After the events of Boast Busters, the Great and Powerful Trixie is in a fit of rage and desperately wants revenge on Twilight Sparkle. When she stumbles upon an old teleportation spell, she plans to surprise attack Twilight to carry out said revenge, but instead ends up in the private chambers of Princess Luna. What starts as an accidental intrusion soon becomes much more to the both of them.
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Completely Serious Headcanon™: the "Royal Canterlot Voice" was actually a silly prank thought up by Trixie and Luna to mess with Twilight.
There, timeline fixed. ;P
4643983 Someone get Hasbro on the phone! This is brilliant! Brilliant I say!
Hm, nice. Some of the descriptions might be on the edge of too flowery, but not so that it'd be annoying. Also, needs more romance and cuddling.
4644684 Hi, thanks for the feedback ^^
Yes, I do see what you mean. It's, of course, something I only notice after publishing. XP
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Yea it's weird, it has a romance tag but it doesn't have anything related exept trixie loving her eyes, if that's the correct term.
4645005 LOL I don't know if this warrants a "romance" tag or not, but I thought the several mentions of the butterflies in Trixie's stomach sort of made it fall under the "romance" tag. I may not have given proper emphasis to that, though, so that's probably my fault. XD
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No biggie, just was a bit confused why the tag was there.
4645157 well, that's what chapter 2 is for XD
4646589 Now I need to contemplate as to rather or not I want to make a chapter 2, lol. I don't know if it demands my attention of every other project in my life.
I hardly see many fics on here with the same effort that went into this one chapter.
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A second chapter would be appreciated
You have truly captured the magnificence of The Great And Powerful Trixie! Bravo sir, I can not wait for chapter 2.
It might be just me, but I have a hard time seeing the romance in this.
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No, you're right, I quite enjoyed it but I don't see the need for the Romance tag as it stands.
And there's only ONE chapter. How horrifying.
No real need for Romance tag, that seems completely out of place.
Saying that, the initial interaction between Luna and Trixie doesn't quite seem completely believable, if only because I can't see Luna completely suffering Trixie's attitude, or Trixie continuing to be so haughty in an alicorn princess' presence. The later part of the chapter though works a lot better as Luna warms up to Trixie some more, treating her as a friend.
6297648 ditto, Trixie's egotistical, not stupid. Luna could crush her like a bug, not that she would.
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Oh wow, I have not logged into Fimfiction for so long and had no idea more people had commented.
As for my own response, I do get what you're saying. Luna is by all accounts a much more powerful entity, and Trixie (as with all non-alicorn citizens of Equestria) would probably (realistically speaking) be humbled at the sight of an alicorn princess in her sight.
However, given what we know of the characters in the show, I find it extremely hard to believe that a post-Nightmare Moon Luna would ever do anything to harm someone who she demonstrably sees as harmless for the petty reason that she's being arrogant. Celestia and Luna both show a great deal of patience and fascination, even with the more eccentric of ponies. (Celestia, especially, showing reserve when Pinkie Pie steals her cupcake in A Bird in the Hoof) It simply doesn't align with how I see either of the Day/Night sisters to not be tolerant of a pony who is clearly harmless, and with The Magic of Friendship (TM) being a prominent theme of the show, I also find it extremely easy to believe that Luna would attempt to boost Trixie's confidence by helping her master a few basic spells.
I also find Trixie being stubbornly boisterous even in the face danger pretty believable. I don't see her as completely collapsing in fear when faced with somepony of actual intelligence (as compared to the Ursa Minor, who was just a savage beast).
That being said, after retrospectively reading through this, I do agree that maybe Luna's tolerance is stretched a little. Not because I think she would have told Trixie to take a hike, but I do think that Luna would perhaps be a little bit annoyed at first, but gradually softening up to her as time went on and she began to see the two have very similar plights. As is, I feel like Luna immediately sees Trixie in the same way Rose Quartz initially sees Greg Universe. That is, charming in how meagre she is by comparison to herself. Instead, I definitely feel I could have worked on building up the relationship.
And as controversial as it appears to be, I stick by the "Romance" tag, while also acknowledging and accepting that what I look for in a romance story is probably different from what the majority of people on this site do. I find Trixie's obvious infatuation with Luna and Trixie's emotional response to them to be... well, romantic, and I find that as compelling in a romance story as the hugging, the kissing, the pony weddings, etc. Not to mention, when there are obvious elements of shipping within the story, it seems misleading to me to not have that indicated somewhere.
As a general note, reading this again was quite interesting, because of how proud of it I was at the time compared to now. So many places where I think "Wow, that sentence really should have just ended there," or "Okay, you made that joke already." XD - I was planning on making a follow-up story that might get a little more intimate (just to address the complaints about the romance tag if nothing else) but that project got lost a while ago. Might have to dig it up someday.
Trixie and Luna fuse to make Trixie Lunamoon