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Months after being defeated by Twilight Sparkle, Sunset Shimmer has changed her life for the better. Since then she has done what she could to atone for all the wrongs she's done. Even though she has made new friends it is on Christmas Eve while everyone celebrates the holiday Sunset Shimmer chooses to remain home instead. That is until she is visited by a certain legendary figure to teach her the meaning of Christmas.

(This is my first Christmas special, I also want to thank Shadow Bolt for the help on the story. Also there are a couple sad scenes but for some reason the site won't let me add a sad tab to it.)

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This was BEAUTIFUL! :fluttercry: I loved everything you put into it! I even almost cried too! Lol. Keep up the great work and have a MERRY CHRISTMAS!! :pinkiehappy:

:rainbowlaugh:Love the Picture.:rainbowlaugh:

This is SOOOOO ADORABLE!!!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: And Celestia was there...

3666123 I totally agree with ya :twilightsheepish:

3666149
Thanks, drew and colored it myself.

3666123
Thanks and a Merry Christmas to you

Dat story image:
Santa: Hohohoho*BANG*

I apologize, but I just can't go on. The story is grand, and I see much potential, but I keep running into bad punctuation. My inner grammar nazi wants to start whacking something until it falls over.:ajbemused:

All you need is to clean up the grammar a bit and you'd be golden!:rainbowkiss:

I'll give you three hearts and two staches.
:heart::moustache::heart::moustache::heart:

it's cheesy and awesome at th same time!

This was pretty cute, but what did commas ever do to you, man? They feel entirely left out. :fluttershysad:

5108226 I'm currently looking for a new proof reader:derpyderp2:

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Woo!

I'd love to give these three stories of yours a second read if you go over them again with this new proofreader. There's potential in all of them, but much of that potential was not realized because of the poor grammar.

i just read this now, and i loved it, I was no surprised at who Santa was talking to at he end lol t was a very cute moment and story indeed :twilightsmile:

that was very cliche yet very heartwarming. Merry Christmas

5360018 thanks and Merry Christmas to you:twilightsheepish:

This got read. Sorry for the excess commentary. One guy won't shut up for one minute.

5413997 This is so cool that you livestreamed this story, You guys were funny. I apologize for the grammatical errors, I just got a new editor and I hope to get this story fixed soon.

5414655 Alrighty! Glad you liked it. XD

This is such a beautiful Christmas story. One worthy of Sunset's character! I can imagine Sweetie Belle starting up this song for her:

I especially love the FlashShimmer moment! :heart:

A couple of typos that could use some fixing, but I'm not complaining. Take your time and Merry Christmas! :raritywink:

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