In the wake of a unknown person by the name of Anon-A-Miss, a Mystable page has gone viral after many students at CHS have discovered their secrets being posted online for the world to see.
They're all outraged and they think of only 1 person responsible.
Sunset Shimmer.
In attempts to convince her friends that she is innocent, they don't believe her. Leaving Sunset alone, helpless, and worst of all, friendless.
With the help from her mother, she'll get Sunset through these dark times.
FEATURED FOR THE FIRST TIME ON 03/05/16
FEATURED SECOND TIME: 6/22/16
It's probably gonna get featured every time I do an update so I'll just count. *squee* :)
THANKS SO MUCH! It's a dream come true for me! :D
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Story no longer available for adoption and will continue production, even if it takes months.
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This story was in collaboration with Rated Ponystar
Based on the MLP: EQG Holiday Special (Comic)
This story will contain spoilers.
Story may be tear jerking to some readers. Readers be advised. Proceed on your own risk.
Contains some cute scenes.
Gore tag added: Use of blood and some graphic imaging
Rated Teen due to use of mild( or extensive ) swearing.
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Chapter 1 is live!
i hope this updates often. it's a nice new take on the christmas edition. i like it
5569992 It usually depends on our time schedule.
But we'll try our best to add new chapters as they come.
5570017 i can understand that. i have a busy schedule too at the nursing home. i look forward to more
It's an okay follow-up to the previous chapter, although not as emotional. Guess death scenes are just even more depressing but that's a given fact. Anyway, I have a few problems with this story. Not that they ruin the story, just a few things that popped up into my mind while reading.
Also, I've never read the comic. Don't know where to get it.
Good to know she has more than one chest
Yeah, Fleur, you should have said something about this. I mean, I know you love Sunset and all, but it sorta raises the question on how the two of them talk to each other at home. Was she a prick at home too? Or did she pull a 180 ad acted like an angel? Hell, didn't the school ever contact Fleur considering how many students are being bullied by her?
Speaking of which, how did Fleur adopt Sunset? She wouldn't have gone to an adoption agency, so maybe she found her sitting by the side of the road all alone and homeless? Headcanon accepted!
Principal Celestia.
Your friends
Teenagers talk to their parents about this? I mean, Applejack and Rarity maybe, but Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy don't look like the type of teens that tell their parents about these things. And Pinkie Pie would probably have an evil revenge plan set up because Pinkie.
Apparently, police have nothing better to do. If the rumour was that she sold drugs, then it would have been more believable. But an addiction to painkillers doesn't seem police call worthy.
A cafeteria. Quiet. Sure~
Also known as "evil villain monologue hallway". But still, considering the bad memories she has of this place, I'm surprised she hangs out here.
Yeah, why were the CMC doing this in the first place? I mean, they aren't looking for their Cutie Marks. Hell, they should have known that they were hurting other people by posting their secrets online. What bullshit excuse did these assholes have that would amount to gossiping?! YOU MADE BEST PONY GIRL CRY, GOD DAMMIT!!
Wow, that came out of nowhere. I mean, I'm okay with Flash. I don't have any animosity towards the guy, but DAMN this really came out of nowhere. I mean, if her best friends don't believe her, why would Sunset's ex-boyfriend believe her? See, this is why I hate this christmas special. It makes no god damn sense!
I read that as marry. And boy, was that just weird.
Guess this must have happened after Trixie the Cockblocker ran away. But hey, I could totally see Twilight saying this! Even if it is a bit out of left field. Wonder what they were talking about that actually deserved Twilight saying this. I mean, at the Better Than Ever scene, he seemed perfectly okay with Sunset and later he was under the siren's spell. Meh.
THEN WHY DON'T THE GIRLS SEE THAT?!?!
You wanna know what would have made this better? If it was someone like Vinyl Scratch who comforted Sunset. I mean, it's shown that she doesn't really give a damn about what everyone else thinks and they are friends after the Battle of the Bands. You know, just to show that at least one of her friends is still there for her.
She asked Flash... to explain the situation.
Looked.
Back to my old habits.
The only character I found was Pokey Pierce, so either this is an OC or you misspelled his name.
Oh God, Sunset. You of all people should know that Celestia was under the sirens' control back then!
I don't know. She's crying, was beaten up, didn't try to defend herself, just managed to save her reputation, saved the fate of two worlds, and was actually happy. DO YOU THINK SHE'S ANON-A-MISS CELESTIA?! Also, you missed a question mark at the end.
Unless she wants to get suspended from school for not following the principal's orders, I highly doubt Sunset would avoid her.
All in all, a pretty sweet chapter although it doesn't really lead up to the whole murder thing. This is all building up to something depressing and I am just so terrified of what it is! Although a little cliche, I can see that you put some thought into it. Here's hoping you can write the next chapter even better!
Also, don't you dare do an asspull and bring Sunset back to life at the end. I want to see these assholes think about what their actions have caused! Poor Sunset...
5570777 First of all, I have to get this out of the way.
Achievement get: Longest comment NA (I live in the USA so yea)
5569848 Moving onto the story, I have to say that this is a great start to a dark and depressing fic. No complaints here, not even any constructive criticism
btw your profile pic is soooooo cute
5570946 Glad that you like the story thus far!
5570777 I'd say that your critique is fair. :)
I'll let them know about this.
Thanks for reading and taking your time to pick the chapter apart and point out things out of place.
-Shy
5572447 Even though I haven't read the comic, I still enjoyed your rendition of Sunset Shimmer.
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I do like this fic, but I must make it known that I also am not asking for an update any time soon. (at your convenience of releasing it of course
Anyways. This fic is a tasteful change in what I've been reading lately, which consists mostly of HIE and a tiny amount of clop. (Yes, I do read some clop, but I can understand if that's not to your tastes. I simply ask that you don't look at me any differently than before
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Howdy.
Some of you wonder, where is chapt 2? Its being worked on. But my schedule has been awful to me. It still is right now so it will be delayed. Nothing I can do about it. I appreciate everyone reading this story!
-Shy
Update it please! I love this story!
5609402 Thanks for the information.
Not a bad story so far. Though you need to elaborate on how Fleur De Lis became Sunset's mother, you can't just throw that in there with no context what-so-ever.
I'd like to point out that they could just report this to the police. Cyber-bullying CAN be taken as a crime when taken to this level, along with blackmail.
Just an update for everyone. I haven't had the time to work on the story. However, spring break is almost here! Which means it'll give me plenty of time to do things that I need to do.
School is really bugging me with homework and other crap. I'm sorry for the delay but I'm trying.
-Shy
5569848 please update!!!
Good news everypony!
I am now in the process of continuing with chapter 2.
With my writers block finally figured out, I found my zone to continue with the next chapter. Thank celestia for the blessing of stories right?
Anyway. Hopefully soon the story will be FINALLY updated.
Cya when it gets released.
-Shy
5770202 i was thinking it was writers block you had me worried that you wouldnt continue!
5775812 Well then you'll love the next one for sure. <3
1,000 views?!? Holy crap!
Thank you guys so much for reading, liking and faving the story! :) means alot.
Update on Chapter two. The rough draft was completed earlier last week, however, it still needs to go through final revision. I was busy during the wknd so I couldn't work on it. For that, I apologise. I know you guys are anxious for the next chapter. I promise I'll get it up soon. I can't promise when. And again, thank you so much for 1,000 views.
-Shy
Howdy Everypony.
*sighs* The next chapter is almost done. After going through it again and again searching for errors, mistakes and things we can change about it have been worked lovingly. With that being said, I super duper hope that I can FINALLY post it this week!
The drought is almost over my fellow students. Thank you all for your support!
-Shy
5892366 Editing always takes too long. I prefer publishing my chapters with an "unedit" sign and correct them later.
5898679 if you don't edit and fix your mistakes, you could end up posting things that your readers may not like which will draw attention away from your audience. Bad bad thing.
Ladies and Gentlecolts, I bring you, Chapter 2!
Enjoy! <3
Dem feels...
Finally found something dark and enjoyable to read today.
5899486 Yay! <3
Ha, it updated while I was reading ch 1
5899272 BRING ME ANOTHER!!!
Keep going! This story is awesome!
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5899738 Thanks. Means alot <3
5899865
Hope that you will update soon. One of the best stories that I like to read. I had waited for a long time!
Something I noticed is that sunset shimmer never actually confessed to have a breaking up the humane five using the falls text messages and such originally.
For all we know, Apple Bloom and the other cutie mark crusaders ended up breaking them up for the same reason: petty jealousy.
Er, how would that work? It's a combination lock, you can't pick those with a bobby pin.
I'm eager to see how this will lead to the tragic events described in the prologue
5900075 I'd guess using it as a shim, but bobby pins are too thick to use as a shim for most combination locks
In other words, your daughter, feeling alone, helpless, and increasingly isolated, is essentially being approached by five people who are fully aware that they wronged her and want to atone for their mistakes and rekindle their friendship, which is pretty much exactly what Sunset needs right now and your response is to kick them to the curb out of spite...Never let it be said that loving mothers can't make big mistakes.
Definitely worth the wait.
5900314 You will see in the 3rd chapter. Don't worry.
5900075 Well, even combo locks can be hacked into with a bobby pin. (Depends on which kind). If anyone that would try it, it's Rarity. I thought I could be a little funny and write that since Rainbow can't get it to open. Bobby Pins do infact have those little ball shaped things on the ends.. take those off and then they're good to go.
That's the only thing that struck me as strange but this chapter was still full of feels and I can't wait to see how it turns out already
5900912
How though?I can't figure out how you could get a bobby pin(or anything) into something like, this
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There's no where to get it in.
5901362 Some lockers are different than others. As it wasn't this particular lock. There are more than one type.
5901483
I know, that was just the first thing to up when I google 'combination lock'. I've never seen one with any gaps big enough to stick any kind of pin in though.
I kinda get why Sunset Mother turned them away, her daughter is hurt and hurt badly.Seeing them like that may of made things worst.
I don't think Sunset could forgive them so easily as well, and alot of trust was lost, trust is hard to gain and harder or easy to lose, and they lost it.
They need to do everything they can to prove themselves and find the real culprits which i know who it is since i read the comic.
Sheesh those three are Sooo going to be in trouble!
In the end I see them saying to Sunset she doesn't have any reason to trust them, so they have to take one day at a time.
I also want to see Principal Celestia crack down hard on the students for hurting Sunset, and to prevent the real culprits from getting the same even if they are asking for it.
Maybe goes as far to press charges on the students who been assulting Sunset to drive the point in.
No More!
glad to see this story updated was worried was abandoned so glad it was updated!
This fic is going great, and I can't wait for the next chapter. One issue though:
I'm sorry, but I can't imagine Pinkie, not even a sad Pinkie, talking that way. To me, that's not how she talks.
5923020 One of those we had planned before, but tbh that would be irrelevant and harsh.
As far as Celestia cracking them.. I'll think about it.
Ik and I felt bad for having people wait so long but real life will get in the way and I am responsible for chapters that are marked for me to write.
I will not publish crap chapters. Period. I want to provide a good story that people will like. I can't stand seeing people upset. I hate to fail.
5923327 I thought so too, but from previous ficts that I've read that are like this one, I had the idea to write that.
5924040
I've read lots of fics like those, and not just about Sunset. Heck, I once read a fic where Pinkie says "Therefore". Since when does Pinkie use that word?
I'm sorry, but that seemed pretty out of character for her.