Is Dash really gone its been months since she disappeared and nopony has heard from her. Spike waits for her return inner home trying to keep in mind that she is all right. But as time go on the idea that she may be dead seem to be the problem that he faces alone. All he can do is remember all the good times that they shared to keep her alive at heart.
Seven grammar mistakes in the description alone, and all things you should have learned in elementary school. Jesus Christ man.
4908004 OK fixed that part now
4908004 and dude I'm dyslexic sorry
4908066 you need an etitor. My first fic was crappy too.
Okay........Is the story really Rated E?
4908043
There are still five, by my count. You badly need an editor.
it's a particular writing style used, and it's a specific set-up that I don't like, but having taken that into effect, it's still rather short, but still an enjoyable read
4908319 fist fic
4908263 on it thank you for being honest really
4908227 oops sorry I'll fix that
It was a great story! Sadly, it does feel a little rushed and the grammar.. COULD be better! But besides that it was great! Though I would think that Dash would be hurt or something.. seeing as how she just came back from somewhere alone for a month.. But great story!
Hey Geoice, remember me? Anyway, I loved the fic! I skipped the flashback because I don't really like the content in teen fanfics, I personally prefer a mushy little shipfic, but honestly, I liked it! I think it could use some editing, and I don't exactly know why Dash was gone so long, and that was something you could have expanded on, but you gave it your best shot and I honestly enjoyed it! You should be proud :) Have a like!
My God... As soon as I read the words,
I almost died. The suspense, the thoughts, all leading up to her preening herself.
All in all, really fantastic story.
Have not one, but ten moustaches.