They don't need me.....Pinkie pie, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Rarity and even Fluttershy plus everyone else at Canterlot High. They don't need me....they hate me.....they won't miss me
I should just leave.
Sunset Shimmer is miserable, lonely and heartbroken.For everyone, including the Mane 5 have accused her of being Anon-a-Miss and they now all hate and despise her even though it is not her doing. Even when the original Anon-a-Miss confessed to her and promise to tell everyone, that still won't change for her. So Sunset decides to take things to her own hands.
Set during the Equestria Girls Holiday Series and when the real Anon-a-Miss confesses to Sunset personally instead of in Sugarcube Corner with the Mane 5.
Chapters (11)
The writing tense is very confusing, and hard to understand. Otherwise, this seems pretty interesting so far. though I really feel like Sunset Shimmer should be more upset with Apple Bloom for what she did.
I'm liking this so far. Can't wait for the second chapter to see what happens next, and what Sunset's gonna do next, after withdrawing from Canterlot High..
Is she going to go back to Equestria?
Hmmm, the mystery thickens.........
WHERE THE NEXT ONE....WHERE IS IT!?!?!
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Hehe
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Oak thanks for the comment!
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You'll find out!
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Coming soon
5730932 Good, 'cause I can't wait!
What a twist from the comic! What will Sunset do? Where will she go?
that was amazing! Sunset is telling the truth and now she's gone! You might want to put the rest of the "Quotation marks" on the speech parts. Other than that I'd suggest putting more details into the scenes like what people are doing, actions they take during speeches etc. Nice work so far.
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Okay thank you very much for the comment.
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You'll find out!
Well, the human five realize their mistake now. But is it too late to put things right?
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Maybe...
Hmmm, what will happen next I wonder?
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Something
I wonder who Sunset's "friend" could be?
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Mystery!
*prologue
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Thanks!
Let me guess it's pony Apple Bloom?
Still don't know who that mysterious figure is.
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Also your short description is a little weird... might want to rethink your phrasing.
GAH!
WHO!
CURSE YOU CLIFFHANGERS!!!!!!
GASP! I know who the mysterious masked ne'er-do-well is! It's...! *falls over asleep*
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Hehe you'll find out!
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Someone!!!
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Will do.
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Soon!!!
Hmm...judging by people's reactions to her...is it one of the Dazzlings? If it is Id say Sonata, she's be the first to reform
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Hehe SHHHHH!!
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Hehehe
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....Mystery!
I believe that hooded figure is Twilight.
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Hehe maybe!
What did Sunset's pride of lions ever do to anybody?
off*
Superfluous Has
Blergh, there's a bunch more errors but I'm really not in the mood to clean up after people who can't be bothered to get their stories properly proofread.
Anyway, wouldn't it be easier for Twilight to pay a visit to CHS and give everyone a stern talking to?
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http://bronies.wikia.com/wiki/Mystery_Mint
Great, now you ruined the surprise.
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Thank you for the corrections as I will be more careful with my spelling in the future.
Also if Twilight just comes over like that then there wouldn't any story to tell right?
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Also...not that mystery...
Busted.
My guess is either Twilight, or Discord.
I like the story so far, but I suggest an editor to help with the many grammatical errors here. I think my biggest criticism is when Celestia was referring to Sunset's friends as "the Mane 5". First off, using the number "5" looks odd in writing. I suggest just writing out the word "five". Secondly, but more importantly, "Mane Five" is a fan term. I can't see anyone in-universe referring to the girls using that term; it wouldn't make sense. Sure, we know who the Mane Five are, but a character in the story likely wouldn't, and a character using the term in-story pulls me out of the story. I suggest simply using terms like "Sunset's friends" instead.
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lol
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Yup
Busted!