Epilogue
TWILIGHT'S POV
I waited at the gardens of Canterlot Castle, just in time for the sun to set. Luna wasn’t anywhere to be seen, so I just walked around for a while. Everything seemed like a dream, part of me unable to believe that Luna would have similar feelings.
A small noise made me jump up, just to relax immediately at the sight of Luna. She flew down to me slowly, the last signs of the sun shimmering through her feathers, making her look like a true goddess. My goddess.
She landed and I gave her a kiss, which she eagerly returned. My heart pumped loudly, it seemed it would want to escape my chest. As we broke, she looked up into the sky and I followed her gaze. Luna slowly raised the moon until it hung aloft, shining in the sky, surrounded by some magnificent stars. I looked closer at the stars and gasped, some of them shaping into my cutie mark.
“Do you like it?” Luna asked sheepishly.
“Like it? No, I don’t like it,” I said and Luna’s face froze, “I love it!” I added then with a small peck, brightening her expression again.
She just looks so lovely.
“I was afraid for a short amount of time. What do you want to do now?” she smiled a bit, looking at me awaiting an answer.
I would love to kiss you… feel your touch on me while enjoying your embrace…
I closed my eyes and smiled, not noticing that Luna had closed the gap between us. The only thing I noticed was a feathery embrace, making me feel deeply warm, then soft but firm lips pressing on mine.
I would love that too...
My eyes widened in shock, those weren’t my thoughts...
D-did I just hear Luna's thoughts? Did she hear mine? T-that’s impossible…
As we broke away, Luna smirked at me.
“You have to teach me this trick sometimes,” I said, still a bit unsure.
She gave me a small peck before replying, “It’s not a trick. I’m old enough to know some powerful spells, Twilight. I hope I didn’t scared you.”
“No, it was just interesting to hear you in my head,” came my soft answer while I brushed my wings over her side, “I love you, Luna.”
Luna unfolded her wings, touching mine softly, “I love you too, Twilight. Please forgive me that it took me so long to see it.”
“Don’t be. I should have waited and tried to control my dreams. What I did was stupid…” I replied, ears folding back
“Nopony can control their dreams completely, not even me, Twilight. Do you think we should make this official?” Luna smiled and took me into a feathery embrace.
Should we do it? At some point, we might have to. But for now we should just enjoy this..
I shook my head, returning the embrace, “There is time for that later. For now, I just want to enjoy us, together.”
She smiled at me. “I wouldn’t want it otherwise,” she said, then her lips pressed firmly on mine, hungry with passion and love, starting a small firework in my heart.
I wanted to never have this ending, and I bet Luna would agree. We were in unison, true love finally found.
So, that's that was the last chapter of my first collaboration, and my first TwiLuna fanfic, which I did with the wonderful, talented ScratchnTavi and was edited by the equally fantastic ForgottenExistance. I beg you guys, if you loved this story, go tell them that. Go follow them, read their stories, and tell them they're awesome! 
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I'm going to start with the nitpicks because I'm a jerk... (actually, because I tend to forget minor complaints really, really fast...)
The smallest one would be that you wrote in authors notes-thingy, who's point of view we're going to read, but in the epilogue, you changed that to simple text. As I already said, nothing major, it somehow just threw me off.
) I also would've liked to read a more elaborate explanation as to why she was able to break Lunas shields surrounding her room so easily. I tend to see Tia and Luna like Thor and Loki - one is a diplomatic stronghold, able to use raw power, if need be, the other seems more fragile first, but is kind of a trickster and a really experienced magical powerhouse... just like Twi. So I imagine it being quite difficult to break a spell made by Luna.
I would've liked to see more of Twilights thoughts here, especially concerning her reasons to fall for Luna. (Shouldn't be too hard to find some reasons, since Luna is... well... Luna, if you know what I mean.
With so much time given, I can easily see Twilight getting lost in her feelings for Luna, and I can see her crush growing into more, maybe even love, yes. But for Luna... although you managed her change of mind to be believable, it still was a little stretch for her to first be panicky about the whole mess and then throw a 'I love you too' out there. That being said, her change of heart altogether came a little too sudden. She's wandering around, wondering why she's thinking this or that, then she looks at some pictures and has some sort of... epiphany? And suddenly, she does everything to make it up to Twilight. I can see that happening - but I can see it happening in a dozen different ways. It feels like there should've been more explanation. Or more time to pass, more dialogue, maybe she confesses to her sister in the end and receives some advice, maybe she wanders the halls of their old castle, remembering how she completely lost it out of feeling rejected and alone, something, anything.
And the last point - although no real complaint - why was Discord there? Actually, come to think of it, it probably would've been hilarious to see more of him. Some sort of 'plan' of his. (Although I doubt that he even has something worthy to be called 'a plan'.)
With those nitpicks out of the way: It was a nice story.
I smiled a lot, I giggled from time to time and I had to read through without any break. I just had to. I especially liked your portrayal of Tia and her and Lulus way of interacting. It was interesting to get a little peek into their minds by just observing how they chose their words with each other in different situations.
Thank you.
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First off, the POV of the epilogue was not written in the A/N because I felt I wanted to dedicat the A/N to the wonderful people who helped me woth this.
The epilogue became short because of time pressure and lack of ideas. The hole point with the library scene, which I wrote, was to get Luna to
A) remember the delegates
B) Show off her hidden feelings for Twilight to the reader.
The spell breacking and stuff you'll have to confront my oartner about, ScratchnTavi. She wrote that part. But don't ask her about Discord, which she added to the story. She asked us not to.
I'm really glad youliked the story. The Tia and Lulu interactions was mostly a result of the talent of my partner ScratchnTavi, though! ;)
5628717
That sounds like you can only place one authors note, at the beginning or end of a chapter - am I right in assuming that? That's something I just didn't know about. Thank you for explaining, though.
5628681
It was a personal shield.
Means family, friends and such can enter. (At least in my opinion)
Twilight knew that and her strong love for Luna allowed her to simply pass through the spell and enter the room.
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Yes, you can only place one A/N. NP.
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Ah I see. An interesting idea. Some exposition to that would've been useful, though.
While I adore just about anything that is TwiLuna, I had to big problems with this story; everything moved too fast and some of the spelling/grammar mistakes were glaringly bad and kind of threw off the flow of the story for me. Other than that is was a lovely little tail that I wished could have been longer.
5727274
Maybe....
5727274
Thanks for liking it, despit the problems.
5989697 XD Great; now I will picture her doing that during the last scene.
6179676 Good question
what i hate about this story is that when it ended i wanted more X3
6189384 So you want a sequel? my writing partner have suggested somethign similare but there have been no time so far
6189394 lol i wish i knew that feeling X3
well it was the line, "nobles would say about such a behaviour" i would like to know what some of them have to say also i love to see there dating as both of them shouldn't be that good at making dates X3
6189945
Yeah, it is a good idea.... though we'll see if it'll happeb
6189964 i hope so X3
6190068 :)
6190074 cute X3
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Hope you noticed I colaborated (a lot) witht he oh so talent ScratchnTavi, who suggested the project and ended up doing a lot of the work
6572663 Oh well, as such, I have revised your poster for this project - although I get an error message whenever I attempt to go to his page for some reason.
6573038 I know you get an error message, its because he's named SpookyscrathnTavi (or something alike) for the Holidays
Well I'm a super dumb mare it seems.
Found a folder in docs with the name SmallTwiLuna and pondered days what the hay it is.
Now I figured it out.
It's this story...
Oh my...
I'm getting pretty forgetful these last days.
7791598 LOL It was soem time ago wasn't ti?
7791692
It was^^
We should do it again xD
7791703 Maybe
Love this story.