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yellowstripedflutterbat


Hello! Just your average, somewhat shy English mare who ships things, occasionally writes things and very occasionally finishes things. Fluttershy and Rarity are best ponies <3


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Very nice. It is always nice to read a continuation of our beloved pony stories and this does it quite well. The playful banter between Rarity and Applejack is right on queue making the continuation of the story flow. Bravo!

OTP fluff? yesh:raritystarry:

also

“Yup, you were and I didn't,” she replied bluntly, but with a grin that let Rarity know she was forgiven. “But I know you're sorry, and besides, I can think of plenty ways you can make it up to me. Don't forget I still owe you that plowing lesson - especially now that I know how much you looove being covered in mud.”
Rarity shuddered at the memory. “Can we please file that under 'things never to speak of again'?” she begged, starting to smile too despite herself – Applejack's poorly-concealed chuckles were inconveniently infectious. “Although I suppose now I at least have the outfit for it.”

I think I might have a dirty mind:twilightblush: HURRY UP ROLL THE NEXT SCENE

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XD I know right... ended up with a few more double entendres than I intended :raritywink:
and thank you! I'm happy you liked it ^_^

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thank you so much! Happy you liked it :pinkiehappy:

5348734
Yay, thank you so much! their banter is something I really wanted to get right, so I'm really glad you liked it :twilightsmile:

5349034 you're very welcome

Hillbe #8 · Dec 5th, 2014 · · 1 ·

"Hi ya AJ , Whasup? Mind if I cut in?":moustache:

"Sure enough little pard":ajsmug: "Knock yourself out"

"Oh, precious Scales":raritywink: "can you dance?"

"Princess Celestias school for reformed dragons" :moustache: "Fleur dee Lis and Fancy Pants ran a dance / Royal diplomatic function class"

"Oh Spikey you're full of little surprises are you not?":raritystarry:

"SPIKE !":facehoof: "Full of is right"

Cute continuation,

This was surprisingly cute and low-key. I clicked on this randomly from the group notification, and was surprised I wasn't disappointed.

It's good to see some new folks trying their hand at writing shipfics. :twilightsmile:

EDIT: My god do I ever praise with faint damns. "HEY I DIDN'T HATE YOUR STORY GOOD JOB I GUESS". :heart:

Good rarijack has been hard to find lately. Thanks for this!

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XD That's okay, I understand what you mean - it's always kind of a gamble clicking on something randomly, so I'm happy it didn't suck! :raritywink: thank you~

5349292
you're very welcome, it's my pleasure! Thank YOU for reading and commenting :pinkiehappy:

5349172
...I think that means you liked it, so thank you! :moustache:

5349330 SURE DID thank you:raritywink::moustache:

Daww, how adorable! Rarijack will always have a little sector all its own in my heart. :twilightsmile:

5354146
Thank you so much! Happy you liked it it :pinkiehappy: aww, I know right? They're just too cute :raritywink::heart::ajsmug:

Both Problem Child movies really takes me back. :ajsmug:

5355688
...wrong thread? Or is there something I'm not getting here :twilightsheepish:

I really liked reading this. The dialogue in this was really, really good; Rarity and Applejack both felt 'right' (for whatever that's worth), the prose was great too.

I'd give this a big ol' 10/10.

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Thank you so much!! :raritystarry: I'm really happy you liked it and especially the dialogue/characterization since that's really important to me :pinkiehappy: (especially AJ since she was the hardest to write for me so I'm glad she felt right to you!)

5358651
No problemo. As much as this worked as a one shot, solo dealio, I wouldn't hold it against you if you wanted to keep it going (In fact, I think I'd kinda like it.) Either way, I'm sure whatever you do next is gonna be great.

Good luck.

Thanks so much for writing this. This episode was probably the worst in all MLP, so it's great to see something nice come from it. I think you captured all the personalities perfectly, Rarity and Applejack were perfect and Trend was the usual selfish git that he is (I know you said you weren't bashing Trend, but come on he's a total git and you caught that perfectly).

Maudity this is not.

Love it, I still did :D

I'm not big on this ship, but I'd take this cruise sometime again:ajsmug:

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my pleasure, thank you for reading and enjoying! :twilightsmile: lol, I must admit I agree about Trend...I mean he could probably be a decent pony one day with some character development, but yeah, I wanted his selfish-gittiness to come across without being OOC/exaggerated from what we saw in SW, basically :raritywink:

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And very happy this makes me! :pinkiehappy: thank you very much, always amazing if people like stuff outside of their usual shipping preferences~ :ajsmug: (I don't think I'm articulating that too well, but yeah hopefully you know what I mean XD)

5356032 A reference to a movie from a long time ago, one that made me laugh my ass off.

5368320
ah okay, awesome :raritywink: was there any particular bit reminded you of that, if you don't mind me asking?

5369107 I guess it might have been another story. Thought it was this one but I think I got mixed around.

5369524
oh right, no problem! Was just curious :pinkiesmile:

Comment posted by Asashi - Dark Fist Inari deleted Dec 12th, 2014

5369668 Whoops meant to say Problem Child. Honestly both of those movies still rock despite the age length on them.

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cool, never seen then - will have to check them out sometime! :pinkiehappy:

5377227 Go for it, you'll love it. :rainbowwild: The kid starring in those two takes "Devil Child" to a WHOLE new meaning. :rainbowlaugh:

This is magnificent. I can't believe how well you managed to develop Rarity in such a short story; it felt really au naturel :raritywink:.
I got feels from reading this.

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I see what you did there :ajsmug: but eeee, thank you so much! I'm really happy you enjoyed it~ :raritystarry: And feels are always what I hope to produce :raritywink:

nopony (Pinkie Pie) with their tongue stuck to any of the ice sculptures again...

That only works on metal in frozen environments. I've gotten wet hands stuck to a metal rack in a freezer before, curious.

Applejack did look divine in that gown. The fabric embraced her athletic form in the most flattering fashion possible, the shades of fuchsia and teal a bold but inspired choice.

<heavy breathing>

“Just don't you be gettin' any ideas, okay? I'm not gonna go letting you braid my mane or anything – this is strictly a business decision. A one-time offer.”

Applejack's more of a practical girl. If dressing up helped her she would certainly do it more often. As it stands she does like dressing up, but she doesn't have a real reason most of the time.

Rarity was just another in a long line of mares vying for Trend's attention.

The same exact situation as with Blueblood. Difference is Blueblood was a jackass to her and drove her away. Is anyone going to tell me that was not his intention all along?

she wasn't helping herself with the stereotype of country folk being a little dim at times.

Pinkie and Rainbow are the ones who are dim at times.

they began to move together, swaying with the music.

That would be rather awkward if dancing partners were not interested in each other.

“But, now that I'm here,” she murmured softly into Applejack's ear, “I'm glad I'm with you.”

Applejack's gettin' laid.

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Huh, I didn't know that about metal! It just always happens in TV with ice so I was just going for comedy, and it seemed like a Pinkie-ish thing to happen XD And I agree that Applejack would definitely dress up more if it helped her, but I don't think it's something she particularly enjoys (Look Before You Sleep) as its own thing. Also, the "a little dim at times" wasn't saying that AJ is dim (she's probably the most sensible of all the M6!), just a joke along the lines of "country folk are often written as a bit "simple" " . Maybe I didn't make that clear enough ^^;

Thanks for reading and reviewing! I appreciate it :twilightsmile:

Not usually one for rarijack, but this was really good. :twilightsmile:

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thank you! I'm really happy you liked it :pinkiehappy:

*gets to the end of the story* Now kiss :derpytongue2:

Really though, I think it's a good sign when at the end the audience wants more romance between characters. Very cute, and well done :twilightsmile:

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That is indeed the response I was hoping for! :derpytongue2: thank you so much, really happy you liked it :twilightsmile:

ah wooooow this fic is gorgeous!! i hope you write rarijack again sometime, you have a great handle on both of their characters and their relationship.

:raritywink:

5831957
aww thank you so much!! I'm super happy you liked it :twilightsmile: I'd definitely like to write Rarijack again sometime! They're just too perfect together~ (and so is your username :raritywink:)

Gosh this was so sweet and so, so well written. The way you made rarity go from still being hung up on what had happened with trender to not caring about him anymore and instead reestablishing her selfesteem was so nicely done! Both rarity and applejack are wonderfully in character and their interactions are simply adorable and quite funny. This story made my day, I'll be sure to check out more of your work!

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