I dont think this is how it should end.
Twilight wanted revenge. She wold get to Canterlot and get it from Fleur.
Why the fuck did Fleur enchant the book anyway? A joke, really? Twilight could sue the living hell out of her for "moral damage" or something like that. Forget the fact that it is legal, it is still cruel and I think books like that would come with a warning. Like, "this book has be enchanted for your maximum reading experience".
So, yeah.One letter to Celestia an Fleur's big idea of a joke geys her to jail.

Also, now that I think of it, didn't the book come from a library? Doesn't that mean ANYPONY could have read it. Like, a FOAL? I mean, you are a kid and you see a book name "Young colts, thight bondage". Your face will basicaly turn into a gigantic interogation point. And if someone tells you you're not suposed to read it, you will want to read it even more. Think about it, think of the consequences.

>mfw it was Derpy

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Overall, it was still a very enjoyable story, but the ending could have used some work.

Surprise ending! Damn I wish this was mature. That was a pairing I have never read before. Still pretty cool.

Son of a biiiittchhhh....

You magnificent bastard.
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THE MAGIC OF SHIPPING!

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I'm sorry that you didn't like it, but four points:

1] Twilight got two enchanted books, one was rejected from a library after being donated (probably by mistake) and scheduled to be shredded (I didn't detail it, but the ponies at that Hoffington place most likely noticed the enchantment as well-- all the more reason to shred it) and the other was from a highly exclusive reading list, only a small group of Canterlot rich twerps and Twilight. It's not like this was a enormous thing affecting many ponies.

2] It's well-specified that pranking people via magical love potions is completely legal as per this fanfic as well as show canon, and Twilight's "moral damage" that she complains about is mostly a smokescreen created by her wishful thinking (I think that I make that rather clear). She thinks she's a sheltered conservative, traditional pony that never masturbates, never looks at porn, and never has naughty thoughts-- but it turns out that she's, well, just a regular mare after all with the feelings and urges typical for mares. I mean, that's why I had the little scene where a shocked Twilight reads a medical textbook and goes, "Oh, what? Girls masturbate? It's not only boys? I never knew!"

3] Twilight wanted revenge but gave up on revenge. She broke the sex potion vials on herself accidentally. In the very end, she gives up on the books and decides to get her mind off porn by reading silly kid-material. Again, it's not like Twilight was out for serious blood or anything by the very end.

4] This is labeled as "comedy", and I wasn't trying to make some kind of political, ideological, or anything statement with it. I also wasn't thinking for people to take the contors of the storyline that seriously. I'm making fun of Twilight series fangirls, the brony community, yaoi fangirls, and anti-sex conservatives in this story. That's it. Not trying to be too serious.

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Was it really that surprising? I dropped so many hints erarlier on...

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Thanks! Glad that you both liked it!

Oh my god what the hell was that i dont care what it was it was great

Aw, you skipped the threesome.

But seriously, great story. I feel bad for Spike though-you know Sweety Belle is gonna drag him to the theater to see that movie.

That was an unexpected reveal.......nicely done.
Should have seen the connection with Dinky being the hand/hoof model for the cover. Never seen DerpTwi let alone DerpTwiDash before.

Is the book Spike's reading also based off a real book? Sounds like Scooby Doo meets the Yellow Submarine.

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Then skip/skim over the m/m parts (colored coded anyways) and just look at the central story, you silly goose.

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It's an affectionate parody of the Beatles' Yellow Submarine, yes, that's also taking in parts of the story of the British glam rock group Sweet (I quote Ballroom Blitz). As well, I'm happy to see that you liked it!

I got really sad when you skipped the twi-derp-dash scene,

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I skimped on the sex scene here to make the whole thing teen, but I'll add the sex scene as a separate thing later... soon. I promise.

Ok, that was an interesting ride that totally screwed me up and I should have never read all that "fuck" in one sitting.

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I'm going to... do something else now...

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Glad that you liked it!

i started reading this for a sock, and figured after that i would just stop, wasnt to interested in actually reading through it.
but then i thought i read a little more, then more, and then i couldnt stop. i feel like im twilight and this fanfic is yctb.

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It's a fun, addictive story, isn't it?

-Bursts into the room, her mane all tangled and messy, covered in a similar sticky goo to Twilight-

That....was.....amazing!

-collapses-

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Oh, gosh....

Well, anyways, I hope that you like this whole story. And this is followed by "Derplight Dash", which is the explicit sex scene that this story skips out on.

I have to say that this story here + Derplight Dash probably was the most fun thing that I've ever written-- or at least it's way up there.

Funny story. Not often I'll read multi-chapter stories. That said, the last two chapters were really sloppy with spelling errors. Then there's this bit.

"I'm... I was thinking... I wasn't thinking," Twilight groaned, trying to light up her horn and magically grab the saddlebags. Her body didn't obey her. It wanted one thing and one thing only. "I was feeling weird, from reading that enchanted stuff, and I planned to take the vials and..." She paused, shivering as Derpy positioned her body right over hers. She found himself unconsciously leaning her sides over and wagging her hooves in the air, supplicant and ready

I believe you meant to say "herself."

Still, fun little read.

Smexy

*Finds out it's Derpy* Woah... o_O Best mindfuck ever!

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Hehe, yeah, I love the ending.

i don't get it who is the real author of the book

Why was Dinky there?

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She was the model holding the apple in the first novel of Twilight Young Colts, Tight Bondage.

I actually came back to this to read all the "book" parts. I gotta admit, I'd really like to see that be a real story.

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Yeah, the more that I think about, the more I want to write the love triangle between Cherry Fields, our shy yet big-hearted protagonist and Jack Bolt, the adventurous, dashing stallion that represents the 'bad boy' streak that makes your heart turn to better, versus Buckle Berry, the kind, caring, and compassionate as well as super-dependable earth pony...

I don't know what exactly I'd do with the storyline per se, though, except for describe the painful coming out processes. I guess it's another one of my great ideas that are just percolating still.

Maybe I'll do it sooner rather than later! We'll see!

1536340 I would definitely support that, since this site could sure use some more well-written M/M romance (clop as well). I really like what you did for your Soarin and Braeburn stories, so I'm pretty confident in your abilities.

Kinda funny how invested I got in a story within a story.

Ballroom Blitz? As soon as I heard "The Sweet", I thought of that band. I love you forever for making that reference.

1627475to Red Wind: when the name Trixie is spelled backwards it looks like this [Eixirt].
When you 'mask' it so-to-speak, the author of this clopfic made it look like Ms.E.I. Xirt.

FAVORITED. GON' READ LATER. THIS LOOKZ GUD.

It would be a hell of a twist if the author isn't Trixie.

Ms. E. I. Xirt
Anyone who doesn't get this, I dont know what to say