When Sonata Dusk walks into Sugarcube Corner during Pinkie Pie's shift on a Friday afternoon, it seems like a normal, routine event like with any other customer.
When Sonata comes back the next week - and the next - and Pinkie eventually asks her out - it's more fun than the colour pink or warm caramel-fudge swirl.
Neither has any idea what they've gotten themselves into.
This is a minorly-altered canon (but probably not entirely alternate universe) fic in which Pinkie and Sonata meet two weeks after the Fall Formal and five months before the Battle of the Bands. Some artistic liberties with the Rainbow Rocks movie have been taken, but with caution to keep close to the original plot, and so this story is rife with movie SPOILERS for anyone who hasn't seen it yet.
A special shout out to my dear girlfriend Cynthia for not only providing some BEAUTIFUL cover art for this fic, but also for reading along and providing moral support as I wrote, and to Monochromatic for helping me through the process of publishing to FiMFic for the first time!
Nice start. The descriptions and writing style are varied and well done, and Pinkie feels in character. Not yet able to say much about Sonata/rest of the sirens. The pacing is on the borderline to a bit too fast, but nothing problematic.
Pinkie Pie and Sonata Dusk shipping?
1. Someone's finally doing this! (I can't remember if there were earlier stories)
2. Yes, I'm totally there!
This story gets a
I like this story already. have a
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PLEASE update this story.
That Pavlov reference, heh. Win.
Sonata Pie! Yes!
Oh-ho-ho, I think I'm gonna like this one,
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I hope so!
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High-five for Sonapie!
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As someone pursuing a degree dealing with psychology, I just couldn't resist.
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I'm glad you like it! I'll have the second chapter (of
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Thanks! I really love Sonata and Pinkie together, so I had to do something about it, naturally!
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Thank you! The pacing in the first chapter is a little fast, I agree, but it's mostly for set-up purposes. I think it evens out in chapter two.
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I can tell I'm going to LOVE this...
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Oh, I hope you will! Stay tuned for more!
I like the concept and this is not an at all bad start. The romance is a little fast, but that could just be because you skimmed over everything but their first (and second) meeting and their sort-of date. You made up for this by throwing some intolerant people in there. A lot of writers around here seem to forget that homosexuality isn't okay with some people and isn't so common that characters should handle it as if they are just discussing the weather. I hope there is at least some minor shock from some of Pinkie's friends when they find out, even if it's only a little surprise at discovering her sexual orientation before congratulating her nonetheless.
Here's hoping you update regularly and actually finish the story; both being traits that are becoming exceedingly hard to find on this site.
Yeah, what she/he said.
I love this! And no, I don't think the romance is going too fast at all...
Just laying her head to rest against pinkie's shoulder is just one of those slightly ditzy and awkward things I'd imagine Sonata would do in such a situation, without considering any possible romantic consequences no less.
I imagine her to be a somewhat impulsive person
Keep this ship sailing right and true, captain, and you have yourself another loyal reader.
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Thank you for your input! As a matter of fact, the story is actually already finished, so updates will be regular and consistant. Since the story is finished, I'll definitely take all this into consideration for future stories!
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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoy and don't find the pacing too fast! I do agree, I see Sonata to be a little more on the impulsive side, haha.
Definitely worth following! Have a fave and like!
Ooh, the plot thickens! Looking forward to the rest!
Hm, yes. Just as you said, the pacing evened out. The developing relationship between Pinkie and Sonata is sweet, and your characterization still fits really well. And kudos for not turning the other two sirens into stereotypical villains, but having them care about Sonata without unreasonably trying to sabotage her fun, just showing concerns because of their plan.
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Too cute!!!!
LOVE IT!
So many italics!
On a serious note though, very good chapter.
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Thanks! I look forward to sharing the rest!
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Thank you very much for your feedback! It's especially great to hear appreciation for my handling of the Dazzlings' interactions; I could go on and on about my personal view of the Dazzlings' relationships with one another, but I hope my writing does the talking for me, and does it justice.
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Thank you!
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(And thanks!)
This chapter may be the one with the most italics, but don't quote me on that; I could be wrong.
5565501 but I hope my writing does the talking for me, and does it justice. Trust me, your writing does plenty of justice.
Oh, no, this is so super sweet that it's gonna hurt really bad if/when everything goes to pot,
So, are you editing the chapters now if you're already finished writing the story?
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Oh, goodness, thank you so much. You have no idea how great it is to hear that.
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You might even say it's sweet as pie.
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Yeah, I've been doing a lot of editing and re-editing between posting chapters.
Great job, but i am a little confused. is this basically a story that would be if the dazzlings hadn't done the stuff they did int the movies, or is this just before?
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Thank you! And to answer your question, the chapters so far take place some months before the movie - and we'll get to the actual movie events in a later chapter!
This is cute
The emotions are strong with this one.
Noooooooo. Get back there!
>nooooooo.avi
Darn, you went with the cliche of all of Pinkie's friends being perfectly and completely accepting of her being a lesbian without even a smidgeon of surprise. It's done so much on this site, treating homosexuality like it's exceedingly common, that I was really hoping you'd try something a little more realistic. Oh well, it was still a good chapter; now I'm wondering if the next one is going to skip ahead to the events of the movie where Pinkie is stuck doing battle against her old flame or if it's going to about depressed Pinkie trying to find out what went wrong.
Also: Curse You! When you said you had the story done already, I thought you were going to put the whole thing up quickly. Instead, you're making me wait three days between each chapter. Editing is all well and good, but this was like dangling a sandwich in front of a starving man and then pulling it away.
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Haha, I find it kind of funny you refer to it as a cliche (I suppose, if it's a common thing here, it would be, though) since in media, I usually find the opposite to be true. And, truthfully, I suppose I naturally went with my own experiences as a lesbian: I have a solid group of friends who didn't really think twice about the fact I preferred females romantically and otherwise. Yes, I've known people who have been surprised or even disapproving, but those people were not the ones close to me like Pinkie's to her.
Which isn't to say it couldn't happen like that. Every person's experience is different, et cetera. I just didn't easily see it happening like that within the (Hu)mane 6/7.
Trust me, though, I went back and tried to put something in after your initial comment, but it just didn't fit well into the scene and it felt better to perserve a more positive reaction. I don't get to see that represented enough with my own orientation, and I really just had to go with what felt right to me here.
TL;DR, it is something I'll keep in mind for future writings, and I thank you for your feedback in that regard. And thank you for continuing to read!
Also, re: putting the story up quickly - I did briefly consider it, but the finished thing (before I started edits) clocked in at about 25k words. It might be more now, or maybe it's still hovering around there. It's a lot to put up all at once. Gotta give it time to really sink in, right?
I might do more updates near the end, though, but we'll see how that goes!
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Yeah, it's funny how that works; how a cliche for fimfictions is a rarity in other places, but you have to admit, there are way too many lesbian relations in this fandom to be realistic. Like, there are multiple stories where all six elements end up pairing with each other, and I can't help but think; what are the odds that six strangers who meet up one day out of the blue will all be gay? I've read pieces on this site where the only heterosexual relationship shown is that of the Cakes, and I wonder where all the foals come from in Cheerilee's classroom (probably a pretty big sperm donation/artificial insemination program in Equestria).
In the case of this story though, I'll just imagine that since the HuMane6-1 have been friends for awhile, that they all already know each others sexuality and hence no surprise here when Pinkie tells them she's been seeing a girl. After all, it seems like something that could be revealed during a slumber party or Valentine's Day or something.
5573956 You my friend are very welcome.
Sonata, NOOO!
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To me, the whole "omg you're a lesbian? Oh noes, my worldview has been turned upside down"-thing has become somewhat of an overused cliche on this site (and then again, I have no problems with that either).
In this case I can easily imagine Pinkie having always been open about herself and her sexual orientation to her friends.
Just my opinion though.
5579754 I don't really think everyone accepting Pinkie's sexuality (or even making a fuss about it) is in any way out of character, or cliche considering the setting. The pony world, and its human counterpart for that matter, are highly idealistic, and while not completely free of drama (interpersonal conflict), they don't bother with pointlessly caring which gender someone is or is not interested in romantically.
5579825 Nice to hear you had good experiences with your own sexuality.
On the chapter: Descriptions are still wonderful, and the writing is nice and flowing. I especially love the cuddling.
Now, just please tell me you have someone in mind for Adagio.
Edit: Accidentally submitted the comment before I was done.
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But Sonata and Pinkie were getting dirty looks while on there date earlier. Anyway, people seem to think I want more fimfic's where a member of the Mane6 is intolerent or something, which is not the case. I don't expect any of Pinkie's friends to ever be upset about her being a lesbian, but I do expect a little surprise when first finding out (which, as I stated earlier, the girls probably already know in this, so their reactions are fine).
"Heya Pinkie, you alright? You've been more out there than usual."
"Oh, sorry, it's just that I've been going out with this super-duper girl lately and I'm really happy about it."
"...Wait, ya'll are into girls? Since when?"
"Since like, forever, silly."
"Huh, well don't that just beat all... So, uh, what's this girl like, besides super-duper I mean?"
"Oh, she's the greatest! She's nice and sweet and super beautiful and she won me Gummy and she can sing even though I haven't heard her yet, and, and, she's just the best!"
*Whistles*"You got it bad, Pinkie. Well, she sounds like a real swell gal; I'm happy for ya. You should bring her around during band practice or something so the rest of us girls can meet her."
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Well, I can't personally agree that there are too many lesbian pairings (especially in a series with a large amount of female characters) because those are my biased favourite types of ships and I do have a lot of them (yes, including omnishipping as you mentioned, haha). Of course, these things are more edging on a matter of personal preference than anything else.
And, overall, my feelings about those pairings aren't what matter here because this isn't about those pairings: it's about Sonata and Pinkie.
Regardless of whether you want to read into that in this story or not (anything else is only hinted at enough that you can take it or leave it, just as you might take or leave some hugging between characters in the canonical show/movies), I did imagine the girls probably already had an idea that Pinkie would end up with, well, another girl!
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Your opinion is appreciated! I'll admit, that's not a trope I personally enjoy playing with, even if it wasn't what Kind of Brony was talking about.
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Yeah, that's another point that's kind of been at the back of my mind: idealistic, but not without the odd pony (or person, in this case) out. Such as the mentioned people giving Pinkie and Sonata "unfriendly" looks on their walk to the park; no specifics about what they meant so the reader can fill that blank in themselves.
Also, thank you! I'm glad that the writing has remained nice throughout so far.
As for Adagio, there's some hinting to a specific pairing I have a weakness for a little later on. But there's also been some hinting to another pairing (or, well, an OT3, as it were) I like already. But--well, goodness me, I like a lot of different pairings!
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Overall, this topic is one that's got a lot of varying yet valid points to it, and ultimately, it comes down to what the writer feels fits best with their work, which a reader might not always agree with, and that's totally fine! Could I have done something similar to the example given in Kind of Brony's comment? Yeah, probably! Was I thinking along those lines, even when I went back to edit? Admittedly, no.
Maybe consider an exchange like that some bonus material from a freshman year sleepover. Or even a fall semester sleepover. Who knows! The possibilities are endless, and that's the beauty of not filling in every detail of a story.
I don't want to come across as invalidating anyone's opinion; these are just my thoughts on the matter and the thought process that went into my story. And I do appreciate all the feedback! These are the kinds of things that get an author's gears shifting and ideas formulating.
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Is it Sundagio? Please tell me it is Sundagio.
Well, if there have been some hints towards a OT3 pairing, I might have missed them... I'm gonna imagine it is TwiRariDagio. Or TwiSunDagio!
Welp indeed. The continuing care the sirens show each other is still a nice change of pace to the usual "All sirens except the one involved in the pairings are evil and stupid and evil again", and it is more explicitly stated here.
Also kudos for Pinkie's part, and how her confusion is reflected in the writing. A rarely seen, yet very nice way to show her quirky personality without turning her into a "lol random"-spewing joke.
Pinkie is in for a disappointment. Can love win?!
I love the story so far (except for the fact that the ship kind of annoys me), but I was wondering if the alternate universe tag was required. So far, the story is cannon. Is the story going to branch off eventually, or is the story going to stay cannon?
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You ever appreciate someone's appreciation for things? Because I seriously appreciate your appreciation for the Dazzlings not hating each other. (I think that's what I'm getting from you, anyway.)
(Insert some personal sappy feelings about how much I love the Dazzlings as individuals and as a group here and just can't see them really, truly hating one another.)
And thank you again for your lovely comments; they always brighten my day and make me feel wonderful!
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Stay tuned to find out! (Eight chapters to go . . . !)
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You know, I kind of debated that while I was getting the story ready to be posted. The events will deviate from movie canon to an extent, so I erred on the side of caution and put the AU tag. It's hard to say how much exactly, though, without spoiling the rest of the story/the ending.
Should it not deviate enough, hopefully my readers can help guide me and I'll remove the tag if needed!
Aww, and it was going so well too.
This is such a sad, sweet story, cute and heartbreaking all at once.
Conflict is gonna happen.
It's going to be like Romeo and Juliet
You two poor dears... so close to each other, yet so far.
The three sirens really make a nice group of vitriolic friends. This chapter shows them in greater detail, and it is just as nice as expected.
It will be interesting to see how the connection between Sonata and Pinkie will change events. Also, so far I have not detected any background ships. The magic of love needs to sweep in to save the Dazzlings from villainy!