Dash spends a whole day with her little sister Scootaloo.
In the awakening of a giant snowball that Equestria has ever seen thrown by yours truly, causes Scootaloo to be pushed through the freezing water. Rainbow Dash dives in risking her own life to save her little sisters life. She now realizes it's a matter of life or death for both of them. She realized that just how important Scootaloo really is in her life.....
and why she doesn't want to lose her either.
Thanks for the cover art!: http://otakuap.deviantart.com/ Credit for cover goes completely to Otakuap!
Chapters (1)
Id highly appreciate responses and criticism on the story. Im likely going to write a epilouge?
At least their both still alive.
Nice story, you've earned a fav.
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Yay!! :)
But in all seriousness, great job. Can't wait to see the epilogue
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*Breathes in as much as possible* "Yay!!!!!!!!!!".
Another story is on the way. Stay tuned.
Soon for the last chapter of this story to be made.
4956085 Can't wait!
P.S. That exchange is one of the best in the series, if you ask me.
4958695 Exchange?
4959021 Y'know, where two characters exchange bits of dialogue?
Hey readers!
If you read my story, I'd highly appreciate opinions, criticisms and anything else you have for me!
Thanks for liking and faving the story! :)
Also, don't be shy and share the story around to other bronies. I would love for the story to be a success.
May I point out a few inconsistencies, First of all. When they get out of the water you first say that they are lying side by side, in the next paragraph though dash 'runs over to her'. There are others making it really hard to picture. I love the story, but it is obvious you are a young writer. Keep up the good work.
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Waaaat. I didn't even notice.
Ty for pointing that out. Maybe I should fix that
4970824 i thought it was awesome
5245917 Thanks.
I've been too lazy to finish the story. An Epilouge was supposed to come out a long time ago... I just don't have the time.
5246193 you don't need an epilogue its fine where it is as long as Scootaloo doesn't die from hypothermia I'm OK
One hell of an awesome story
