Discord and Twilight summon the rest of the Elements of Harmony for a very important task: one of them has to make a wish -- any wish -- and then Kill Twilight Sparkle. Who will step up to the plate?
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I'll be honest... I don't get it. I'm sure someone who does get it will be along in a minute.
Oh well! Upvotes for being well-written and such.
Well, this was interesting.
I don't get it. Still, interesting to read though.
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Twilight made a wish, and was then told that her wish was granted, but she had to die before sunset to power the spell, or things would go back to the way before. Only, she didn't remember the way before, only the way things had now always been. But she knew what she said as her wish (among other things, it probably included the existence of Princess Celestia), and suspected that the way before was very, very bad.
You're supposed to guess this by Twilight saying that the main purpose of her dying is to power her own wish, and the way that the other characters' wishes turn out.
3854138 Ahhhh... I must have missed some element of it. I shall read it again.
When they were each wishing for what they already had, I knew something a bit odd was going on. I think what really threw me was that ending. I didn't expect it.
Wtf?
WHAT? Its whole premise was of Twilight's wish and what Discord wanted and ------ NOTHING!!!! GIVE US ANSWERS!!!!!!, please
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Well written though it was enjoyable up until the end that made no sense what so ever. It just made my head hurt
....twilight is still alive. broken necks a non fatal but disabling....... though fairly certain modern magical medicine would be able to heal even THAT
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Even after reading that, I'm still not quite getting it. This is almost like the FiM version of Puella Magi Madoka Magica.
3854225 The last line was a paraphrase of Twilight's wish.
3854226 Fluttershy is a master and is able to break the neck at the C1 or C2 vertebrae with her bare hooves, just like in the movies.
3854359 That explains nothing
I mean the sun and moon being sheperded must be by Celestia and Luna thats normal, they were already immortal alicorns and Equestria was already a place of peace and harmony. So I'm still confused as to what her wish was, maybe i'm just stupid but i dont see the answer 
3854359 the movies don't make real life........... not to mention that is huma nvertebrate. a pony like tiwlight would likely have thciker and stronger, tp a point, bones and a compeltely alternate neck structure. not to mention they use their mouths and heads as manipulation tools to begin with.
I don't get it.
Wut..... I mean.... wut.
When it's something like that you can't simply imply it, for the risk of half your audience not getting it. Even reading your comments where you explained it it still just doesn't sound right. Not to mention the fact that I'd take my friend to a mental institute sooner than kill them in this situation. I mean, they have no idea what Twilight's wish was, and therefor had no real good reason to kill her. At all. Period.
Your plot is flawed at its very core, and while flat-out stating things in a story can often be jarring and break immersion, it's better than.... not knowing at all. Certain things should not be known, I get that, but the premise that the entire plot revolves around HAS to make itself known without the aid of comments after the fact.
Plot aside, it was beautifully written.
3854138 I... think I get it...
Still, what does Discord have to do with this? Why were her friends wishing for things they already had? Why do her friends get to make a wish too? When, where and why did Twilight even make that wish in the first place? And who granted it? Was it Discord? If so, why does she need to die? If Discord wanted her dead why was he so dissapointed at the end? And, Really, how were we supposed to guess all that?
It's a nice story and I liked reading it, but you need to explain just a little bit more.
Okay, I THINK I got it, and only because I THINK I got it I'll give it the UpVote and fave it, but really, the whole premise is very, VERY cryptic, and the resolution is only 1 sentence, but with no reactions from the Mane 6.
I absolutely, completely understand this story. I am not lying in the slightest.
3854502 are you actually questioning the realism of a story about colorful talking ponies? You can't summon a pair of scissors out of nowhere in real life either but you didn't say anything about it when Rarity did it.
I am so confused. Normally on a purposefully ambiguous story I would be able to at least tell what's happening on the physical level and a fair portion of what's happening on the Modernistic level. This leaves me more in the dark than The Things They Carried (basically Slaughterhouse 5 with truth/story based Modernism. If you haven't read either, lucky you.). I have two theories on this. 1: This is all an illusion Discord made on a bet with Twilight on how loyal her friends actually are and their wishes were a ploy to return to normalcy. 2: The Mane 6 were living an alternate reality where their wishes aren't what reality is until they wish that reality for themselves (EXs: RD isn't fast and might not even be able to fly. Rarity lives with her parents still and can't succeed with them ruling over her decisions in life. Fluttershy couldn't reform Discord and doesn't believe him to be nice. etc.) and their perception of history is changed to what we know without them realizing it. 3: All of the above.
To Fluttershy: So it goes.
P.S. before you comment on my mistake, remember that 2+2 does not only equal 5, but whatever it needs to be. (a cookie goes to all of you who caught both references and have read all three of those books. I expect you would need a bit of comfort)
3854502 Fluttershy practices chiropracty on grown bears. It would be safe to assume that ponies are much more fragile than what she has worked with. So it goes.
3857789 chropracty, not murdering bares with her littles hooves.
also we need to take into consideration tiwlight as an alicorn. not that alicorns cannot die, but that her bones are likely that of an earth pony now. and many believe the earth ponies toughness is of the supernatural persuasion too.
also taking into consideration that the ponies flourish in a world that, if it was humans rather than ponies, it owuld be a god damn Death World. these little beasts thrive in a world with fucking sand worms, giant magic bears, discord, and diamond tiara running all over the place with lightsabers and shit!
3857789 ........ i think my mind drifted into a Jontron quote for a moment there.
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• Obviously something is off, since the rest of the Mane Six are wishing for things that they already have, but think that they don't. It's never made clear why they think that, especially since they each realize the fact when it's pointed out to them instead of being confused.
• There's no clue as to how this state of affairs came about. If what was "before" was bad, there's no indication of it in the story.
• S01E01-02 and S04E01-02 established that at least one of the royal sisters needs to be active for the Equestrian sun and moon to move (for the last thousand years or more, the tale of Hearth's Warming notwithstanding). Thus if the sun sets, then at least one of them is present and active. Q.E.D. So there's nothing in the story to imply that Celestia and Luna were absent, depriving the last line of its value.
Overall, the story is well-written, but too cryptic. If you want the reader to correctly guess the resolution of the story instead of showing it to him, you have to provide the necessary clues to clearly establish cause and effect—in hindsight, if not before.
Okay, I'm pretty sure I get it now.
The mane six are wishing for things they don't have, the wish is granted but it changes their history (Rarity wants to move out of her parents home, and the wish makes it so she already did) but since their past is changed by the time they made the wish it was pointless because they already had what they wanted. It's like a way for Discord to torture them in a way, they must make a wish and kill Twilight, but their wishes were already granted so it's Ike they killed her for nothing. That's what happened with twilight, the world was in chaos, so she wished for something that would keep equestria in harmony. The wish was granted in the form of the royal sisters, but in the past, so it was like it was always in harmony, and now she has to die so it won't change back (not that she remembers the other timeline because her movies were altered). It's like dies for nothing.
So basically it's just discord being cruel.
3858039 Yep. You get a gold star.
3858138 dude, this genius! You just need to make it a bit clearer, that's all.
This makes even less sense.
Disney ending? This the Moffat ending! A complicated solution, that fixes a problem we all thought can't be fixed and doesn't need to be fixed, but at the end we're still happy because somehow, in some weird, mind-blowing way, it makes perfect sense.
Are you Steven Moffat? Because this alternate ending has Moffat's name written all over it!
That's a good thing btw...
Disney? What? How? Also, why would Twilight change her mind at the very end other for the trolols?
3867805 Because as the moment of truth approaches and you don't know what the result is going to be, the urge to chicken out gets more intense. It's a natural human impulse that presumably ponies also have (see, Sonic Rainboom).
Disney Ending is where they randomly graft a happy ending onto a tragedy, because otherwise audiences complain. Also heard it called 'Hollywood Ending' although that's more often the bad guy dying for no reason.
Love the suspense in this story
And the complicated to understand endings
Very interesting. There is a lot hidden in something that feels very vague here, and it is amazing. Pity not many people seem to realize how intriguing this story actually is.
An interesting concept, but far, far too cryptic in execution. I must say, I greatly prefer the alternate ending; largely because Twilight actually explains what her wish is, and why it is she wants to be killed before sunset. It just makes so much more sense with that explanation there.
Wow. This was a super cool story. And I get it!
3858366 Totally neeed to make this clearer but it is an amazing story.
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people calling this cryptic needs to go read white out by the dobermans way more cryptic than this