Well then. I suppose the question is, is this the titular 'worst day ever', or can things get even worse for Rarity?
Oh, two questions, I suppose...
"Words will be had, girl, be sure of that. As for you- what did you expect? You got eyes, ain'tcha?"
Uh... what? I can't figure out what Granny Smith means by 'what did you expect?' My best guess, and it isn't a very good one, is that she was expecting Big Mac and Rainbow Dash to get it on at some point, based solely on physical appearance. I'd appreciate some clarity!
533987 My guess is that she was referring to the fact that since Rainbow Dash would fuck anything that walked on four legs, Rainbow getting with Big Mac seemed inevitable. At least that's what I think she meant. Also, fuck yeah Sweetie Belle! Putting her hoof down and getting shit done.
533987 Granny knew all the time that Rainbow Dash would run wild (not necessarily with Big Macintosh! Words will be had). She's seen it all before. Even knowing that, Dash still won her over by helping in the fields (not what you expect to see from a casual playtoy) but doing this says nothing about whether the wild little pegasus will be earth-pony faithful...
Oh god, Sweetie Belle chasing Rarity inside! So funny, so sad.
Everything's going so wrong, and there's not even anything for Fluttershy to 'yay!' over. Speaking of which, I'm looking forward to how she deals with Pinkie going loopy like everyone else now that Dash has broken up with her.
The sad thing is, I think Fluttershy will actually be with Twilight and Trixie as one of those least scarred by this. She seems to have what is appearing to be building into a generally racial lack of concern for simple physical sex on the part of Pegasi, and Pinkie helping Dashie out probably won't be too big a problem for her as a result.
Of course, Celestia-alone knows for sure if that much is true.
Fluttershy has known what Pinkie was all along. She only wants to be #1, which she is- she has never demanded that Pinkie be monogamous, any more than Pinkie has demanded Fluttershy not be a peeper. And Pinkie's reaction to Dash leaving was not 'being dumped', it was frustration at her inability to help her good friend and lover, and (good ol' Pinkie) anger when correctly spotting that Dash is now hurting herself and acting out. Pinkie's outraged that her gifts would be used as a tool to self-injure.
Wow, this chapter turned pretty clop free, I don't mind it at all given the circumstances and the way your setting things up for shit storm after shit storm.
I think I've actually learned how to better lay multiple plots over each other and intertwine them thanks to your amazing writing skills. Thank you! Despite that, you might be laying things on a little thick. It's by no means a breaker but I wouldn't mind a small scene where some ponies (probably Twilight and Trixie with the current layout) got a little "stress relief" although even that could slowly develop into furthering the whole "leaking" problem. Just a thought I felt necessary to make known.
Then again, I am reading this BECAUSE you're an amazing writer so you probably already have a good idea where to take this anyway. Looking forward to the Gilda scene next chapter!
I like how the idea of a "cascade of erotic carnage" is actually turning out to be the main idea, as promised. Two characters have now observed what the reader has.
All the ponies in this town are going crazy.
One more thing, I guess. "Are you good to her?" melted my heart.
I'm extra excited about this because I am extra interested by the GildaDash pair. The interpretation "Dash's ex comes to visit, becomes jealous of Dash's new friends" is so obvious that it's downright annoying how few people tend to latch onto it like me. I have long wanted to do my own griffin sexual culture exploration, but no matter how hard I try, I can't get myself to do a vanilla setting, focused narrowly on a shipping pair, etc.
Okay, first of all: Sweetie Belle is now best pony! I just loved that whole scene. Makes me wonder how much she knew about Rarity's private life, and how. I mean, she didn't seem surprised by the fetish get-up too much...
One of the main causes of the current situation is that I think our ponies are currently failing to communicate properly. I feel that a lot of things were left unsaid intentionally or otherwise. They fill in the blanks with assumptions and those result in a series of bad decisions.
This is getting good. Emotions are running high, people are going out in public with kink gear, and no one has the full picture. I wonder what would happen if everyone was just told everything as it is right now. I wonder if all the problems would be solved, or if everyone would hate each other. Either way, it will end in an orgy, that is for sure.
My mouth literally dropped open at the Rarity in... full display... scene. There are fingernail marks in my chair now. For me, that scene was more disturbing than watching the head-spider bit in John Carpenter's The Thing.
Trixie and Twilight are the well-adjusted ones now, and that is strangely delightful to me. I have come to like them as a couple, even adore them, and that from an original position of horror and disgust. Wow. I sometimes marvel that you could do that to my mind.
I feel squirmy, though. You know that kind of feeling that happens when you watch a television show, and the characters are doing something so embarrassing or stupid that you end up all hunched, peeking though your fingers, squirming in your chair with a hollow, roller-coaster feeling in your stomach? You don't? I guess I shouldn't have used all those 'You' statements then. Well, I feel that way sometimes, and it is icky and ooky and... squirmy... and I feel exactly that way about this story. I end up reading through my fingers, as though by blocking out the screen, it somehow won't be as creepy-crawly.
I suppose it's my response to how another person might say 'I want to take those characters out and yell at them until they straighten up' or whatever. Or beat sense into them, or somesuch. SQUIRMY. It's how I feel.
All war is based on lies, and all relationship drama is based on a failure to communicate, and Luna's Left Hoof, these screwed-up, immature, stubborn ponies are waging Relationship War on a scale that looks like it might go nuclear and... Holy Celestia, how in the world... can you stand... to write this? I couldn't do this to the characters in my stories. I just couldn't torture them like that. Eek!
I guess I just needed to get that out. My emotions are all in a tizzy now. I need chocolate, stat.
'Rarity's tags are updated to include Sad, thanks to a FIMchan anonymous. I do not enjoy bein' told the stuff I got told, which I shan't repeat here. They may not have an 'alternate universe' tag on the grounds of my characterization, because I'm holdin' some things about the ponies' personalities tightly under control and extrapolatin' off what's known to be there. It won't ring true for everypony. Obviously it does for me, and I can't please everybody. They may not have a 'tragedy' tag because that speaks to the ending, and the healing/relief will be all the more powerful when it is earned. Tragedy means it doesn't all work out okay. I won't go there, though I admit right now it seems mighty alarming. But I'm damn well addin' the requested 'sad' tag, because it kinda snuck by me just how bad it would hurt these ponies to lose their groundin' this hard. Again- Trixie is the key and the cause for ponies to stop pullin' apart and start pullin' together, and that will feel more familiar to everypony. But I can't tell you what happens. Not yet.
I know exactly how you feel when you say "squirmy". It is like watching a trainwreck performed by a non-comedic three stooges while you are bound and gagged feet away. Just trying so hard to yell at them how STUIPID they are being.
Blech. Love the fic, although you already know that (not that you know that you know that). This may become one of the currently two(?) fics I have ever re-read out of doezens.
I'll work on it. I'm losin' folks, I find. Specifically, I am losing folks who are happy to say 'Dash and AJ are sluts' and not in a friendly way. So... to some extent my reaction is "don't let the door hit you in th' plot", but it is still concerning, and causing me to slow down and be watchful. Thing is, at the end of the last book I had a bunch of pony couples (and groupings) that were SOLID. And a few fault lines... and it becomes like a trick shot in pool. How unlucky of a break could I hit? I knew Big Mac was gonna go 'eeenope.'. Where would he go, what would he do? IF he laid Dash, that would be devastating- but what could he possibly do to convince her of that? Well, he's childish and is breaking up because Rarity (in the end of the last book) did a thing to him- what if he got off real hard? What if his never-questioned sexual reality got seriously rattled? Dash didn't set out to lay him at all- what tipped her was her situation, his 'how can I approach mares if X', that very direct and straightforward BAD move being right there (and she'd watched him at it with Rarity)... I honestly didn't plan THIS much carnage. It's time to start propping these shellshocked ponies up, helping them move on maybe. I say that, while watching (next chapter- ETA maybe Sunday?) Applejack sweep up the glass from the window, spot the blue feather, freeze, look furtively around to see if anyone is watching, sneak upstairs and hide the feather under her pillow... Yeah- that ain't a clever-pony move, Applejack, if you intend to stick to your guns. But as a glimpse into hearts that ain't dead yet... it's kind of revealing. Foolish, foolish mare.
Oh, you gotta laugh, even when things look terrible. You go right ahead. As a 'Pogo' character once said, don't take life too serious- it ain't NOHOW permanent. If it had to be taken real dark an' serious, why do Pinkie's solutions to things keep involving a big vat of pudding? I'm workin' on chapter five as hard as I can- might well get it done, even if I don't I got a lot of good stuff in there. Turns out griffins are TOTAL cats in their romantic practices. Which suggests that Gilda scornin' Dash in GTBO and stalkin' away could be taken in two ways... anyway, I'm crankin' away at it, and after that is Twilight's big day. Lookin' at your page I sense much FlutterDash in you, which is tricky on account of both are headed in very different directions, and Fluttershy would NOT like where Dash is going very much- but I'm glad I can do stuff you enjoy even though your OTP just isn't fitting into this world. At least they were the start of the whole crazy thing, way back when...
Wo .he wawa us keep hili---- [finds and reattaches my lower jaw] There we go. The drama just piles on and on. Strong opening, explosive circumstances, and here we are. And Rarity tried to mend things, but stubborn-as-ever BigMac wouldn't listen. And if you couldn't guess at the start of this comment, my jaw fell right off when she burst out into the open all strapped up for everyone to see.
And now I agree with Twi. Ironically, she and Trixie are the only two sane ponies left. Discord approves!
Wow, AJ, you are definitely being unreasonable. And Rarity! That was hot. Then Sweetie yells at her like she's the little kid and scolds her into the house. That was too good. Hopefully things will start to fix themselves.
The moral here is very clearly not to try pegging or else every facet of you and your friends' lives will explode into bits (I hope my sarcasm is rather clear).
Well then. I suppose the question is, is this the titular 'worst day ever', or can things get even worse for Rarity?
Oh, two questions, I suppose...
"Words will be had, girl, be sure of that. As for you- what did you expect? You got eyes, ain'tcha?"
Uh... what? I can't figure out what Granny Smith means by 'what did you expect?' My best guess, and it isn't a very good one, is that she was expecting Big Mac and Rainbow Dash to get it on at some point, based solely on physical appearance. I'd appreciate some clarity!
"Sweet Celestia..." said Twilight. "Do you realise that now we are the healthy and well adjusted ones?"
That is a horrible feeling. I can tell from experience.
(You already know this is a gripping and tearjerking and heartwarming story, so I don't need to tell you that.)
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Considering what their usual day is like in Ponyville, that's not saying much
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My guess is that she was referring to the fact that since Rainbow Dash would fuck anything that walked on four legs, Rainbow getting with Big Mac seemed inevitable. At least that's what I think she meant.
Also, fuck yeah Sweetie Belle! Putting her hoof down and getting shit done.
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Granny knew all the time that Rainbow Dash would run wild (not necessarily with Big Macintosh! Words will be had). She's seen it all before. Even knowing that, Dash still won her over by helping in the fields (not what you expect to see from a casual playtoy) but doing this says nothing about whether the wild little pegasus will be earth-pony faithful...
Oh god, Sweetie Belle chasing Rarity inside! So funny, so sad.
Everything's going so wrong, and there's not even anything for Fluttershy to 'yay!' over. Speaking of which, I'm looking forward to how she deals with Pinkie going loopy like everyone else now that Dash has broken up with her.
The sad thing is, I think Fluttershy will actually be with Twilight and Trixie as one of those least scarred by this. She seems to have what is appearing to be building into a generally racial lack of concern for simple physical sex on the part of Pegasi, and Pinkie helping Dashie out probably won't be too big a problem for her as a result.
Of course, Celestia-alone knows for sure if that much is true.
Celestia... the bits... leaking.....
Is Molestia about to come out for a visit?
Fluttershy has known what Pinkie was all along. She only wants to be #1, which she is- she has never demanded that Pinkie be monogamous, any more than Pinkie has demanded Fluttershy not be a peeper. And Pinkie's reaction to Dash leaving was not 'being dumped', it was frustration at her inability to help her good friend and lover, and (good ol' Pinkie) anger when correctly spotting that Dash is now hurting herself and acting out. Pinkie's outraged that her gifts would be used as a tool to self-injure.
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And yes...
Gilda. Confirmed. That was Dash's bright idea. Gilda, of the earsplitting caterwauling, Gilda who taught Dash how to writhe sexily like a part-feline.
Post-GtBO Gilda. Post-getting-dumped-by-Dash Gilda. NEXT.
Then, we'll see what's been happening in Ponyville during Princess Celestia's visit in the meantime.
Wow.
For a story pretty much centered around sex, this is pretty good...
Wait, Rocky Horror Picture Show much?
Just remember everyone it can get worse. After all a crazy but wise man once said, If anything can go wrong it will go wrong.
Wow, this chapter turned pretty clop free, I don't mind it at all given the circumstances and the way your setting things up for shit storm after shit storm.
I think I've actually learned how to better lay multiple plots over each other and intertwine them thanks to your amazing writing skills. Thank you!
Despite that, you might be laying things on a little thick. It's by no means a breaker but I wouldn't mind a small scene where some ponies (probably Twilight and Trixie with the current layout) got a little "stress relief" although even that could slowly develop into furthering the whole "leaking" problem. Just a thought I felt necessary to make known.
Then again, I am reading this BECAUSE you're an amazing writer so you probably already have a good idea where to take this anyway. Looking forward to the Gilda scene next chapter!
I like how the idea of a "cascade of erotic carnage" is actually turning out to be the main idea, as promised. Two characters have now observed what the reader has.
All the ponies in this town are going crazy.
One more thing, I guess. "Are you good to her?" melted my heart.
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I'm extra excited about this because I am extra interested by the GildaDash pair. The interpretation "Dash's ex comes to visit, becomes jealous of Dash's new friends" is so obvious that it's downright annoying how few people tend to latch onto it like me. I have long wanted to do my own griffin sexual culture exploration, but no matter how hard I try, I can't get myself to do a vanilla setting, focused narrowly on a shipping pair, etc.
Okay, first of all: Sweetie Belle is now best pony! I just loved that whole scene. Makes me wonder how much she knew about Rarity's private life, and how. I mean, she didn't seem surprised by the fetish get-up too much...
One of the main causes of the current situation is that I think our ponies are currently failing to communicate properly. I feel that a lot of things were left unsaid intentionally or otherwise. They fill in the blanks with assumptions and those result in a series of bad decisions.
Good Lord Rarity.
This is getting good. Emotions are running high, people are going out in public with kink gear, and no one has the full picture. I wonder what would happen if everyone was just told everything as it is right now. I wonder if all the problems would be solved, or if everyone would hate each other. Either way, it will end in an orgy, that is for sure.
Ahaha, Rarity's outburst just slew me.
I am capable of being moved to a squeaky gasp. I didn't even know I had a squeaky gasp.
This is the most rollercoastery of rollercoaster fics since The Empty Room.
Also, your Sweetie kicks ass.
My mouth literally dropped open at the Rarity in... full display... scene. There are fingernail marks in my chair now. For me, that scene was more disturbing than watching the head-spider bit in John Carpenter's The Thing.
Trixie and Twilight are the well-adjusted ones now, and that is strangely delightful to me. I have come to like them as a couple, even adore them, and that from an original position of horror and disgust. Wow. I sometimes marvel that you could do that to my mind.
I feel squirmy, though. You know that kind of feeling that happens when you watch a television show, and the characters are doing something so embarrassing or stupid that you end up all hunched, peeking though your fingers, squirming in your chair with a hollow, roller-coaster feeling in your stomach? You don't? I guess I shouldn't have used all those 'You' statements then. Well, I feel that way sometimes, and it is icky and ooky and... squirmy... and I feel exactly that way about this story. I end up reading through my fingers, as though by blocking out the screen, it somehow won't be as creepy-crawly.
I suppose it's my response to how another person might say 'I want to take those characters out and yell at them until they straighten up' or whatever. Or beat sense into them, or somesuch. SQUIRMY. It's how I feel.
All war is based on lies, and all relationship drama is based on a failure to communicate, and Luna's Left Hoof, these screwed-up, immature, stubborn ponies are waging Relationship War on a scale that looks like it might go nuclear and... Holy Celestia, how in the world... can you stand... to write this? I couldn't do this to the characters in my stories. I just couldn't torture them like that. Eek!
I guess I just needed to get that out. My emotions are all in a tizzy now. I need chocolate, stat.
'Rarity's tags are updated to include Sad, thanks to a FIMchan anonymous.
I do not enjoy bein' told the stuff I got told, which I shan't repeat here.
They may not have an 'alternate universe' tag on the grounds of my characterization, because I'm holdin' some things about the ponies' personalities tightly under control and extrapolatin' off what's known to be there. It won't ring true for everypony. Obviously it does for me, and I can't please everybody.
They may not have a 'tragedy' tag because that speaks to the ending, and the healing/relief will be all the more powerful when it is earned. Tragedy means it doesn't all work out okay. I won't go there, though I admit right now it seems mighty alarming.
But I'm damn well addin' the requested 'sad' tag, because it kinda snuck by me just how bad it would hurt these ponies to lose their groundin' this hard. Again- Trixie is the key and the cause for ponies to stop pullin' apart and start pullin' together, and that will feel more familiar to everypony. But I can't tell you what happens. Not yet.
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I know exactly how you feel when you say "squirmy". It is like watching a trainwreck performed by a non-comedic three stooges while you are bound and gagged feet away. Just trying so hard to yell at them how STUIPID they are being.
Blech. Love the fic, although you already know that (not that you know that you know that). This may become one of the currently two(?) fics I have ever re-read out of doezens.
I'll work on it. I'm losin' folks, I find.
Specifically, I am losing folks who are happy to say 'Dash and AJ are sluts' and not in a friendly way. So... to some extent my reaction is "don't let the door hit you in th' plot", but it is still concerning, and causing me to slow down and be watchful.
Thing is, at the end of the last book I had a bunch of pony couples (and groupings) that were SOLID. And a few fault lines... and it becomes like a trick shot in pool. How unlucky of a break could I hit? I knew Big Mac was gonna go 'eeenope.'. Where would he go, what would he do? IF he laid Dash, that would be devastating- but what could he possibly do to convince her of that? Well, he's childish and is breaking up because Rarity (in the end of the last book) did a thing to him- what if he got off real hard? What if his never-questioned sexual reality got seriously rattled? Dash didn't set out to lay him at all- what tipped her was her situation, his 'how can I approach mares if X', that very direct and straightforward BAD move being right there (and she'd watched him at it with Rarity)...
I honestly didn't plan THIS much carnage. It's time to start propping these shellshocked ponies up, helping them move on maybe.
I say that, while watching (next chapter- ETA maybe Sunday?) Applejack sweep up the glass from the window, spot the blue feather, freeze, look furtively around to see if anyone is watching, sneak upstairs and hide the feather under her pillow...
Yeah- that ain't a clever-pony move, Applejack, if you intend to stick to your guns.
But as a glimpse into hearts that ain't dead yet... it's kind of revealing. Foolish, foolish mare.
Oh, you gotta laugh, even when things look terrible.
You go right ahead. As a 'Pogo' character once said, don't take life too serious- it ain't NOHOW permanent.
If it had to be taken real dark an' serious, why do Pinkie's solutions to things keep involving a big vat of pudding?
I'm workin' on chapter five as hard as I can- might well get it done, even if I don't I got a lot of good stuff in there. Turns out griffins are TOTAL cats in their romantic practices. Which suggests that Gilda scornin' Dash in GTBO and stalkin' away could be taken in two ways... anyway, I'm crankin' away at it, and after that is Twilight's big day.
Lookin' at your page I sense much FlutterDash in you, which is tricky on account of both are headed in very different directions, and Fluttershy would NOT like where Dash is going very much- but I'm glad I can do stuff you enjoy even though your OTP just isn't fitting into this world. At least they were the start of the whole crazy thing, way back when...
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Like this?
Wo .he wawa us keep hili----
[finds and reattaches my lower jaw]
There we go.
The drama just piles on and on. Strong opening, explosive circumstances, and here we are. And Rarity tried to mend things, but stubborn-as-ever BigMac wouldn't listen. And if you couldn't guess at the start of this comment, my jaw fell right off when she burst out into the open all strapped up for everyone to see.
And now I agree with Twi. Ironically, she and Trixie are the only two sane ponies left. Discord approves!
Wow, AJ, you are definitely being unreasonable. And Rarity! That was hot. Then Sweetie yells at her like she's the little kid and scolds her into the house. That was too good. Hopefully things will start to fix themselves.
The moral here is very clearly not to try pegging or else every facet of you and your friends' lives will explode into bits (I hope my sarcasm is rather clear).