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Sunset will search for the perfect gift for Spike on Hearths Warming Eve. She wants this to be perfect for her dragonfriend. She will end up getting Spike two gifts instead of one. Takes place before the chapter "Four Months Later"

Consider this a Christmas special. Merry Christmas guys!

Edited by the Great and Powerful Alticron

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Smart for not giving too many 'hints'

A Spike/Sunset Shimmer ship... Hmmmm...
Sunset dragon?

Anyway, on to the story:

The characters honestly seemed not like themselves. However, I can look past that.

Inside were a pair of really nice sock and a cute hat. They were really nice. But something seemed unique or personal about them.

I'm trying to not be nitpicky, but honestly those three sentences were absolutely painful. Sock should be socks, second sentence needs rewording as to not be redundant, and third is just... No. reword that also, something like "But something seemed different about them. The style in which they were made looked quite familiar."

Which brings me to my next point: Spike can make cloths? That would make sense since he's over at Rarity's so often, but he isn't as he's in love with Sunset... Hmmm...

Where did Sunset get the extra 10 bits? I'm assuming Rarity gave it to her for 5, but it would develop their relationship a little more if Sunset has a small panic moment and offers to work off the other ten or something.

Now to end my rant with the end of your rant: Ugh. I honestly did not need that image in my head.
I don't like how it ends, it distracts from the mood and... A dragon and a pony???

3626402 you are completely right, I made some really silly mistakes, along with the math. I have no idea how I did that wrong. Thanks for pointing that out.

Happy to help :pinkiesmile:

Also, the cover art is extremely cute. Did you make it yourself? If not, I have suspicions of the story being inspired by that picture.

3626426 no I just found it. I wrote the story because of my other story Sunset's Beauty. I just thought it would be nice for the holidays.

Hmm, I'll have to go see the other story.

Sweet story i give it a nice 7.6/10 :twilightsmile:

Can I get a link for what this pertains to?

WHY U CRITICIZING THE STORY DUDE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :fluttershysad:
Not sounding mean or anything, but even with those mistakes and raised questions,
this is still a great read to enjoy, especially for the holidays!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you for the story DOCTORWHOOVES, and Happy Holidays!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

3628013 thanks man, i always like to here it when someone likes my story!

Np dude, and if you need any editing or proofreading help,
feel free to hit me up!!!!!

Now that was rare. She checked and saw it to be on sale for 45.

That one too :)

Haha, how does it feel to be the comic relief Twilight?

This was good story, I gotta re-read the 2 chapters in between this story.

Wow! It seems your a big SpikeXSunset fan.... how nice....:yay:

LOL poor poor twilight, scarred for life.:rainbowlaugh:

I found a quite a few typos,

“Oh Sunset darling, it’s good to see you. May I ask why you’re here? Rarity asked.

“Mmm morning sweetie. Spike said in a sleepy tone.

These are missing quotations at the end.

“Absolutely, that will be 350 bits please” The clerk says getting said gem.

“Well thanks, saves me a trip” Sunset said taking the book.

“I made it for you” Sunset said in a low but loving tone.

There are periods missing at the end of these quotations.

Now, there's something I don't understand,

She walked over and noticed a very nice chain; it was actually the most beautiful one at the stall. She checked to see what it was, it was actually platinum! Now that was rare. She checked and saw it to be on sale for 45.

“I would like to purchase the Platinum chain please.” Sunset requested.

“Sure thing, that will be 35 bits.” The clerk said gathering the chain.

Other than all that, I really enjoyed this Christmas Special! :twilightsmile:

On to the sequel!

and this is why romance and fan fiction mix perfectly

“I love it! I can’t believe it! Starswirl the Bearded’s book on light and dark magic! There are only three of these!” Twilight said with great joy.

“Starswirl the Bearded’s book on light and dark magic” are the journals confirmed. Please tell me someone gets that reference.

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