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College student working on improving his shtick.


Cody Lofton is a 17 year old teenage boy living in the large city of Indianapolis, Indiana where he lives pretty much a normal life of a teenage boy. However, some strange phenomenon happens with the skies turning from sky blue to bright pink. What makes it even more strange is that he discovers a teenage girl lying unconscious in his own yard. What he does next would change his whole life from there on....

Part of the PonyFall Collaboration

AN: Just got Featured! You guys are so awesome!! :D

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So, this is going to be the prologue for every Ponyfall story?


Not entirely. Each will focus on a different character, but the confrontation with Discord will look similar in each if the showdown is rendered as fact. For Rarity's version, we're going to opt to include it as a flashback of Rarity's so we can claim an imperfect narrator if the details don't mesh perfectly with the others.

434398 Well, of course, and some ponies might not even be anywhere near Ground "Negative One", as it were. I just simply meant that, while the details might not match up perfectly - as if you'd copy-pasta'd it from somewhere - they'd still stay true to each other in form. They might not be the same hips, but they wear the same pants. To completely destroy a movie I've never watched by using it as an analogy.

The movie, btw, is the Brotherhood of the venturing jockstrap. But gender-swapped.

i just realized something....
its going to be a horrible day when MLP:FiM is canceled...

434518 Don't you dare speek of such things! :flutterrage:

Us Bronies will never let the show die! Should it end, we'll still have an incredibly inspired and talented community, bursting with fics, music, and animations. Never will it end! EVAR. Seriously, if it does I'm gonna go raid hasbro and force them to make more.


Now you just gotta add the 1st chapter again.


Me gusta. Considerably better written than the first chapter. Have a mustache. :moustache:

That's just, wow. I wuv dis sooooooooo much! :rainbowkiss: Seriously, it makes it all so much cooler! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

it is better than the original so pretty cool I guess
keep up the good work!

nice prolouge. can't wait for updated ch. 1:scootangel:

OSSIM POSSIM! I've been waiting so long for this. Can't wait for chapter one!:pinkiehappy:

ok, question time, will Rainbow Dash have wings this time around? personally I think she should as (aside from her phobia of clothing) her wings are her most redeeming quality, plus it would help with convincing humans she's telling the truth...or they might just think she used photoshop...in real life

What happened to boob squeezing? :rainbowhuh:

I hope it's gone forever :pinkiesick:
Really, the style isn't bad so Silverness, if your rewriting it PLEASE skip that part and maybe cover the girl instead of staring. This way your selfinsert will become much more likable:twilightsmile:

I wanna write one 4 derpy + awesome prologue :moustache:

Hey, Silverness here! Finally, Chapter One is done and now posted here. If you notice any thoughts that need to be italicized, tell me because the italics didn't transfer right from google docs to fimfiction. So enjoy Chapter One! :twilightsmile: :heart: AND give Bridgebrain, my pre-reader some credit along with Ponyaddict and TheSlorg (when he had time), but Bridgebrain did most of the work

Oh cool, does this mean the quality control issues have all been sorted out?

577914 Yup, we're supposed to get the chapter reviewed three times before posting it up. Bridgebrain checked it all three times so yeah. Also, we got things sorted out :twilightsmile:

I wonder what a rainbow milkshake tastes like, spicy? (Wink)

Is it bad that I thought of something completely different when he said The Milkshake club?

578029 Haha, I think I know what you meant, but yeah I got that a few times

all I can say is, ITS ABOUT DAMN TIME! lol excellent chapter btw, I trust we can expect more regular updates? (I hope? pls?):pinkiehappy:

yo just saying but "that want beat the crap outta me." should be that want to....hope that helps

578075 I'll try to do regular updates (Yes, I hope the updates wont be monthly, possibly a week or two updates)

578089 Thanks! :twilightsmile: google docs screwed up some of the wording when I transferred it over

578168 Some of it is redone, like some major and minor details

So awesome that the revised version is now out! Now... I... want... MOAR!
Keep up the swag.:moustache:

Having crazy thoughts is only funny in the Discord story.

578341 Exactly :rainbowlaugh: Don't worry, Cody rarely has crazy thoughts :twilightblush:

I'm kinda mad. Why? Because for a month or so none of my favorite stories have been updated. So when I saw the 1 next to the gold star I felt :pinkiehappy: then I read the chapter and was :rainbowhuh: I Read this already. I know you spent a long time on this and all but I am :twilightangry2:

578694 Don't worry, I was already working on Chapter Two and have ideas for it already, I'll start working on it as soon as possible

Okay, Cody is gonna get the crap beat out of him by Rainbow Dash. Ironic because that's his favorite pony beating him up, and again ironic because he just escaped being pancaked by a couple football jocks. Plus, I'm starting a story on GDocs about me finding Spitfire. No nudity, I find her in her Wonderbolts outfit.

Why didn't he just leave her on the porch and then open the back door from the inside of the house?
I can't wait til' the next chapter when he get's his ass WHOOPED!

Say, I noticed your a fan of a certain tense (the dreaded present tense) and I won't lie, I hate it. I hate present tense (the past tense system is a lot more professional, in my opinion, and results in an easier to comprehend story. Maybe that's just because EVERY book I've ever read is in past tense but still... Anyway, nice chapter and I hope it gets out soon.

579177 I actually didn't have this at present tense at first, my pre-reader told me that since it's happening and your seeing it, its present tense

578799 That sounds interesting. Are you with the Ponyfall crew?

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YAY!!! The repost I've been waiting for!:rainbowlaugh::ajsmug::derpytongue2::pinkiehappy::raritystarry::twilightsheepish::yay:
Keep it coming.:scootangel:

Finally! I thought it was just sitting in my favorites for nothing!

579203 Well, I mean, you're conveying a story, a message, you're telling the reader something, the reader wasn't nescesarily there in the moment, as it happened, so it wouldn't really be in the present tense, as far as I know, but then I'm in grade nine and I only read 0.5 four-hundred page books a day, so what do I know?

579273 Same grade :twilightsmile: and I have no idea why either *shrugs* but he is a pre-reader and did a pretty nice job doing it though


I'm eager to find out where this one is going
... although, I gotta agree with Jaohni on this one.:ajbemused: The present-tense makes it a bit hard to read. I usually prefer past-tense with the omniscient third-person perspective. I'd say you should probably stick with what you have though. Seems like you put a lot of work into getting this chapter together. If I were the author, then another re-write would probably cause a severe damper on my mood. :pinkiecrazy:

I swear I've read this before...?

579582 I prefer past-tense too really

579781 It was part of the "Save Ponyfall" thing and all of us had to do it (some major and minor details were rewritten)

579801 Yeah, this is the rewritten Chapter One, it still has some of the details from the old chapter, but I did modifications on it (along with pre-reader help)

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