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I mainly write Equestria At War fics, but other things too. If you have story ideas or requests, just send me a message.

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This story is a sequel to The Wrong Mare


The world is aflame and broken. In the Crystal Empire, Rarity tries to ensure her part of the world is less broken than the world outside it, starting with finally taking proper care of the little filly that's supposed to rule it one day. But between the Empress Nightmare Moon's plans for Equus, the damage of Sombra's short but brutal second reign, the danger of the Changeling Hegemony on the western border, and her own personal problems, it's going to be a lot of things, but not easy.

Important: this takes place in the Equestria At War universe. Equestria At War is a mod for the grand strategy game Hearts of Iron IV, be sure to check out their Discord and Reddit if you're not familiar with it. They also have a group on this site: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/212917/equestria-at-war

I couldn't find any Rarity and Flurry Heart art, so I made it myself (hence why it's not very good). This is the base I used: https://www.deviantart.com/elementbases/art/MLP-Base-248-789800058

Rated Teen for sadness, the consequences of war and a deranged tyrant ruling over a nation for a good two and half years, a four-year old orphan and all that entails, crude humour, and possibly more to be added in the future.

WARNING: I have no plan or outline for this story, this is purely a passion project, if it ends up dying in a few weeks months time I'll tell you. I am now in possession of a general outline and plan for this story, not to worry.

Chapters (32)
Comments ( 148 )

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

This is good and i cant see where this is going :moustache:

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

True, this chapter can open many doors. :moustache:

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

Dang I wish I found this earlier!

Great Story and I look forward to more chapters.

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

Well the training bit went like I thought it was. But the good thing is that now Flurry has to ponys to mind her.

I like the way this story is evolving :pinkiehappy:

Ponyville and Ponytown aren't the same place are they?

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No, they are not. For context: cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/814873746435342386/880216526102355998/unknown.png
The red dot is Ponvyille, the yellow dot is Ponytown. As you can see, they are quite far apart.

Odd, Discord never struck me as all that close to the CMC's. Even Fluttershy wasnt all that close, more of a babysitter than anything. So a suprise that an invite was extended.

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Discord does still remain the Spirit of Chaos, but I'll reveal why he extended the invitation in due time.

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

RariDash anyone? 👍

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Not my usual I'll admit, but it fits the story

Fainted. Yeah, the thought of a spawn of Chaos running around might be horrifying to some. Too bad his mistress already knows.

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Indeed. At least it isn't an actual Chaos Spawn (From Warhammer).

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What? Dont like Discord being the cousin of Tzeentch and Khorne? Distant yes, and only seeing each other on holidays when they all gather for Turkey and bitch about the Anathema?

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Oh, he's a distant cousin alright. But he prefers the company of Cegorach to those insane relatives of his.

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

There aren't enough good EaW stories on this site, glad to have found this one. And just as it updates. Neat.

I like how the characters are being handled so far. Can't wait for more.

awesome chapter mate keep it up can't wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

The mare’s red eyes, a similar shade as her mane, met Rarity’s. ‘’I’m Lily Merrimare.’’

Oh boy. This is unexpected. I'm interested to see where this goes.

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Le funny character has arrived, indeed.

Yes, Miss Merrimare. Unexpected but great. I'd like it

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

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Same here. I like how this story go:moustache:

I would find it amusing if Celestia had sent a double to fight Nightmare Moon because she couldnt face fighting her Sister to the death or banishment again.

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Could be amusing, but that's not what happened. I'll elaborate later in the fic.

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

Makes me all the more curious as to what's happened to Twilight

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You'll have to wait and see. What I will say is that Twilight fans probably won't like it, but it makes sense and works in terms of the plot.

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That’s fair. I was more than a little disappointed in the fairly sparse flavor text/events following the other 5 mane 6 if you go NLR. There’s basically nothing besides the stuff from “pardon the element bearers” which left me hella unfulfilled. I hope they revisit Equus after they do Zebrica.

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Revisiting Equus is certainly planned, but I don't think NLR is very high on the list, considering it's content is pretty new compared to the rest.

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That’s fair. Playing Harmonic Equestria is boring. Compared to the Focus Trees of Solar/Lunar Empire, Changlings, or most of Griffonian nations, it’s almost pitiful.

I mainly complain because Twilight/Sunrise are absurdly good advisors and the minmaxer in me is salty I can’t have her.

Shrouded, wisely, took this as his que to retreat. He loved Misty, he really did, but she was snippy before her first three cups of coffee. Shrouded could sympathize; he wasn’t much better.

The most relatable thing I’ve read in a very long time.

‘’I can’t read,’’ Jungle drolly deadpanned.

This is a great punchline!


unfortunately it was spoiled for me, but it’s still funny

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Well, Discord, being the Spirit of Chaos that he is, has to appreciate the single most chaotic force in the entire world--the Cutie Mark Crusaders. Either that, or he sees them as competition for his title.

Now that, I won’t share. ‘’Somewhere, I’m sure,’’ Jungle answered, and that was all he would say.

A lotta loyalty for a hired gun.

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I didn't make the character; you'd be better off asking https://www.fimfiction.net/user/367527/Big+Saij about that.

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