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Twidashforever


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Story number one of the Twilight is Magic series. See the author notes in the first chapter for a link to the read order.

Twilight is the bearer of the Element of Magic, or is she? is it possible that the logic is in reverse? Twilight must learn that every action has consequences. Some are more damning than others even in the best of intentions. But with the power to save someone you love, can you honestly say you would do any different?

This story takes place approx six years after the first episode, Friendship is Magic part one. (Five years after EQG)
Eventual-twidash (this should go without saying for a story written by Twidashforever)

it is said that stories are never truly finished, only abandoned. I have not abandoned this story, as such, if you see something I did wrong, please point it out. I will still make changes as needed.


NOTE 10-18-15: Revisions are in progress (Thank you, The Derpy Writer), revised chapters will be labeled as such with an (R)

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im not completely sure what to think of the story so far but i like where it is going. So for this chapter i award you 5 out of 5 mustaches :twilightsmile:
:moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: keep it up I cant wait to read the next chapter

Good story hope you keep it up ;)

Thanks for the feedback, I will try and get chapter 2 out this weekend. (assuming RL doesnt get in the way lol)

I always did love badass Twilight but ALICORN badass Twilight is just....BEYOND WORDS! Well done! I hope you continue this! Can't wait for the next chapter! :heart:

3896937 is it your birthday? Cause here you go!

This was a pretty awesome chapter! I newly fell from my seat laughing at the 'Rarity nearly fucked a bug' part XD Good one on that! :twilightsmile: Keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:

eventual TwiDash

you have my attention

quite a chapter it was really good, the part with fluttershy however im on the fence about, not so much her actions against the changelings but more how she spoke to the dragon I just don't think no matter the situation that she would talk like that to any creature id do feel she could have easily convinced him to help without her being so demanding, maybe im wrong but that's how i feel, but besides that it was a great chapter funny at times and sad at others overall I have to say it was all done very well and was very enjoyable to read keep it up cant wait t unil Friday :twilightsmile:

3897315 Thanks for the feedback, Fluttershy and Applejack are two of the hardest characters for me to write.. I had her be aggressive with the dragon due to the emotional turmoil she was going through, her Iron Will side if you will, she had no time to be nice its been established that when lives are on the line she will come out of her shell and after the loses she suffered this seemed appropriate.

But like I said she is hard for me to write, I will try and keep in mind her demeanor from now on. Though it will be altered from these events, because of what she did and has been through.

Bad news, Good news time.

Bad News first-I am sorry to say Chapter 3 will not be ready to go on friday.

Good News-because chapters 3 and 4 are ready to go now!!!

Chapter 5 will take some doing on my part, I only have it outlined right now (0% started) I hope to have it up by Sunday (fingers crossed) its necessary for the story but I am not looking forward to writing it.

nice, celestia. way to let her down gently.

Celestia’s reply came between grunts, “My dear Twilight, don’t you remember? You were victorious against the Changelings, but in doing so, you destroyed the world.”

So Twilight ended up destroying the world... :scootangel:
What's it Brain? You are going on a trip, fine. Oh Consciousness it's going with you? Well have a nice trisrdtbvg

Also, you killed a bunch of random ponies, but that's small change really. :trollestia:

Although shouldn't they be 'dead' like Rainbow Dash since Death was dead before he could get to them?

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well I don't want to give anything away, But i will say this, remember the 'death wave' left 'sensations' in the other 4, it even caused spike to grow wings.

and if you recall cause of death was linked to the magic drain they suffered, which happened before Twilight attacked.

thats all i will say about that for now, keep reading and it will be discussed, and as usual some will like it, some will hate it, some will be indifferent.

I don't know if it was intentional or not, but you called Twilight a unicorn at least three times. Isn't she supposed to be an alicorn? Also while I enjoy the story, you really need an editor, there are a lot of spelling mistakes throughout not just this chapter but all of them.

3907929 Oops thanks for the heads up, Been reading too many stores on here where she is still a Unicorn.. Ill change those now.

and yes I am looking for an editor.

Unicorn Twilight is now Alicorn Twilight… I hope I don't continue that mistake in the future, thanks for looking out.

Personally i think entire chapter was fine nothing to worry about in fact i think it was a great chapter with plenty of blanks filled in, in short keep up the good work :twilightsmile:

From being : "Hell yeah, Bad-ass Twilight!"
To being quite intriguing.
Please, do go on.:twilightsmile:

...

Clover the cleaver

...

Huh?

3917032 thanks for finding that, should be corrected now,
Cleavor now changed to clever
Spell check can sometimes work against you.

When it came to her Pinkie since

Since

SENSE!

3917116 I shall Volunteer for thy!:twistnerd:

3917540 No problem, I love helping people.:pinkiehappy:

Shit man. Good story and all, but damn you need an editor or something. Although your errors are minor enough to to not break immersion or concentration, they're annoying and all over the place. Like I said: get an editor.

3917992 Icy reader just offered his services today, next chapter should be better.

its hard to edit your own work, I tend to read what i thought I put instead of what was actually put down.

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Understandable, and thanks for the good news. I am now a little more at ease about the quality of the next chapter.

120% cooler

*Cringe* uhh...

*Long pause*

...at least it's more evident that you have an editor in this chapter. Look forward to the next chapter

“Yes, she saved you Rainbow Dash, she saved you from your afterlife, you and everypony from that moment on are now forever stuck here. Never able to move on, never able to be at piece.”

I believe you mean "Peace" here, other than that another good chapter.

Quick update,

Both chapters 7 and 8 are done, they are with my editor right now and i hope to have chapter 7 up by the end of today, although it may take longer (school and all that RL crap)

NOOOOO! I GOT CAUGHT UP!!!!!!! :fluttershbad:

seriously though, i wish there was another chappy for me to immediately jump into

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your wish is my command. (this time :rainbowkiss:)

Side note my editor had RL stuff come up, so for now I am looking for a new one. If you know someone or want to help yourself just PM me

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i lush you :rainbowkiss:

and that was such a cute cuddle moment :pinkiehappy:!!!

:pinkiegasp: I don't believe it! Twilight survive the river?!

chapter 10 Will be out TODAY. shooting for one chapter a day for the next few days

the goal being chapter 15 done by next Thu.

Those feels... I wish those two would just make it official already!
:rainbowkiss::heart::twilightsmile:

Activating motivation proticalls.
WRITE FASTER SLOW POKE YOU ARE WORKING TO SLOW .:flutterrage:
:twilightblush: sorry wrong motivation lets try again
wohoo way to go:yay: You rock:yay:

Nice work, keep it up I am looking forward to more

I might be going to hell with the next chapter, least I know I'll be in good company.

Noooo! You fool, Twilight! Killing someone in Hell sends them to New Jersey! Now Earth is doomed to be overrun by changelings!

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but if earth is overrun by changelings it proves Equestria is real. therefore nopony can laugh at Bronies/Pegasisters who want to find Equestria. right? :pinkiehappy:

Hey they cant screw it up worse then we have :rainbowwild:

Awesome overkill action scene, but hoping for more sappy TwiDash :twilightsmile:

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Trust me, there will be a lot more of that coming.

3987710 Excellent... Ava is pleased with your progressssssss

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