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The warrior Samurai Jack is locked in a death battle with his people's mortal enemy, the dark wizard Aku. However, before Jack can vanquish this scourge once and for all, Aku tears the fabric of reality and sends Jack into the void. However, instead of going into the future as Aku had planned, Jack crosses into a different dimension entirely, and ends up in a peaceful world inhabited by strange horse-like creatures.
When the evil Jack had fought to destroy follows him to this new world and threatens the peace of this tranquil society, Jack must once again battle the forces of darkness to end the threat of Aku, and get back to his home, where his own desperate people, and the villainous Aku, await.


Officially on hiatus until the strike of further creative impulse. Apologies!

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 72 )

Oh boy..Wait till Skeeter finds this one.:trollestia:

He will champion you.

i think.:unsuresweetie:

EDIT: a bit more spacing might be required here, the paragraphs blend into one wall of text. other than that, good job on a first story!

Thanks for the heads up, it's been taken care of! :pinkiehappy:

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Much better! That's how it should look! I'll be sure to keep an eye on this one:pinkiesmile:

Hm.

Bit fast of a start...

Still.

I do like a good Samurai Jack crossover fic. Let's see what you got.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Only if it's worthy enough.

This is undecided, for now.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Love it :pinkiehappy: two of my favorite universes combined. Nice start!

xbox432 #7 · Dec 5th, 2013 · · · I ·

I enjoyed it, the pacing was good and you did a great job of writing out Jacks fight. I think I'll enjoy seeing Jack interact with the ponies, he deserves some adorableness in his life. :scootangel:

sniggles #8 · Dec 5th, 2013 · · · I ·

I want to see Aku vs Discord. Anyways, great idea for a story!

Karsap #9 · Dec 5th, 2013 · · · I ·

Long ago in a distant land, I, Aku, the shape-shifting master of darkness, unleashed an unspeakable evil. But, a foolish samurai warrior wielding a magic sword stepped forth to oppose me. Before the final blow was struck, I tore open a portal in time and flung him into the future, where my evil is law. Now the fool seeks to return to the past, and undo the future that is Aku.

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such an awesome show cut down in its prime

R.I.P. Jack may u have slain aku in the next season

samurai jack kicks all kinds of ass write on my friend write on:moustache:

You have my attention. Please do go on.

I like the premise. I'm a fan of Samurai Jack. I like the scene you set and how well it's written. The action and emotion flow decently if not really well. My only pet peeve is that it's such a short chapter. Chapters this short bug the hell out of me.

This is original I could never have thought about making a crossover with samurai jack so I congratulate on this idea so make more please.

DVAN56 #16 · Dec 5th, 2013 · · · I ·

Not going to lie, when I read

a frightful conglomerate of beast, bat, and insect

I was going "F:flutterrage:CK! Manticore cliche opening."

But you made the fight scene very enjoyable to read. It's rare to find a writer that can pull off a cliche opener so I salute you good sir. Keep up the Awesome work

Rx925 #17 · Dec 5th, 2013 · · · I ·

Samurai Jack/MLP Crossover?
All of my YES!!!

A very nice start. I hope to see it continue. This has much potential. :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Paton Pendeng deleted Dec 6th, 2013

The great zambie slaying Admiral Popeye requires more of this awesome story!!

Gyvon #22 · Dec 6th, 2013 · · · I ·

Just came here to say that you picked the most epic cover image ever.

Of all time.

make more pls

i love you...

-TGM- #25 · Dec 6th, 2013 · · · II ·

Pretty good so far. Keep up the good work. :moustache:

Nice chapter!

I can't wait to see the reactions of Twilight, Rarity, and the others to Jack. I'm sure it will be great! :pinkiehappy:

skyace #27 · Dec 6th, 2013 · · · II ·

I honestly only have one gripe. Jack was un-named until after Aku sent him to the future. It wasn't until he encountered a group of teenagers who kept referring to him as Jack (in the same manner someone would use "dude" or "man") that he decided to adopt the name as his own. Your story has him thrown into a different universe instead of the future of his own. Maybe you could have had Rainbow Dash give him the name, sounds like something she would say. Just a nitpick, enjoying the story otherwise.

...Please don't have the ponies attack him. For once I'd like to read a xover were the ponies are portrayed as xenophobic. I mean, they know of griffins, D-Dogs, minotaurs, and Dragons, surely they can be a little understanding? :rainbowhuh:

You're doing a great job of capturing the characters....well, character, in their dialogue. As such, I can't wait to watch the interaction between Jack and the other ponies. ....Though I do have a question. Why is he calling himself Jack when he was never sent to the future were the people on the streets first called him Jack? Did he just choose a random name that he heard while in England?

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You both present a problem I did struggle with, and have only recently come up with an answer for. Hint hint it's the same answer that writers usually assign to problems that need an inexplicable explanation :pinkiesmile:

Working to integrate the change as we speak. They will appear in the next chapter. I hope the finished product is acceptable! :twilightblush:

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What this good fellow said. This has all the makings of a great crossover. The subdued but straightforward dialogue and mellow set up feel very reminiscent of a Samurai Jack episode, so kudos on that. But he is right. Jack was unnamed until the three street punks early in his travels in the future actually gave him the name 'Jack.' We've never found out what his real name is, and since you say he went to Equestria INSTEAD of going to the future, he has never met anybody to give him a name. Jack isn't something he'd call himself, or ask other people to call him at this point, since he's never even heard of such a name.

left the manat a loss

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Thanks! I had to rush to change a bunch of words at once, and I guess I didn't pay enough attention while doing so :twilightblush: Good eye!

Awesome first chapter, and an excellent idea of a crossover. I have high hopes to see this continue and grow.

3588996 I'M BLIND GODDAMMIT You're welcome!

:moustache:awesome fanfic idea but jack could have killed the manticore in seconds he's beaten army's of bad dudes before that had guns and i don't think a manticore is faster than a bullet/ laser anyway grate story so far keep up the good work.

please, for the love of all that is holy, bring the Scotsman to Equestria!

Great story. I'm really looking forward to seeing how this will change thing's. What will everypony think of Jack and his story?

Oh yes.. I am going to enjoy this story :moustache: Can't till the story really gets goin'.

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Woah friendo... you may be on to something. It won't happen in this story, but maybe, just maybe I'll make a comedy for the Scotsman. :raritywink:

He always was my favorite character :rainbowkiss:

Freyr #40 · Dec 7th, 2013 · · · II ·

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THIS! RIGHT HERE!

he was the funniest character ever. Please do something with him. Anything.

Samurai Jack… at least a good 37.48% of my childhood… I f*cking love you.

3591114 IF I DO NOT SEE THE SCOTSMAN IN THIS I WILL LOSE MY SH*T!

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Meh, storytelling. Maybe the fight with Aku tired him out?

>>To the Author

Random Tip / Advice that you are free to disregard:

Every part of this nightmarish creature screamed apex predator, and every part of this nightmarish creature looked as though it wanted to make him its next meal.

You use 'nightmarish creature' twice to describe the manticore. It doesn't seem to flow well. Maybe, 'Every part of this nightmarish creature screamed apex predator, and every part of that apex predator looked as though it wanted to make him its next meal.' instead?

This really has some potential. You've really captured not only how Jack talks but also how he observes things. I really want to see what threats come to Equestria, and also what they will call him (I don't think "Jack" is a common name in Equestria).

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Yeah, that's kinda how I saw it, too. He did just fight the master of darkness, after all.

I usually try to avoid repetition in my writing, it's one of the things I look for the most when I'm editing, and it's something that can really bother me while reading. That being said, sometimes repetition can be used for emphasis, and that's what I tried to accomplish here. However, I do like your idea better. Thank'ye!
Moustache for your contributions :moustache:

LOL OFF AN OLD SHOW LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL PROBABLY STILL A GOOD STORY THO

Thought its just a nit, I think Flutters uses the word 'mister' a bit too often, in places where it would be implied even if not said.

... and for some reason my brain keeps putting Fluttershy's lines into AppleBloom's voice. I think that's more me being tired and any issue with your writing.

The stallion looked over and, when he saw Jack staring, turned around to face him, and shouted "OI!" He spat as he spoke. "WHAT'RE YOU LOOKIN' AT, YE PAJAMA WEARIN' DAISY?!"

So you do read the comments!
Scotsman For the WIN

That Scotsman stallion, that made my fucking day. :rainbowlaugh:

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Of course I do! Audiences have oodles of great ideas; I got the idea for the Scotsman from the Epileptic Wombat fella :pinkiehappy:

you actually put it in, hazaah!

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