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Just a guy who only recently got into MLP: FIM. Saw the first few episodes with my niece and nephew and wanted to see more.
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Thank you for making another fanfiction about No More Heroes,is hard to find in here.
I really like and please continue.
*reads description* Hmmmmmm....
Okay i am not sure about how much i can like the story in the future, but it got me somehow excited, at least they could probably visit both worlds if Travis should really start a romance, maybe with Pinkie. I just don´t like farewells everytime, but this is really crazy and mostly funny, i liked that game really much, even if i didn´t played the second game yet.
Sadly i get bored very easily with some games if i play them to long, and stupid as i was i sold that game.
I really want to read more.
edit: is he still a Human right now?
5556832 Sorry if I spoiled the ending to the second game for you. I didn't really think that they would visit Santa Destroy, but that may not be a bad idea. Maybe one of the assassins could be attacking from across dimensions or something? As for the romance part: I haven't really decided which one will stake her claim for Travis. But rest assured, one of them will pick him up. And to answer the part about Travis still being human: no, he is now a peach colored unicorn.
I'm sorry but this story just depresses me. The writing's not God-awful, but it's enough to make me cringe and feel embarrassed that I'm reading this. There's barely-noticeable points of mix-up here-and-there, but noticeable all the same. And it's enough to make me sad, not really mad, but just sad.
And why is there zero fighting in the first chapter? I despise those stories that 'save it for later'; and you especially can't make that claim with this kind of game, seeing as how NMH opened with an awesome fight, followed by another awesome fight after a short introduction. I came here expecting a NMH style adventure, so I'm expecting Travis to kill someone within the first act, not spout exposition and remind us what happened last time (as well as generally make stuff up).
And lastly, the first boss isn't all that likable; he's kinda generic bad-guy in a suit with guns that yells like a maniac. Kind of like a jacked-up Dr. Peace if Dr. Peace was an ass and unlikable. He's ok I guess, but the problem is that bosses make NMH what it is, each one is unique and great. Hell, the first guy you see him fight is Helter Skelter; he's amazing and he's just a cutscene. And it never falters after that; Death Metal, Destroyman, Harvey Moiseiwitsch Volodarrskii, Speed Buster. They're all great, for the most part, so you really have to go above and beyond for that area.
So, to sum it up, in addition to the minor errors, it just lacks that Suda charm; and because of that I just can't condone it, even when it is the only NMH story on the site. Sorry.
5557509 Yeah, sorry man. For the first draft, I actually did try to emulate Suda 51's style, but I hit a pretty serious snag: I'm not Suda 51. Problem is that it's difficult to emulate guys like him, or Hayao Miyazaki, or Tim Burton, or basically anyone who has a very distinct style in the way that they write their stories. And as for the first boss, I just ended up making him an amalgam of several different characters and real people like Deadpool, Frank Boothe, Duke Nukem, Handsome Jack, Howard Stern and Dennis Hopper. Sorry that I disappointed you, but there is a pretty good NMH story called NO MORE PONIES on this site. If you can't find it here, just google it or something. Maybe that one will suit your taste.
5557061 okay, thank you i wasn´sure what i understood right there, but he is a Unicorn okay.
I have watched all the enemies befor, so you don´t really made a huge spoiler, don´t worry.
However i think the story can be really interessting, and i think there was a dream fight in the second game, so why should there no attacking from across dimensions? You coud schock the main six with several noobs, which tries to kill Travis in his own Home or something like that.
Because the story is just starting, i don´t have a real wish, but of course i continue to try to get a Crossover shipping, that i don´t have seen yet. To be honest, i think i won´t really complain, but i think as long as Rarity isn´t like Bad girl i can´t think of her and Traivs to be together. (I hope i don´t ruined that sentence there)
I have nothing against Rainbow Dash, but i think it depense on how you would write their relationship, i don´t like it that Vinyl and Rainbow Dash are mostly after the sex. Travis would probably not comlain i know, but in other fanfictions, Rainbow and her partner, have 2 or 3 times sex day-to-day. I think some things are overdone, i have nothing against it, but it would be funny if it is someone who doesn´t really want to have sex to soon with the eager Travis.
5559373 I was thinking, maybe you could make it the way, that Travis have to recharge his Weapon (that could be something for a comedy tag maybe), and because of that he maybe would need to fight the first time with Luna and Celestia, they could shield him as he recharge his weapon. I now he has maybe has a killer instinct, but he has to get used to that Body in one way, maybe he can jump and something like that, but he should have no full controle.
Corrupt Element assassins? Hoo-boy, Travis is gonna have one helluva time.
This cheater was awesome. The action was great and the humor, particularly the ponies' reaction to Travis recharging his weapon, was hilarious. Hope to see more chapters soon.
I just hope you don´t make a boss chapter after the next. I would say there should be a few normal chapters befor anything like a new boss appeared
It was funny as they thought he would jerk of, but was he? THe first moment i thought he just reloaded his weapon, but then again he said he didn´t need to do it.
5590899 Never fear. I'm working on two more chapters now.
>Travis trains Spike and Rainbow Dash
inb4 Shinobu comes to town to deal with competition
I really hoped he would not go directly towards another fight, and that we would see a bit normal stuff too, but well...
Somehow it seems that i hate Spike with any kind of power, well he is not my favourite character, but it could be worse. I try to never judge a story because of this.
Sorry, it is not only because of Spike, but i don´t like this chapter very much.
I don´t know what you have planned for the story, but i would say you should make a view normall chapters too, i mean not just timeskip and a serious battle afterwards. If the story should be like a battle every chapter, and a sudden ending, then i think i can´t really get a good connection to the story and a romance would not feel right probably.
To be honest, i hate timeskips because some things don´t work if they are suddenly there, and even if i don´t like Spike, i don´t believe that he would be able to fight against anything strong that early in the story, with only one or two weeks of training and no real experience.
I can say that i like the new assasing at least. For me it would be important to have at least a few chapters for his first days in Equestria, i think it was to soon for a timeskip.
Awesome fight. It was funny watching Spike learning Lucha liber and getting Twilight get pissed at Travis for letting him fight a hydra. I also found PP's slight crush in Travis, particularly the way she protected the cupcakes, to be hilarious. It was a nice chapter.
They took the hard route taking down that butterfly. Whole thing could've been over if they just had a big ole' boot. Or a flyswatter.
This chapter was the most tragic one. I admit that a Peaches and a Cream were a badass duo, given that they technically defeated Spike and Travis. Hell, the fact that a Spike could keep up and incorporated his flames to his sword was amazing. Still, as a twin, I found it tragic that Travis actually managed to make Cream doubt her sister so much to perform a murder-suicided and Peaches' last words along with the girls traumatized reactions to the events was sad. On the other hand, I found it funny that Pinkie adopted Shinobu's look and started to flirt with Travis...her jealous reaction at the end made me laugh. Overall, this chapter was great.
5724263 Aw, dude. Sorry if I made you a bit sad, but this chapter did kind of come from the fact that I'm the black sheep out of my brothers. They both listen to folk music and indie rock, I listen to punk rock and heavy metal. They both enjoy playing sports, but I'm more of a low impact kind of guy. The differences between us go on, and frankly, it's kind of a downer when you know just how different you are from your own siblings, as is the case with Peaches and Cream. Glad you liked the chapter, though. Get ready for the next one.
this is going to be a really short story right? I thought this would be a bigger story, but till now it looks like
1. Chapter arrival
2. Assassin fight (with timeskip about any kind of training)
3. Assassin fight (probably the same) i still have to read it
4.Assassin fight
5.Assassin fight
6.Assasin fight
7.Assasin fight
8.Assasin fight
9.Maybe final fight or ending.
I can´t say if it is going to happen like that, but it looks like it right now, and i don´t like it that much.
I don´t hate your story, but i hate the idea that the story could be a nonstop fight till the end and then it´s over, i would miss a bit slice of life in those chapters
Maybe you answered already at my last comment, which was more or less about the same thing, but i didn´t got anything, so i thought i ask again, because i don´t really want to read it, if this is goint to be just fight and fight, and then the end.
5725147 Didn’t you read the Author's Notes? The next chapter is going to be Travis's daily life around Ponyville. I did read your previous comments, and I decided that you were right about slice-of-life chapters being important. And it's not going to just be one chapter, it's going to be about three or four. More if I think of something good.
5725285
you mean this? I am not sure, probably not, but it could be that i just forget what you have written too, because i read really much at the moment, but sometimes i don´t look at the notes, because half of the time there isn´t always something important in other storys, or at least not everytime.
The third option is, i just didn´t noticed it, but because i don´t know it anymore i can´t tell you what it was.
Well i believe you, sorry if i jumped on conclusion to say so, to be honest it is going to be still a bit weird till i read the next chapter about his normal life, but i give it a fair chance.
ohh you meant this, sorry but i didn´t read this chapter till now, i wanted to write this comment because i noticed it was already the third fight.
It feels still a bit weird that Spike is more or less already able to do damage to those more than well trained killers, but then again Link could be 2 years old, he would only need a sword a shild, awesome clothes, and then hsi own Ganondorf that he could kill.
Funny ending, even if i wasn´t quite fond of the idea about another fight after the last one, i have to say this chapter had his moments.
I think you managed it to make me enjoy Pinkie X Travis. (Trakie? i am not convinced about this short name of the shipping, but i thought i could still mention it.)
I am still no fan of Rarity X Spike, because i like Rarity, but not everything about Spike, and because i think they don´t fit that good, but the main reason good be (for this story), that i am not that fond of super Spike and his muscle of steel. I think i am a bit to realistic in this story, but i think it is to odd that Spike is getting strong that easily, he should still loose against most of the assasins, and be only able to fight against lackeys. I guess after half of the assassin he could start to have someone that could be weak against his fighting style or something like that, but Travis should do the most.
I would like to see Rainbow Dash fighting again, i think that he would win is a bit more realistic, but maybe Pinkie could start to fight too, random Assassin Power activated or something like that, and suddenly she has learned Shinobus Sonic....slash?
Where is harem ending?
I liked this chapter. It was entertaining watching Travis mess up every time he and Pinkie had a chat, especially with the way used the 4th wall to know about his feelings for Shinobu. I also found it hilarious how AJ and PP kicked Travis out if their places and the dream scene between Pinkie and the pastry Mane 6
5753793 Sorry dude, this isn't that kind of story. Although maybe Dash's feelings for Travis may show through a bit more. I actually haven't decided yet.
I loved this chapter. The interaction between Travis and Pinkie was hilarious, especially when they both threaten a guy and when they make out. Likewise, I enjoyed RD's jealousy and her desire to claim Travis. Overall, this is an awesome chapter.
i look forward to the next chapter ^_^
>A perfectly average childhood
Yea, pretty much average.
Wow, RD really had a lousy day despite all of the impressive efforts she made to catch Travis' attention from the makeover to the sexy dancing to the fight with thugs. It was saddening watching her get heartbroken. On the other hand, I enjoyed Travis and Pinkie's interaction. It was funny reading so many innuendos in their talk about sundaes and Pinkie finally realizing the hidden meaning of Travis' swords activation.
5851767 Doesn't that happen to every kid growing up? But seriously, maybe I should go back and try to convey that Travis left that part out.
Awesome chapter. I really liked the fight between Gina, Travis, AJ, and RD. It was pretty entertaining.
5877600 You seem to be a fan of the action scenes, so could you tell me what you liked about the newest one in particular? I'm asking because I took inspiration from a new source instead of my usual ones. I just want to know what resonates. Pre-emptive thank you for your feedback, sir.
This chapter was short yet sweet.
John Wick isn't bad ass..... he's the guy you send to kill the fucking bad asses.
This chapter was great. Travis fight with the army of mooks was entertaining, especially with how pissed Travis is at them for interrupting his first nookie and with Pinkie, of all people, finding out that violence is her fetish. I think I know the identity if the mysterious Pegasus. Anyway, great chapter. I hope the next one comes soon.
5942687 Just imagine what John's business card could say.
5942797 Just curious, but who do yout think the mystery pegasus is? I'm not going to say if you're right or wrong, but I just want to hear what people think as they bite their nails off in unbearable suspense.
5944093 Henry
Please please please please please please PLEASE be Sir Henry Mother Fucker! I miss that Irish punk!
Pinkie hit the jackpot in this chapter. The fight between Travis and Shinobu was great.
Eh, I was hoping for Sir Henry Mother Fucker, but a man can dream. The fight, however, made up for it in spades!
5968819 Dreams do come true...eventually.
I really found Pinkie's competition with Shinobu to be hilarious along with Rarity's differing opinion about casual clothing. Keep up the good job.
I laughed at how battle hungry/horny Pinkie got.
6001991 Peaches and Cream touch you on a personal level, but when Shinobu has possibly the worst day in Equestrian history, Pinkie getting horny sticks out in your mind? Twisted, man. I joke of course. I laughed too.
The fighting scene with Pinkie was awesome. Especially when coupled with the fact that Travis and Pinkie go from kicking each other's asses to making out in an instance.
Took away a chance at becoming number one?
It's either Henry (If he's the villain, I'd be pissed, but YAY HENRY!), that guy Henry killed at the end of No More Heroes, or New NEW Destroyman (because BS)...
CAN'T WAIT FOR DRAMATIC REVEAL!
6027367 I'll throw you a bone this time: no. The master planner is none of those. As far as I've decided, Ermen Palmer is still dead (although it might be an interesting easter egg if he appears in some form), and I never had plans to involve Destroyman (because seriously, fuck that guy). And as for Henry: he is not the villain. That is all I'll say about him.
6027726 Wow, for the first time in a long time, my theories regarding stories have been debunked... Bravo to you, author, you accomplished something where many have failed.
6028357 (Takes a bow)