Twilight Sparkle is sent, against her will, to Ponyville high, where her mentor, the princess of their land and the district attourney Celestia hopes she will find that friendship is just as valuable as good grades. Even after Spike helps her attain this goal, Twilight and her new friends school year gets crazy as they deal with each other's, and all their fellow student's, crazy antics. But as the school year goes on and their moments together strengthen their bonds, the question begins to arise of who loves who, which is only made worse when Prom comes at the end of the year!
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Finally i was wondering when somepony was gonna do a school Fic
i like the idea of Unimares and such very interesting idea for humans with magic i guess i look forward for more of this unique idea of urs
This was funny. Thanks for the update. :3
Love it
tracking!
Twilight is now Luna's teddy bear. I'm perfectly okay with this.
hope youmake more
awesome, can't wait for more
Awesome chapter yo! I won't spend to much time on the positotives, because there are way to many of them because this story is amazing.
One little knitpick I have is that I knew how the story would end because I've seen the episode already. Also, It didn't really feel like I was at a 'school', but maye that was just the setting or something. I feel like the earlier chapters were much more, for lack of a better phrasing, loosley based on the episodic structure, whereas this chapter seemed to follow it nealy identically. The earlier chapters were also, in my opinion, more interesting because of this. BGCs like Vinyl and Octavia helped make things more dynamic, made it feel like there was a whole school 'ecosystem' going on in the background of the Mane protagonists.
I guess in short, what I'm saying is that I'd prefer you take a more(again, for lack of better phrasing) 'original' approach to story-telling, as opposed to following the well-known 'episode' plot lines. That's not to say they can't be a basis for some really amazing backstory, but try to deviate a bit, so that the reader won't be able to tell what comes next. We've all seen the show, thats why we read fanfiction!
As a bit of an aside, I'm also wondering what the over-arching premise of the story is. I mean, what is the main drive of the story, other than Twilight being in school and meeting the Mane 5 plus Lune? Sort of a central plot that would follow and be consistantly adressed in every chapter. And no, I don't count the video-letters to Celestia as a story-arch(Although I do find them hilarious, she's so secrative and funny!).
So, yeah. There's that.
BUT!!! Don't mistake my criticism for hatred! I really do love this story(and all Humanized fics to a point, but regardless), and thats why I went more in depth with the complaints, rather than the praises. I mean, you know you're a great writer, right? Right! But it wouldnt help you developl, as a writer, if all I did was get on my knees and start kissing your ass and gushing about how amazing you are(Hintity-Hint-Hint: You ARE amazing). I only do as much in stories I am well invested in, and think have major potential.
Cannot wait for more, and I eagerly await your next update!
"Shadow Over Innsmouth"
Quite heavy. Anyways, good chapter, as always! Keep up the good work.
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Wow, I truly appreciate this, several paragraphs addressing important factors. I think this deserves a response of what exactly I have planned for this series.
You see, I actually wrote out the plot of every chapter, and organized them in a manner that I saw flowed well together. This particular chapter I knew would be rather predictable, which is why I did my best to change up the way things flowed. I'm trying to give all the main characters their own set of chapters dedicated to them, while having chapters that develop their bonds and introduce new characters. While Applejack is one of my favorite characters, I don't have a lot to work with for her sadly. This particular chapter was the most predictable and based on the actual show, so I wanted to get it out of the way as soon as possible, hence why it comes right after the four introductory chapters to the series.
As for an overall theme to the series, it's mostly like I said them building bonds and me being in the dark of who loves who, it mostly played out in my head like one of those animes that you can watch any episode out of order, that is AT FIRST! You'll get the feel of a plot developing after I get past chapter 7 "Chaotic Transfer Student" which if you can't figure out who that is you don't deserve cookies.
I appreciate your constructive criticism, and hope that as the series goes on you'll get a stronger feel for everything and thoroughly enjoy the tale I weave. I'm hoping this series becomes something epic one day, and I'm glad you're looking forward to more! I've heard your words and taken them to heart so as to ensure I improve upon the story I already have planned to make it that much better. Thank you for everything my fan and friend.
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Dem references.
Luna in socks.
Epic sax Spike.
I love your work!
to be the first to say,this is awesome! I lost it when Trixie said “You, with the over sized chest!"
and from then on out I couldn't stop laughing!
Me Gusta.
Oh my gosh, I love this fic so much, it has so much... fandom, it's perfect
! I just hope Trixie and Twilight don't get shipped... 
What? I can't. I can not. I have lost the ability to can. "Thanks Mom" not to mention the last scene.The only reason this chapter makes any sense, is because it is about discord. But really, where's the fun in making sense? Great as usual!
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All shall be shipped, no exceptions!
Or do you mean actual relationship? 
Yeah, nothing's certain there until the last chapter. 
"the second one is in slow motion" God Dammit, laughed my ass of despite it being 1 AM and everyone asleep. Anyway, loving the story so far and yet again that was funny.
First I was like
then I was like 
but it all ended when i was like 
I'm going crazy waiting for the next chapter!
Gotta say, I'm glad I finally got around to reading this story. I had it in my "Read Later" for a good few days, but now that I've finally read it, I gotta say I love it. Keep up the good work.
And if I may ask, even though he wasn't in this chapter, how much of The Doctor will we see, and will he share any similarities to the actual Doctor other than the name? I'm excited to see all the background characters of course, but I've been in a very Doctor Whoo mood for a while now.
Regardless, keep up the good work, I look forward to the rest!
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He won't be the same Doctor as the usual one, just a rather intellectual and eccentric man... who doesn't like pears.
As for how often you'll see him, I try and throw in his goofy teaching methods every now and again, but he will be in the next chapter. All the characters so far will hopefully, just so I can give them epic costumes. 
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>Epic costumes
>The Doctor is teaching
Oh lawdy. Sounds like a fun chapter ahead! Well, they're all fun chapters, but you get my point. Anywho, I greatly look forward to all future chapters!
Other than using "fauna to fauna" instead if "flora to flora" at the plant scene, great job!!!
Really good! I love how takes a different path then Luna Eclipsed, but still be about Luna! I can't wait for the next chapter!
Yay! Another chapter finally!
Loved it, and OMG, a DiscoPie shipping?? SUPER loved it!! 
Ya know, at first I was iffy about the DiscordxPinkie thing, but I think you may make it work. Anyways, another good chapter.
"And let me taste that face!"
"Mommy uses it as an excuse to practice foreplay."
"What's foreplay?"
That was hilarious XD I haven't laughed that hard at a story on here in a long time!
Great job however I can't help but notice that in the party scene after they all yell surprise you accidently call pinkie a pony when she is a human.
great story! five staches
the only thing I can say to you at this point, sir, is kudos. Kudos to your story. Kudos to your writing style. And kudos to you, of course.
Man, long wait! Or was it just me? Gonna finish reading later, VERY excited for it!
nice reference to ponies: the anthology. I could totally see spike playing the sax in my mind's eye. Keep up the good work.
poor spike! but it was a great way to end the chapter. it seems pretty funny so far! Good Luck! -Flutter
i think you mixed up foreplay and cosplay
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Or did I?
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oh my
“Now now, it’s not rude or offensive, it’s an expression of clumsiness, which I am. It’s things like retard, and the like, which are offensive. Besides, I always wanted to be able to say something like ‘my friends call me’, and then give them a name.”
“I was raped!” Those words seemed to echo through the area as everyone there froze and stared at Ditsy in shock. She sniffles and wipes her nose on her arm. “I was raped when I was ten years old. The person who did it… they tried to kill me… I got out with this expression on my face and a mental problem. Three years of therapy later, I went back to school in the first grade. Can you imagine being thirteen and in first grade, and not knowing why you were different from everyone else? Three years later my daughter joined me…
Everyone’s jaws dropped at that last sentence, unable to speak, except Spike who said, “You kept the child, even at your age?”
Ditsy Doo’s eyes flow like waterfalls, earning a hug from various directions. “My parents helped me through the experience, but yes, I did give birth as a little girl. It was the only thing I asked for, and everyone respected that much. The life I gave… she means so much to me even now. Next year she’ll be coming to this school as a freshman.” She shoots Trixie a glare, Trixie shivering with tears welling in the corners of her eyes. “Nothing to say to that, now do you? I didn’t choose to be like this. I didn’t choose to be where I am. I was forced! You make fun of people for being different, but do you even know their story? The world isn’t pickles and rainbows you know, there are people that are hurt, and have their lives changed every day! I’m no exception. So yeah, scientifically, I’m retarded. I have a daughter who’s ten years younger than me. But you know what? At least I’m not a cold hearted unthinking monster like you!”
Trixie’s tears finally flow and she sniffles, beginning to sob. She says in a high tone, “I’m not a monster! I-I didn’t know! I… I’m so sorry!” She bawls into her hands, her teary eyed friends trying to hold her shoulders. She shakes them off and says, “No! Don’t touch me, I’m a horrible person!” She tries to turn and run, only to be caught from behind by an unknown set of arms embrace. She looks back and blushes. “Twilight Sparkle?”
THE FELLS!!!!!!!!
THE REDEMTION!!!!!!!!!!!!
WINING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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“Good night Discy poo.”
As her cute snores filled the air, Discord stared into blank space with a look of confusion on his face. “What the hell just happened?”
You are falling in to a burning ring of fire.
lol my friends can't decide wether Im pink or Discord and you have shipped me with myself?!?!?!?!?!
Oh and scoots mom is... I can't even type it!!!!!!!!
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Not bad. Please continue!
Me like, me like... You have my interest author... Be sure to keep it with like a treasure.
And this is why Pinkie Pie is best pony, even when human.
Awwwwww... My favorite chappie so far!!! Wittle Woona made fwiends!!! Hehehehe....
252775 Khe... Hehehe... That comment with that icon is just PERFECT!!!
Trixie reduced to her bra and thong....
Mother of god... The image won't ever leave my mind... EVER!!!!!
Also... this is what popped into my mind at that last line.
Awesome sauce chapter!!!! And I think I know what Celestia was talking about... Hehehehe... Looking forward to reading more of your awesome FIM FIC!!!
I do not think I like the fact that you made Derpy a rape case. I don't. The fells I'm having.
But it has been redeemed through the DoctorXDerpy ship. One of my favs by the by. By the way... Why didn't you name him John Smith? That's what he calls himself whenever he's trying to appear like a normal human. However you did capture his personality pretty good. I must applaud you on that. And the next chapter.... 
Can't wait!!!!
YAY!!!!!! DISCO-PIE!!!!!!! EEEEEE!!!!!!
Discord stared into blank space with a look of confusion on his face. “What the hell just happened?”
:What has happened, good sir, is that you just found the one being who can practically match your chaotic nature... Without the use of magic. To put it simply though; You have been shipped.
936563 Trust me I face the same problem. All of my friends are bronies(well pegasisters considering we're all girls but I like bronies better.) And we are all convinced that we are a part of the main six. And, unanimously(seriously I'm exactly like her) I'm Pinkie Pie. But I have drawn all of us as the characters. And I drew myself as Discord too after making my friends the alicorns. However my friend who plays both Rarity and Fluttershy has pointed out... Since I'm the only one how ships DisPie in our little group... I technically have shipped myself with myself for drawing myself as them both. And the funny part is I
my drawings of myself as Discord the most.
Pinkie and Discord had the best costumes!!!!!! Hehehehehe.... And I just have to wonder... How long was the time gap in the story from Discord's first day to Nightmare Night? They've been dating that long and no one noticed? WAT!??!! Also I see that you are planning on writing a ninth chapter..... PLEASE GIVE NOW!!!!! PRETTY, PRETTY, PRETTY PLEASE WITH A NON-RAINBOW DASH CUPCAKE ON TOP WITH MOUNDS OF PINKIE SUGAR AND DISCORD CHAOS?!!!!!???!!? PLEEEEEEEASE!!!!!
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1213961 I would love to see that art.
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The first four chapters take place across two days, but every chapter after that is a week apart, so every four chapters is like a month of school. The only chapters this doesn't count towards are the chapters that take place in the virtual game world that the characters will begin playing in the next chapter, as well as the following one. I'll try to come out with both chapters soon so we can go back to romantic high school comedy, the virtual world thing is just me adding something different and interesting without having to make a whole other fiction, although perhaps I should ask around and see if creating a spin-off fiction would be a better idea. Hmm...