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Wow. ..what an interesting view. :rainbowhuh:

Think it's psychological association or something like that. Psychology was never my strong suit. But as a guess her mind is subconsciously changing her to be closer to Applejack's ways so she will fit in more.

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peace doesn't mean the war is over on all fronts. ..

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Soarin isn't out of trouble just cuz Rainbow said they're cool. C'mon, this ins't some cheesy romance. It's the background of their world which is a lot less icing and a lot more ingredients.

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Well ya see when two mares who REALLY love each other. ..:twilightsheepish:

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Omg me to.

Here's the link, it's the first clop I read.

Here it is

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Be afraid.
Be very afraid

Ah what the Hay man!

I was all caught up...:twilightangry2:

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D'awwww, looks like you'll have to keep reading!

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The feels. ..
I'm sorry.
plot and all:raritydespair:

Wait how would Rainbowdash and applejack have a foal?
How dose that work...:twilightblush:

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:twilightblush:
Thanks, I didn't expect so much awe.

I just wanted a simple moment.

No drama, no anything. Only each other.
The true RD that lives behind the scenes with AJ.

:rainbowderp:

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Oh that's what you were goin for ok I be it now.
So rainbowdash as a stallion can't wait for that chapter.


Mocha, WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO ME! WHAT HAVE I BECOME AH THE CLOP FIC MAKE IT STOP CAN'T STOP READING IT!
WHY!!!!

*slams his still broken muzzle on the table agin, this time breaking the table and shattering what was left of his muzzle*

Comment posted by Sun Struck deleted Jun 29th, 2015
Comment posted by Sun Struck deleted Jun 29th, 2015

Um... in my opinion I think the subplots could be a little shorter:scootangel:

The hole thing about Scootaloo diapionted me I was hopeing for some kind of sacrafice from AJ or rainbow to carry a foal . Never mind still a very cute chapter

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It's not even close to official yet. :)

Don't fret, things will happen! !!

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Good because you still have to explain how that would work, and don't say next chapter.
You said that last chapter.

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