1011576 One of your words is incorrect- the rest, well... The question is, which is the one word that's not correct? "I predict" count as 'correct' in that I'm confirming it... except for that one word...
I was feeling pretty rotten just after I posted this- another fic (that still has many grammatical errors, after 75 chapters and 895 upthumbs and 1198 faves and 4416 comments DAMMIT BLACKWING) updated right on top of mine, and immediately got the feature box because clearly 246,439 reads are not enough to express its genius, right? right?
Not that I'm bitter
But that pony writes his way and I write mine, and he's got his crowd and they're happy.
My crowd is goin' INSANE. I should apologize, exceptin' I'm not sorry because your hysteria is what's tellin' me I'm not wasting my time- and more importantly, that I _cannot_ just get discouraged and quit without finishing. I'd get plumb lynched if I dared try that.
It ain't by accident, all this. It's called momentum and settin' things up to go off like a trick-shot or firework display, all convincingly and with style. You gotta trust me because up to the last minute you won't know what the fuck, and that's on purpose. I welcome speculation and will even play with it, but all I'm prepared to reveal (in public OR private- yeah, I'm getting private messages begging for reassurance too) is that the OTPs are AppleDash and Twixie. That's never been a secret. I should be able to tell you that and STILL the tension will jes' about kill you. Twixie comes down to a last desperate and brilliant attempt at rescue, and AppleDash comes down to five words. Just five words, and until you hear 'em, you'll just have to trust me.
Thank you more than I can express for the various freakouts- I'm exhausted and discouraged and a lil' bit starving and though I wish I had lots of attention, what I really care about is MASTERY.
And I'm building tension on purpose towards a few meant-to-be-devastating climactic moments (which is no mean feat) so the reactions tell me it's working- and in many ways that's more important to me. Love you
1012141 We be lovin ya too, Ajinx, but seriously. So. Bucking. Evil. At least, from what I can derive from that post, Twixie will stay Twixie. Cause that is the most important thing about this story. The AppleDash is meh, I kinda like the RariJack, but whatever works for you. As long as Twi and Trixie stay together.
Let me guess, Luna takes both Twilight and Trixie? I'd hate for that to happen, and if you must make Luna take Trixie, make Twilight's last words to Luna before they part as enemies something like "Just know this, you monster, unto my dying day, my dying breath, I will hate you for what you have done. You once wished for eternal night? Well now my dream is for eternal day! For your cursed moon to never again glare upon Equestria, and for you to rot in the same hole in which you imprisoned Trixie!"...Or something like that anyway.
There is some video clip somewhere- I can't find it, can't even work out what the hell it was, but I know I've seen it somewhere on something.
It's a guy watching sports, more and more on the edge of his seat, more and more frantic until his eyes are about popping out- and then, SAVE! He can't believe it. He's punching the air, going 'GHHH! NGGG!', flipping out- his nerves can't stand how close it came, whatever went down just about killed him so rather than just cheering 'yay' he's a shaking wreck, flooded with triumph and thrill of victory but pretty much incoherent and ruined for the day.
What the hell IS that clip from?
If it doesn't sound like fun- you got a couple-three chapters to persuade me to write a less exhausting ending...
ALS- never said that was the word, as obvious as it might seem...
Trust between reader and writer is as delicate and lovely as a soap bubble, and I've been happily trusting you since that first chapter of "Trixie's Magic Bit," lo, these many months ago. That you know what you're doing echoes from just about every sentence, and I'll be drinking 'em in for as long as you're tapping 'em out. In other words, you're doing good, hoss. You're doing real good.
1012141 I. Share. Your. PAIN! Seriously, if I see one more crossover with a video game get in the feature box, I will start tearing out hair. I would swear that a fic cannot be featured unless it is a crossover with a video game. Which is doubly frustrating since I wrote a VG crossover. I guess I just didn't pick the right one. Or maybe I should finish it. ... Nuts to that. I'm too deep into my current story to do that. But yeah, what's worse than that? Try a poorly written story getting featured. Or at least, one that is riddled with grammatical mistakes and misused words (it's make DO, people! not make DUE!). Yeah, I'm a little bitter, too. ::takes deep breaths:: Okay, I'm good. All better now. Don't ragequit, no matter how tempting that sounds. Just remember to wear your sunscreen. I mean, don't give up hope. You'll get there someday. Okay, so the story. Good use of suspense, dude. Poor Trixie getting suckered in like that. She needs to just shut down all communications with Luna. Don't even acknowledge her existence. Let her come in, do what she wants, but don't give her what she wants. Let her do all the work. The time has come for passive resistance!
I like how Dash is developing on the journey, which is being done very well indeed.
The complexities between Luna and Trixie, the inherent battle between love and fulfillment being played out there... just wow. The best part for me, at least, is that you manage to get me, as a reader, to see through the eyes of the characters so well that the battle rages inside my own heart and mind as I read, and that is very powerful.
All of this leaves me a pile of conflicting desires for the characters, something I find very interesting. Usually, in any given story, I find something I can focus on as what I want for a character, what I desire to happen to them or for them. It is usually concrete and singular.
But in your writing, I oft find myself conflicted, wanting or fearing multiple things at the same time for any given character or characters, which adds a level of emotional complexity that, frankly, I cannot recall feeling from any other writer. And by any other writer, I do not mean just FimFiction, but my past fifty years of devouring books, the immense library that is my home. You have a rare gift, Applejinx, and I am very impressed by it.
Because I know the world, I know you will never be properly appreciated nor rewarded for the incredible talent that you possess. That is grievous, but... that is our world. At least know that I am in awe of it, for what that is worth.
This chapter is interesting though because even though it takes her even farther from a Luna most of us would be comfortable with, it actually improves her in my eyes because it took what I saw as being a straight-up villain and set it to this very genuine idea of Luna the ancient, the powerful, the regal. Luna seemed malevolent to me because she, unlike Celestia, is a jaded immortal. And like I said--that's FAR from a Luna that it's easy to be comfortable with, but damn if it isn't interesting and exciting.
Example--I didn't like her being desperate and such, and getting Trixie to actually like fucking her required some really Luna-class manipulation and mental gymnastics. I scratched my head a little at this scene, and then at the end you vindicated me so hard it made my head spin. Holy crap. Chills, I tell you. I was practically pissing myself with excitement over that entire ending bit with Luna showing off how hard she outclassed Trixie. Luna might be taking second place after Rainbow Dash for characters of yours that I love.
Not that this means a whole lot, you've lost me hard on Rarity. Her being bitchy about making breakfast for Rainbow Dash was cute, but in some ways she doesn't seem terribly interested in trying to stay friends with Dash.
I understand that her being humorously over-concerned with things like Applejack's speech mannerisms is in-character, but it just feels inappropriate. That's the main reason you've lost me on her; you're playing her as strict-canon Rarity and compared to how everyone's acting all around her that feels like flattening her.
Don't think I have any words that really do this story credit. I haven't been able to read a chapter of this lately without tearing up. Its so incredibly PAINFUL to watch them suffer like this, but I got to, GOT TO, see the end, because they will be stronger for it.
I always feel dumb writing these comments. How many times and different ways can I say this is amazing before I have truly run out of things to say that carry any meaning.
Luna is treating Trixie like a pet so perfectly its horrifying. Replace sex with bellyrubs and/or petting, and Trixie is the same as a cat or a dog is in every way. Luna controls her food, water, and even her air, but its okay becasue Luna loves Trixie and even through Trixie will die long before Luna, Luna will make sure Trixie is cared for and happy and will remember her fondly. It's horribly benign and loving.
Don't be down, Applejinx. There are a lot of people--myself included--that truly enjoy what you are writing. The views on my stuff have gone down lately, too, but I'm okay with it because I remember that I'm not doing this to be popular. I'm doing this to tell a story. I'm not perfect, but all I can do is try to get better and give something that people can enjoy. And if one person gets something out of what I've written, then I've succeeded.
And you've succeeded, because I get a heckuva lot of entertainment from your stuff. You do a great job.
(And hell, if popularity was a sign of quality, then 50 Shades of Gray would be Nobel material...)
I'm trustin' you too, AJinx, even if my heart is breaking for poor little Trixie (TRIXIE of all ponies!) I just keep seeing all the ways that this could get worse, and each one is worse and more heartrending than the last, but I'm clinging to your promise that things will be better in the end, and hoping you hold to it just as strong.
1018608 And Stephanie Meyers would be the next Shakespeare.
I'll take the quality any day, thanks. To be honest... you could almost consider it a badge of honor that you've got the fans you do. Not because of the quality, but because of how many elements there are in your stories that most people will say "I'm not gonna read this, it can't be good!"
Basically... one thing I've learned in *coughs* years of writing adult material, particularly extremely kinky adult material (and, for most people, that's what a lot of this is, I'm sorry to say), and ESPECIALLY well thought out kinky adult material, is that you shave away your potential audience at each of those levels.
But it makes the fans you get all the more precious, because you know that they're the ones who've got the special combination of perversion and intelligence to really 'get' what you're trying to do.
One of my favorite quotes is from Joel Hodgson, when asked about all the obscure jokes on MST3K, "I never worry if people are going to get the jokes. I know the right people are going to get the jokes."
I get Applejinx. I love his stories. And I am grateful for the people who get mine.
Applejinx! You got to read the latest chapter of my story, now I wanna read the latest chapter of this one! More Trixie-spanking please!
You've got one of the more fun BDSM relationships I've sat down with any anticipation to read. It might not be a perfectly happy or mature relationship but it's certainly entertaining and that's what counts in fiction.
I didn't read all the comments, so if this was addressed, I'm sorry.
I think Luna needs to keep Trixie, and train her. Have Celestia re-train Twilight, or re-wire her brain, and go from there. Mayhap have Luna let Trixie walk around Ponyville, just for giggles.
only Just found this story the other day. Heck of a job you're doing Applejinx, this from someone who normally likes seeing Trixie win in the end.
Wow, princess sex? Poor Dash, poor Twi, poor Trixie...I can't believe I just said that... Well, things have been a total shitstorm for long enough, let's start the process of making things happy again!
I predict Twilight makes them both her kinky love slaves
Every time I read a section with Rainbow, i just feel the heartbreak. I cannot wait to see the eventual (hopefully) resolution and return to Applejack
Poor twilight. When she finds out, her heart will shatter.
1011576
One of your words is incorrect- the rest, well...
The question is, which is the one word that's not correct?
"I predict" count as 'correct' in that I'm confirming it... except for that one word...
OH FUCKING COME ON! Again, swear to Celestia, I will break you if Twilight doesn't get Trixie back. Break. You.
I was feeling pretty rotten just after I posted this- another fic (that still has many grammatical errors, after 75 chapters and 895 upthumbs and 1198 faves and 4416 comments DAMMIT BLACKWING) updated right on top of mine, and immediately got the feature box because clearly 246,439 reads are not enough to express its genius, right? right?
Not that I'm bitter
But that pony writes his way and I write mine, and he's got his crowd and they're happy.
My crowd is goin' INSANE. I should apologize, exceptin' I'm not sorry because your hysteria is what's tellin' me I'm not wasting my time- and more importantly, that I _cannot_ just get discouraged and quit without finishing. I'd get plumb lynched if I dared try that.
It ain't by accident, all this. It's called momentum and settin' things up to go off like a trick-shot or firework display, all convincingly and with style. You gotta trust me because up to the last minute you won't know what the fuck, and that's on purpose. I welcome speculation and will even play with it, but all I'm prepared to reveal (in public OR private- yeah, I'm getting private messages begging for reassurance too) is that the OTPs are AppleDash and Twixie. That's never been a secret. I should be able to tell you that and STILL the tension will jes' about kill you.
Twixie comes down to a last desperate and brilliant attempt at rescue, and AppleDash comes down to five words. Just five words, and until you hear 'em, you'll just have to trust me.
Thank you more than I can express for the various freakouts- I'm exhausted and discouraged and a lil' bit starving and though I wish I had lots of attention, what I really care about is MASTERY.
And I'm building tension on purpose towards a few meant-to-be-devastating climactic moments (which is no mean feat) so the reactions tell me it's working- and in many ways that's more important to me.
Love you
1011998
I'm with you on that one man.
1012141 We be lovin ya too, Ajinx, but seriously. So. Bucking. Evil. At least, from what I can derive from that post, Twixie will stay Twixie. Cause that is the most important thing about this story. The AppleDash is meh, I kinda like the RariJack, but whatever works for you. As long as Twi and Trixie stay together.
Let me guess, Luna takes both Twilight and Trixie? I'd hate for that to happen, and if you must make Luna take Trixie, make Twilight's last words to Luna before they part as enemies something like "Just know this, you monster, unto my dying day, my dying breath, I will hate you for what you have done. You once wished for eternal night? Well now my dream is for eternal day! For your cursed moon to never again glare upon Equestria, and for you to rot in the same hole in which you imprisoned Trixie!"...Or something like that anyway.
There is some video clip somewhere- I can't find it, can't even work out what the hell it was, but I know I've seen it somewhere on something.
It's a guy watching sports, more and more on the edge of his seat, more and more frantic until his eyes are about popping out- and then, SAVE! He can't believe it. He's punching the air, going 'GHHH! NGGG!', flipping out- his nerves can't stand how close it came, whatever went down just about killed him so rather than just cheering 'yay' he's a shaking wreck, flooded with triumph and thrill of victory but pretty much incoherent and ruined for the day.
What the hell IS that clip from?
If it doesn't sound like fun- you got a couple-three chapters to persuade me to write a less exhausting ending...
ALS- never said that was the word, as obvious as it might seem...
1012141
You gotta trust me
Trust between reader and writer is as delicate and lovely as a soap bubble, and I've been happily trusting you since that first chapter of "Trixie's Magic Bit," lo, these many months ago. That you know what you're doing echoes from just about every sentence, and I'll be drinking 'em in for as long as you're tapping 'em out. In other words, you're doing good, hoss. You're doing real good.
Mike
1011903
Now that is textbook enigmatic.
Good chapter, good story
My heart went out to Trixie. Twilight~ Find her soon, she needs you!
1012141
I. Share. Your. PAIN! Seriously, if I see one more crossover with a video game get in the feature box, I will start tearing out hair. I would swear that a fic cannot be featured unless it is a crossover with a video game. Which is doubly frustrating since I wrote a VG crossover. I guess I just didn't pick the right one. Or maybe I should finish it.
...
Nuts to that. I'm too deep into my current story to do that. But yeah, what's worse than that? Try a poorly written story getting featured. Or at least, one that is riddled with grammatical mistakes and misused words (it's make DO, people! not make DUE!). Yeah, I'm a little bitter, too.
::takes deep breaths::
Okay, I'm good. All better now. Don't ragequit, no matter how tempting that sounds. Just remember to wear your sunscreen. I mean, don't give up hope. You'll get there someday. Okay, so the story. Good use of suspense, dude. Poor Trixie getting suckered in like that. She needs to just shut down all communications with Luna. Don't even acknowledge her existence. Let her come in, do what she wants, but don't give her what she wants. Let her do all the work. The time has come for passive resistance!
1015301
Trixie agrees.
Waiting out an immortal alicorn is gonna be a bit of a problem. Jes' sayin'.
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!DAMN
I like how Dash is developing on the journey, which is being done very well indeed.
The complexities between Luna and Trixie, the inherent battle between love and fulfillment being played out there... just wow. The best part for me, at least, is that you manage to get me, as a reader, to see through the eyes of the characters so well that the battle rages inside my own heart and mind as I read, and that is very powerful.
All of this leaves me a pile of conflicting desires for the characters, something I find very interesting. Usually, in any given story, I find something I can focus on as what I want for a character, what I desire to happen to them or for them. It is usually concrete and singular.
But in your writing, I oft find myself conflicted, wanting or fearing multiple things at the same time for any given character or characters, which adds a level of emotional complexity that, frankly, I cannot recall feeling from any other writer. And by any other writer, I do not mean just FimFiction, but my past fifty years of devouring books, the immense library that is my home. You have a rare gift, Applejinx, and I am very impressed by it.
Because I know the world, I know you will never be properly appreciated nor rewarded for the incredible talent that you possess. That is grievous, but... that is our world. At least know that I am in awe of it, for what that is worth.
Thoughts.
You lost me on Luna almost immediately.
This chapter is interesting though because even though it takes her even farther from a Luna most of us would be comfortable with, it actually improves her in my eyes because it took what I saw as being a straight-up villain and set it to this very genuine idea of Luna the ancient, the powerful, the regal. Luna seemed malevolent to me because she, unlike Celestia, is a jaded immortal. And like I said--that's FAR from a Luna that it's easy to be comfortable with, but damn if it isn't interesting and exciting.
Example--I didn't like her being desperate and such, and getting Trixie to actually like fucking her required some really Luna-class manipulation and mental gymnastics. I scratched my head a little at this scene, and then at the end you vindicated me so hard it made my head spin. Holy crap. Chills, I tell you. I was practically pissing myself with excitement over that entire ending bit with Luna showing off how hard she outclassed Trixie. Luna might be taking second place after Rainbow Dash for characters of yours that I love.
Not that this means a whole lot, you've lost me hard on Rarity. Her being bitchy about making breakfast for Rainbow Dash was cute, but in some ways she doesn't seem terribly interested in trying to stay friends with Dash.
I understand that her being humorously over-concerned with things like Applejack's speech mannerisms is in-character, but it just feels inappropriate. That's the main reason you've lost me on her; you're playing her as strict-canon Rarity and compared to how everyone's acting all around her that feels like flattening her.
Don't think I have any words that really do this story credit. I haven't been able to read a chapter of this lately without tearing up. Its so incredibly PAINFUL to watch them suffer like this, but I got to, GOT TO, see the end, because they will be stronger for it.
I always feel dumb writing these comments. How many times and different ways can I say this is amazing before I have truly run out of things to say that carry any meaning.
Luna is treating Trixie like a pet so perfectly its horrifying. Replace sex with bellyrubs and/or petting, and Trixie is the same as a cat or a dog is in every way. Luna controls her food, water, and even her air, but its okay becasue Luna loves Trixie and even through Trixie will die long before Luna, Luna will make sure Trixie is cared for and happy and will remember her fondly. It's horribly benign and loving.
Don't be down, Applejinx. There are a lot of people--myself included--that truly enjoy what you are writing. The views on my stuff have gone down lately, too, but I'm okay with it because I remember that I'm not doing this to be popular. I'm doing this to tell a story. I'm not perfect, but all I can do is try to get better and give something that people can enjoy. And if one person gets something out of what I've written, then I've succeeded.
And you've succeeded, because I get a heckuva lot of entertainment from your stuff. You do a great job.
(And hell, if popularity was a sign of quality, then 50 Shades of Gray would be Nobel material...)
I can't fathom how this ends with Twixie or Appledash!
1013112
You said it, man.
I'm trustin' you too, AJinx, even if my heart is breaking for poor little Trixie (TRIXIE of all ponies!) I just keep seeing all the ways that this could get worse, and each one is worse and more heartrending than the last, but I'm clinging to your promise that things will be better in the end, and hoping you hold to it just as strong.
1018608
And Stephanie Meyers would be the next Shakespeare.
I'll take the quality any day, thanks. To be honest... you could almost consider it a badge of honor that you've got the fans you do. Not because of the quality, but because of how many elements there are in your stories that most people will say "I'm not gonna read this, it can't be good!"
Basically... one thing I've learned in *coughs* years of writing adult material, particularly extremely kinky adult material (and, for most people, that's what a lot of this is, I'm sorry to say), and ESPECIALLY well thought out kinky adult material, is that you shave away your potential audience at each of those levels.
But it makes the fans you get all the more precious, because you know that they're the ones who've got the special combination of perversion and intelligence to really 'get' what you're trying to do.
1020141 With you 100% man.
One of my favorite quotes is from Joel Hodgson, when asked about all the obscure jokes on MST3K, "I never worry if people are going to get the jokes. I know the right people are going to get the jokes."
I get Applejinx. I love his stories. And I am grateful for the people who get mine.
Applejinx! You got to read the latest chapter of my story, now I wanna read the latest chapter of this one! More Trixie-spanking please!
You've got one of the more fun BDSM relationships I've sat down with any anticipation to read. It might not be a perfectly happy or mature relationship but it's certainly entertaining and that's what counts in fiction.
I didn't read all the comments, so if this was addressed, I'm sorry.
I think Luna needs to keep Trixie, and train her. Have Celestia re-train Twilight, or re-wire her brain, and go from there. Mayhap have Luna let Trixie walk around Ponyville, just for giggles.
only Just found this story the other day.
Heck of a job you're doing Applejinx, this from someone who normally likes seeing Trixie win in the end.
1013006
...makes...
Epic winning! And a Princess sex-scene was long overdue. Nice touch.
Wow, princess sex? Poor Dash, poor Twi, poor Trixie...I can't believe I just said that... Well, things have been a total shitstorm for long enough, let's start the process of making things happy again!