Fluttershy and Twilight go on a walk together. Fluttershy leads Twilight to her favourite trail in a forest that Twilight barely knew existed.
But how are you supposed to enjoy a good walk when your tour guide disappears?
I can be both a positive sunflower and a cynical f**k. It depends which life I am living. (Formerly known as Riffmaster)
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Serial killer Fluttershy gets me hard
Another story that makes the cardinal mistake of forgetting that twilight is one of if not the most magically powerful being in equestria and could easily get out of this situation with a little logic/magic/teleportation.
Dumb, out of character, pointless. All in all, just your everyday grimderp shit.
What... The... Frickafrack. That was messed up.
O.O -.- O.O;
Lots of tense confusion, it keeps switching from present to past tense. Also, 'catched' is not a word, Fluttershy is OOC, not a lot of build-up, and poor writing style. The premise is interesting though, and I like the setting of walking through the woods and the foreshadowing.
In other words, 4/10. I suggest redoing this, as most of the problems are from the way the story is written, and not the story itself. You show promise, though, so keep practicing.
4185286 THANK YOU. Why does everybody seem to forget that?
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I will admit, I didn't realize this myself until it was pointed out.
I personally liked it.
Damn it thats fucked up XD still gave it a like it's okay
Huh. Sequel?