I'm going to give this a tentative thumbs up, due to it being somewhat imagitive and well written. However the idea of a Futa-Rarity ass raping Big Mac just doesn't truly work for me, at least not for her first conquest. And despite the "willingness" of Big Mac, I can't see this as anything other then rape, atleast from Big Mac's point of view.
However, I can see a Futa-Rarity doing something with another filly, maybe even something approaching rape then later in the story trying something with Big Mac and the novelity of doing fillies waned.
Folks who have NOT read 'Trixie', however, might be well advised to go read that first (though some effort will be made to support folks who are starting just with this book and never read the original).
I won't stand for folks abusin' my readers, however- 229 favorites for Trixie, and for Rarity, 18 favorites (including notable and respected fic writers) in the first couple hours alone. This is part of a CONTINUING story and in spite of how it may look, there are folks who want me to continue rather than gittin' flipped out by a brutal downthumb onslaught and runnin' away. I realise to look at the ratings it makes it appear that I am one of the worst writers on th' site. This always happens when I'm startin' off a piece of this nature, and it's no fun. It happened on Equestria Daily, too, so I have to go by actual comments, of which I've had some doozies, and they keep me goin'.
483965 I'm guessing you didn't read Trixie's Magic Bit. Mac's not just a random conquest; they've been seeing each other for a while, and Dash finds them very cloppable. (Applejack tries very hard to pretend she's not there.) The problem is Rarity isn't actually as good at reading his feelings as she thinks she is - talking would be nice, for one - and there are Apple family issues involved as well.
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In general, not aimed at Mouse or anyone in particular, I predict this story will reveal a lot of interesting attitudes towards males and anal sex. Rape, too. Pick a random new clopfic and there's a good chance that it'll be some kind of rape fantasy. And the fans will love it.
Appletini by Cosmonaut Rarity's Worst Day Ever by Applejinx New World: Original Chapters by Poodicus (Which I shall skip, since the author is only posting old drafts) Excitable by DawnFade Dash Cider Season by FriendlyDynasty Cupcakes Reborn by Silverslate The Breeding Grounds by Inthend Addicted to Lust by SergeantBuck Corruption by TAW A Tale of Two Ponies by darktechy
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Appletini - Rainbow Dash exposes AJ to poison joke without her knowledge or consent. "That’s enough ya hear?” grunted Applejack, her face pressed into her pussy. “Lemme go or I’ll whoop your sorry behind so hard…” “Can’t hear ya! Sorry!” said Dash,
Rarity's Worst Day Ever - Rarity pushes her lover farther than he's willing to go.
Excitable - Hot. Consensual. PinkieScratch. In public.
Dash Cider Season - Uh... Big Mac immediately went on top of Dash and started fucking her Anal'ly.
Cupcakes Reborn - Do I even have to look? Okay, no fucking yet, but Pinkie has already drugged Dash against her will.
The Breeding Grounds - So, we've got this horrifying setting in which stallions are only kept for breeding - and the story is about Twilight staging a little rebellion against that. Not sure if want...
484589 True. But I have a story to tell and this time there's a clear direction right from the outset. If I can, I'm going to get a fullsize chapter off FAST- like tomorrow or th' next day- just to get folks started and show 'em what the cast is up against.
Let's just say 'perfect storm of bad judgement calls' which I'm doing my level best to make understandable and non-arbitrary... and sooner than you think, the ponies can start fighting back and trying to re-establish their sweet natures. But the next chapter is named Avalanche, and what Rarity did... the effects have not finished propagating.
And as usual, Trixie's situation is where all hell really breaks loose- but that would be telling :)
Well this is... something. Most of it is her remembering the night before, and that ends up coming across as slightly telly. It is a nice teaser, but almost feels like something you throw out to get readers and set up for the story. Not something that tells a story.
484355 484758 You're right that I have not read "Trixie's Magic Bit," I read this manly because this came up today as a new story on FIMfiction. While I did notice the mention of it being a sequel, the intro/summary did not make it seem like I needed to read the other story first.
My "complaint" was only that I didn't see Futa Rarity starting with Big Mac. I have now look over "Trixie's Magic Bit" enough to see the device that makes fillies into Futa's has been around for a while and that Rarity has also been seeing Big Mac for awhile. So it does make more sense that Rarity might start with Big Mac after all.
My fear caused by the match-up in this first chapter was that each chapter was going to try to be more preverted or use obscene fetishes just for the shock value. That is way I gave it a tentative thumbs up. If it was just a clopfic of worsening fetishes or rapes, I would stop reading it and change my rating.
HOWEVER based on the comments I read, plus the first few chapters I just read of "Trixie's," I can now see that this is not a shock clop only fic but will have a plot and Applejinx wanted to start with Rarity making a very bad choice in bedroom activities and not just to have a Futa rape scene.
I have nothing against using rape, homosexuality, Futa, or fetishes as long as they make sense in the story and the plot supports their use. BTW two of my all time favorite manga series both have strong Futa aspects, Ranma 1/2 and Futaba-kun Change, except the other way around, males becoming females and both mangas done more for humor and emotional toil on the characters due to changing sex. Neither would qualify as 'hentai.'
BTW, I have seen Trixie's Magic Bit before, just not tried to read it till now. The only real reason for this was due to the me thinking it was just a Trixie/Twilight slash story and I had grown bored with them due to the large number of almost identical &/or badly written versions of that same ship.
I am quite glad you are following up on this loose end, specifically Mac's increasingly loose end - and with Trixie's done, it is also good to see Rarity filling the, um, gap.
Wow, what a start! Seems like you'll be going all out right from the beginning, huh?
You posted up the title of the story on your blog yesterday, then I saw the description and character tags when it went up and I was instantly excited to see the relationship of Rarity and Macintosh unpacked, since we weren't given a deeper look in Trixie's Magic Bit. And then of course you go and blow it all up rigth in the first chapter! Oh, that letter... You really know how to pack a punch in a single line, don't you? It will be interesting to see what's to come, what's yet to happen ( you promised a carnage! ) - and how Rarity will eventually, hopefully, try to pick up the pieces.
Not much else to say right now except that I enjoyed the intro and I'm really excited for the coming chapters. Oh, and it's nice see how you carried a piece of your writing style / motif over from T'sMB. I refer to the time when AJ convinced Rainbow to have some tender lovings for the first time... When one of your characters cries during sex it's always foreshadowing something important! I don't exactly know why I'm pointing this out, but it's something that I find neat and it caught my attention.
I have been waiting SO much for this. I KNEW Rarity wanting to peg Mac would lead to badness. ^.^
So let's see what's in play right now: Mac has learned he likes it in the butt. After mouthing off to Rarity that it wouldn't be any good at all, and he'd soon put her in her place like a good little mare. So, whole bunch of reasons to leave her - he's had his notion of his place in the relationship buggered (literally), his notion of his masculinity (which almost certainly didn't involve liking sodomy on the receiving side) has been shaken, and his mare straight went and made him feel something he didn't want to feel. He's probably going to go home and try to smother his worries with work, but the possibility that he might, at some juncture, ashamedly attempt to seek male company to explore his apparent 'inner colt-cuddler' could be amusing. At no point will he consider that he might just be a straight colt who likes it in the butt. Rarity has a new-found love of dick-wielding, and (currently) no-one to practice it upon. I expect that her first port of call will be to try and get Mac back, as he made her horn-cum and that makes unicorns stick to you like glue in Trixie's Bit Equestria. Too much depends on how that particular interaction goes for me to prognosticate much here
I myself am not interested in the whole anal thing but I loved reading the Trixie story and I do believe this one has potential can't wait to see the next chapter.
Ooooh Celestia... I've read through this part in full, and I'm heading into the next chapter gradually (I'm trying to actually, y'know, write my own projects for once too, instead of just reading everypony else's), and I'm really, really hoping for everypony's sake that this next chapter doesn't go the direction I think it might with Mac coming home to a wound-up Rainbow....
Hey, long-time fan of your work, and I gotta say, some people don't understand. There's this thing called a 'prostate' that can be stimulated by having anal intercourse. Stimulation of the prostate can be very pleasant for ANY male, it does not matter what their sexual orientation is, it matters if they find the stimulation itself pleasant and many do. I've actually... tried something with my fingers. Although I kinda liked it, the idea of having sex with a guy still disturbs me. Just wanted to put actual experience on the record book. Liking anal sex ≠ Homosexuality I am glad somebody else understands this.
Mac has such a cunning way with words, doesn't he. It leads me to believe that the nope was to getting his ass stuffed again. Now, while I'm not against M/M shipping (futa Rarity is close enough) I don't like that clop. Sketchy start, but sure to get awesome quickly.
"The smile dropped away, as she glanced across her bedroom." "Her magic told her that, as she fondled his now oozing and throbbing stallionhood." "He sobbed, as she wrapped herself around him." "His cock had felt so huge in the grip of her magic, as it went off like a spurting cannon." "She considered lovemaking logistics, as she wriggled out of bed."
Those phrases shouldn't have commas. Wikipedia states that if the second clause is dependent on the first clause, then it shouldn't be separated by a comma. In each of those phrases, the second clause states that the first event in the first clause is happening at the same time as the second event in the second clause, therefore, the second clause is dependent on the first clause.
"They did not sleep nights, as she did not wish to be jostled from slumber."
This phrase, however, is grammatically correct. It is not two events happening simultaneously; it is the first clause adding context to the second clause, making the first clause the dependent clause and the second clause the independent clause.
484583 Do you know where I can find Dash Cider Season or FriendlyDynasty? Google doesn't turn up a writer by that name, and it turns up multiple stories by that name, none of which are the one you described.
This begins the sequel to Trixie's Magic Bit. And here... we... go...
Nice teaser. This series is now semi-officially titled The Cascade of Erotic Carnage. Reading...
I'm going to give this a tentative thumbs up, due to it being somewhat imagitive and well written.
However the idea of a Futa-Rarity ass raping Big Mac just doesn't truly work for me, at least not for her first conquest. And despite the "willingness" of Big Mac, I can't see this as anything other then rape, atleast from Big Mac's point of view.
However, I can see a Futa-Rarity doing something with another filly, maybe even something approaching rape then later in the story trying something with Big Mac and the novelity of doing fillies waned.
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That chapter end...
... While I myself do not approve of this... Others may. I must politely speak my mind, however. And Twilight Sparkle shall assist me.
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NO
Thank you for allowing me to express this. Good day to you all.
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It's okay for you not to like things Trixie's Magic Bit fans like.
Folks who have NOT read 'Trixie', however, might be well advised to go read that first (though some effort will be made to support folks who are starting just with this book and never read the original).
I won't stand for folks abusin' my readers, however- 229 favorites for Trixie, and for Rarity, 18 favorites (including notable and respected fic writers) in the first couple hours alone. This is part of a CONTINUING story and in spite of how it may look, there are folks who want me to continue rather than gittin' flipped out by a brutal downthumb onslaught and runnin' away. I realise to look at the ratings it makes it appear that I am one of the worst writers on th' site. This always happens when I'm startin' off a piece of this nature, and it's no fun. It happened on Equestria Daily, too, so I have to go by actual comments, of which I've had some doozies, and they keep me goin'.
So play nice, or you'll make Fluttershy cry.
483965
I'm guessing you didn't read Trixie's Magic Bit. Mac's not just a random conquest; they've been seeing each other for a while, and Dash finds them very cloppable. (Applejack tries very hard to pretend she's not there.) The problem is Rarity isn't actually as good at reading his feelings as she thinks she is - talking would be nice, for one - and there are Apple family issues involved as well.
==
In general, not aimed at Mouse or anyone in particular, I predict this story will reveal a lot of interesting attitudes towards males and anal sex. Rape, too. Pick a random new clopfic and there's a good chance that it'll be some kind of rape fantasy. And the fans will love it.
In fact, let's do that right now.
So, at the moment, we have
Appletini by Cosmonaut
Rarity's Worst Day Ever by Applejinx
New World: Original Chapters by Poodicus (Which I shall skip, since the author is only posting old drafts)
Excitable by DawnFade
Dash Cider Season by FriendlyDynasty
Cupcakes Reborn by Silverslate
The Breeding Grounds by Inthend
Addicted to Lust by SergeantBuck
Corruption by TAW
A Tale of Two Ponies by darktechy
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Appletini - Rainbow Dash exposes AJ to poison joke without her knowledge or consent.
"That’s enough ya hear?” grunted Applejack, her face pressed into her pussy. “Lemme go or I’ll whoop your sorry behind so hard…”
“Can’t hear ya! Sorry!” said Dash,
Rarity's Worst Day Ever - Rarity pushes her lover farther than he's willing to go.
Excitable - Hot. Consensual. PinkieScratch. In public.
Dash Cider Season - Uh...
Big Mac immediately went on top of Dash and started fucking her Anal'ly.
Cupcakes Reborn - Do I even have to look? Okay, no fucking yet, but Pinkie has already drugged Dash against her will.
The Breeding Grounds - So, we've got this horrifying setting in which stallions are only kept for breeding - and the story is about Twilight staging a little rebellion against that. Not sure if want...
Alright, I gotta go do other things.
Addicted to Lust -
Corruption -
A Tale of Two Ponies -
484279
You could have started with strange, nice, hot, PinkieShy to get the readers warmed up.
484589
True. But I have a story to tell and this time there's a clear direction right from the outset. If I can, I'm going to get a fullsize chapter off FAST- like tomorrow or th' next day- just to get folks started and show 'em what the cast is up against.
Let's just say 'perfect storm of bad judgement calls' which I'm doing my level best to make understandable and non-arbitrary... and sooner than you think, the ponies can start fighting back and trying to re-establish their sweet natures. But the next chapter is named Avalanche, and what Rarity did... the effects have not finished propagating.
And as usual, Trixie's situation is where all hell really breaks loose- but that would be telling :)
Well this is... something. Most of it is her remembering the night before, and that ends up coming across as slightly telly. It is a nice teaser, but almost feels like something you throw out to get readers and set up for the story. Not something that tells a story.
484355
484758
You're right that I have not read "Trixie's Magic Bit," I read this manly because this came up today as a new story on FIMfiction. While I did notice the mention of it being a sequel, the intro/summary did not make it seem like I needed to read the other story first.
My "complaint" was only that I didn't see Futa Rarity starting with Big Mac. I have now look over "Trixie's Magic Bit" enough to see the device that makes fillies into Futa's has been around for a while and that Rarity has also been seeing Big Mac for awhile. So it does make more sense that Rarity might start with Big Mac after all.
My fear caused by the match-up in this first chapter was that each chapter was going to try to be more preverted or use obscene fetishes just for the shock value. That is way I gave it a tentative thumbs up. If it was just a clopfic of worsening fetishes or rapes, I would stop reading it and change my rating.
HOWEVER based on the comments I read, plus the first few chapters I just read of "Trixie's," I can now see that this is not a shock clop only fic but will have a plot and Applejinx wanted to start with Rarity making a very bad choice in bedroom activities and not just to have a Futa rape scene.
I have nothing against using rape, homosexuality, Futa, or fetishes as long as they make sense in the story and the plot supports their use. BTW two of my all time favorite manga series both have strong Futa aspects, Ranma 1/2 and Futaba-kun Change, except the other way around, males becoming females and both mangas done more for humor and emotional toil on the characters due to changing sex. Neither would qualify as 'hentai.'
BTW, I have seen Trixie's Magic Bit before, just not tried to read it till now. The only real reason for this was due to the me thinking it was just a Trixie/Twilight slash story and I had grown bored with them due to the large number of almost identical &/or badly written versions of that same ship.
I am quite glad you are following up on this loose end, specifically Mac's increasingly loose end - and with Trixie's done, it is also good to see Rarity filling the, um, gap.
I await your pleasure. It will certainly be mine.
"Dearest Rarity: Nope."
lol so hard at this keep up the good work
>Dearest Rarity: Nope.
Aw shit, here we go.
Wow, what a start! Seems like you'll be going all out right from the beginning, huh?
You posted up the title of the story on your blog yesterday, then I saw the description and character tags when it went up and I was instantly excited to see the relationship of Rarity and Macintosh unpacked, since we weren't given a deeper look in Trixie's Magic Bit. And then of course you go and blow it all up rigth in the first chapter! Oh, that letter... You really know how to pack a punch in a single line, don't you? It will be interesting to see what's to come, what's yet to happen ( you promised a carnage! ) - and how Rarity will eventually, hopefully, try to pick up the pieces.
Not much else to say right now except that I enjoyed the intro and I'm really excited for the coming chapters. Oh, and it's nice see how you carried a piece of your writing style / motif over from T'sMB. I refer to the time when AJ convinced Rainbow to have some tender lovings for the first time... When one of your characters cries during sex it's always foreshadowing something important! I don't exactly know why I'm pointing this out, but it's something that I find neat and it caught my attention.
Ahem.
SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
I have been waiting SO much for this. I KNEW Rarity wanting to peg Mac would lead to badness. ^.^
So let's see what's in play right now:
Mac has learned he likes it in the butt. After mouthing off to Rarity that it wouldn't be any good at all, and he'd soon put
her in her place like a good little mare. So, whole bunch of reasons to leave her - he's had his notion of his place in
the relationship buggered (literally), his notion of his masculinity (which almost certainly didn't involve liking sodomy
on the receiving side) has been shaken, and his mare straight went and made him feel something he didn't want to
feel. He's probably going to go home and try to smother his worries with work, but the possibility that he might, at
some juncture, ashamedly attempt to seek male company to explore his apparent 'inner colt-cuddler' could be
amusing. At no point will he consider that he might just be a straight colt who likes it in the butt.
Rarity has a new-found love of dick-wielding, and (currently) no-one to practice it upon. I expect that her first port of call
will be to try and get Mac back, as he made her horn-cum and that makes unicorns stick to you like glue in
Trixie's Bit Equestria. Too much depends on how that particular interaction goes for me to prognosticate much here
I myself am not interested in the whole anal thing but I loved reading the Trixie story and I do believe this one has potential can't wait to see the next chapter.
Awwww... poor Rarity her enthousiasm got the better of her, it would seem
Ooooh Celestia... I've read through this part in full, and I'm heading into the next chapter gradually (I'm trying to actually, y'know, write my own projects for once too, instead of just reading everypony else's), and I'm really, really hoping for everypony's sake that this next chapter doesn't go the direction I think it might with Mac coming home to a wound-up Rainbow....
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What the hey is up with your summary?!
"Dearest Rarity: Nope."
Awesome. This is off to a good start.
Hey, long-time fan of your work, and I gotta say, some people don't understand. There's this thing called a 'prostate' that can be stimulated by having anal intercourse. Stimulation of the prostate can be very pleasant for ANY male, it does not matter what their sexual orientation is, it matters if they find the stimulation itself pleasant and many do. I've actually... tried something with my fingers. Although I kinda liked it, the idea of having sex with a guy still disturbs me. Just wanted to put actual experience on the record book. Liking anal sex ≠ Homosexuality I am glad somebody else understands this.
Oh noes!!!!!!!
But I'll admit; "Dearest Rarity, NOPE."
That was
Mac has such a cunning way with words, doesn't he. It leads me to believe that the nope was to getting his ass stuffed again. Now, while I'm not against M/M shipping (futa Rarity is close enough) I don't like that clop. Sketchy start, but sure to get awesome quickly.
It's too bad that their relationship would never have worked out anyway.
Is it sad that I laughed at this?
I'd like to report some grammatical errors:
"The smile dropped away, as she glanced across her bedroom."
"Her magic told her that, as she fondled his now oozing and throbbing stallionhood."
"He sobbed, as she wrapped herself around him."
"His cock had felt so huge in the grip of her magic, as it went off like a spurting cannon."
"She considered lovemaking logistics, as she wriggled out of bed."
Those phrases shouldn't have commas. Wikipedia states that if the second clause is dependent on the first clause, then it shouldn't be separated by a comma. In each of those phrases, the second clause states that the first event in the first clause is happening at the same time as the second event in the second clause, therefore, the second clause is dependent on the first clause.
"They did not sleep nights, as she did not wish to be jostled from slumber."
This phrase, however, is grammatically correct. It is not two events happening simultaneously; it is the first clause adding context to the second clause, making the first clause the dependent clause and the second clause the independent clause.
484583 Do you know where I can find Dash Cider Season or FriendlyDynasty? Google doesn't turn up a writer by that name, and it turns up multiple stories by that name, none of which are the one you described.
Rarity should've peed.
"And he wouldn’t lubricate—or at least she very much doubted such a thing was possible"
Aren't all butts self-lubing if you think about it?