[THIS IS A KINDA SORTA SEQUEL TO MY STORY, 'ERASE THIS'. YOU MIGHT WANT TO READ THAT FIRST IF YOU HAVEN'T ALREADY, EVEN IF IT SUCKS CUZ IT'S AN OLDER STORY EELL OH EEEL]
Zor is now a very respected, legal citizen of the land of Equestria, and lives a pretty average life in the city of Ponyville, despite his otherworldly origins. After he fell from his home in the clouds—the only Hell he ever knew—he lost all of his previous memory; thank goodness. Now, he resolves to create a brand new life in the world below, the only heaven he will ever know.
One day, he unexpectedly receives a letter from Rarity, who was the town's very own seamstress and boutique owner. Now, she operates her own designer name under her own corporation as well. She gives him the proposal, or privilege, to work alongside her and be her second in command. Seeing as she seems to trust him completely with no prior knowledge about him, other than his reckless feat of saving a life in the past. he accepts and heads to the Crystal Empire, where she both works and resides.
Love can never be cut short of credit when you know that it's real, even from the very beginning. Take the opportunity to show that you care with all your heart. Don't pass up the temporary, one-time chance to be happy forever for all time.
Please... Do it for the sake of everything you have ever lived for. Do it for everything that you WILL ever live for. Because without it...you might as well just throw your life away.
Aww, what happened with Zor and Eva? I wanted to see more of them...
Sounds like your trying to create a utopia for this fella.
Any who, on one side, their were a few grammatical errors but who doesn't have them?
On the other, I think its great you actually took your time to explain his surroundings.
Why were you worried no one would like this again?
4655204 Well, she could always come back. I'm still not done writing the whole thing
4656700 I'm a freak about details, and I feel as if I tell too much as opposed to how much I show or wthe amount of stuff that actually happens
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I hope she does. It would make me so happy.
4665618 Aww, did you read the other story too? :3
4665608 Bein a freak about details can be a good thing. lol
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Yeah, it was awesome!
4665718 Thank you...so much!~
4665975
You're welcome!
4675992 So you're going to be one of those people who are going to hate this ALL because of one little cross of boundaries?
That's fine, hey, everyone is entitled to their opinion.
I did it because of one simple rule. Writers are the gods of the story they are telling. Whatever they want to happen, can and will happen. I'm not afraid to push boundaries and be 'mean' or 'unfair' within my literature. (outside, though, I'm a perfectly nice guy! :3)
And I'm not afraid to jerk tears either. You'll see what I mean later on
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Hey, whoa, I don't think he meant it that way!
I think he meant it as in, "This is a sad moment in the story for me," not like an attack on the story or anything. Any story that invokes emotion in the reader--which he made evident in the emoticons he used--is generally accepted as a better story. I don't think he intended that as rudeness at all, but more of an "I didn't see that coming and it invoked emotion in me I wasn't expecting, please do more of this" type of comment.
I've had that kind of comment before, in one or two of my stories.
I certainly don't believe that was a negative comment, and I don't think he wants you to be discouraged by what he said, but rather encouraged to do more things he doesn't expect out of a story. 
4678983 Well if that's the case, then I'm sure to bring more unexpectedness! XD And it is my full intention to take people's emotions on a roller coaster ride with this; it's the kind of writer I've grown to be. I literally live off of my emotions, and music helps me capture those feelings I have and turn them into a stories that have the potential to kill people on the inside. (Probably an exaggeration there. lol)
4675992 I apologize for my comment, and how rude I made it sound. I just work so hard on everything I have here, and I hate to see signs of failure. Please forgive me.
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Congratulations on being favorite number 100.
4679028 So you like it?
Do I get a prize for being number 100?
Thanks so much for the favorite and the watch!!
4679044
A favorite is not an upvote; I favorite a story when I am interested at reading it in the future (my Read it Later list is for poorly written stories) but can't get to it just yet.
You will likely get my upvote once I get to reading this. Your chapters are a little longer than my average chapter, meaning they're still bite-sized enough for me to enjoy. Thank goodness they're not 10,000 words apiece, or I wouldn't ever have the time to read it.
Rest assured, however, that I will be reading it in the near future.
4679051 I'm glad to hear that you're considering my work readable.
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Based on this segment of the description alone, I get the feeling I will enjoy this story immensely.
4679117 That really warms my heart.
I remember this. lol
4691171 So...was it okay? None of the main stats changed, so I actually assume so
4691388 I stand by what I said before. I really didn't see much wrong with it the first time. The editing did help a little though. lol Your literature, your world.