I just recently started to write stories directly towards the FiM actively, though I have been writing for years, publishing numerous stories at Mibba and the eventual pony story, as far as to the MLP
As I woke up, it is dark and quiet, I can't even feel the quilt or the sheets under me. As if I had been suspended in mid air, yet I feel the thick fluid of some kind.
Slowly, the few remaining memories came back to me, reaching as far back as an hour or two before I went to bed, I had had a massage, and it had felt good.
Looking closer, my hide is a lemon yellow. Something about it made me think of myself as a Mare, maybe it is the Jigglies on my Chest.
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>Jigglies
I'm… I'm not sure I even know how to start.
4576971 Hmm, you do know what they are, right?
At least you started with a comment.
I prefer to have oppinions expressed in plain text, just like your comment.
Just hope you enjoy the story more then getting confused.
'Chrysalis' doesn' reffer to the Changeling queen in this case, which is why I used no Changeling Tag. Though I do have several stories with Changelings and even the Queen herself.
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Yeah; but seeing that term just throws me off. It seems… immature. How old is the protagonist supposed to be?
Also, were they always female? Because if so, it seems odd to have her explore her body since she should already know what those parts are (and that scene probably requires a teen rating, even with the euphemisms); but if they were male, I can't see much of a reason for panties and skirts in their closet.
Unless this is a kind of transformation fic for the sake of transformation. Then I guess it makes sense. Somehow.
If it's not a name (proper noun), it shouldn't be capitalized.
4577263 From what I have written this far, I would see them as teens.
Knowing what and where they are, but remembering next to nohing of what came before. My idea was to explore it briefly to paint the picture of what she looks like. Though having her exploring herself kind of felt more fun, should put her up as teen?
Thanks, I added the 'Teen', just in case.
I think she was a girl from the beginning, but there is nothing that prevented gender swap in the process of the Transformation. If she can become Athro from a Human.
Sounds reasonable enough, to see her as female from the start.
The transformation is important, but it isn't the story. The change merely leads the character into where she is going.
I have some problems sorting the Capitalisation in English.
What is a Jigglies?
4600038 the Scientific term is Breasts.
or you may be more familiar with 'Hooters' or 'Tits'?
I just prefer more suggestive expressions.
in this case, jiggling, since no bones support the weight.
Hope you enjoy my choice of words.
I like to see were this is going and I have to ask is this going to school theam
And who is her old friend (just saying sombrero should be in this).
4758784 It is at a Boarding-School, so the School-theme would be there.
We may get more on her old friend along with what is going on as the events devellops.
Sombrero, as in the Mexican Hat, is it?
4761888 its a joke for sombra being in a sombrao
4762549 I guess you may catch the jokes,
but if he is actually there, none will be the wiser of it, himself included.
Maybe that would be the joke of it?
This confuses me yet intrigues me. How is it doing this?
5762507 I would think we need to break it down in order to get an answer.
If it is an intriguing story, but confusing execution? Unless you mean you enjoy a mystery?
I hope to continue and move the story forwards and develop the idea from start to end.