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Rainbow Dash had grown used to hiding her feelings for her friend until one dream shakes her to the core. Now she is up all hours of the night, unable to eat, sleep or even fly right. However, her pain is nothing compared to the oncoming threat to Ponyville. A griphon regime is rising, vengeance of years of oppression in their eyes. An AppleDash story with a side of chaos.

Chapters (13)
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Comments ( 188 )

tracking; interesting concept but alas its time for bed

I felt scared and sad for dash.. But the rainboom made it slightly better

Mood swings much? (Discord induced mood swings much?)

I started reading this story because the description sounded EXACTLY like I story I have in mind to write. So far, aside from Dash's insomnia, I think I don't have to worry about the stories being the same. Anyways, I'm intrigued. The writing is not bad and I'm a sucker for AppleDash. Can't read any more at the moment, but I'll track it and read it later ;)

wow, I am fairly surprised how well this got me immersed !
Aj sure is lovely on this fic, I will be looking forward to this story

Need moar of this

what will AJ do??

I bet shes the depressed one now :ajsleepy:

329521 It's funny you ask that, cause Chapter Four will be up in about twenty minutes or so. Just gotta do the finishing touches and proof-reading :D

Nuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu :twilightoops: cliffhangers! *shakes screen* I need more story!

:ajsmug: btw, I'm been raiding around and your story is still one of my top 5 to date, utterly compelling to read, can't wait for the next chapter!

329680 Yes, I have a problem with those. It's a sickness. But anyway thanks for that. Good to know that people like the story so much.

This is so good, tracked so hard that tremors was felt in Australia.

Well done sir, I will not B.S. you, I was shaking while reading this chapter, the emotions that you conveyed through words were very convincing, I found myself with shivers, and I eagerly await your next chapter.


I hope the conversation between AJ and RB will make AJ realize something, seriously what a strong headed mare :ajbemused:

I must say, this is amazing. Great everything... I had this tracked but not read when it was only two chapters, I'm glad that i read it now... but them cliffhangers! :fluttercry:

Thanks, I had to to write something happy at the end of such a sad chapter :D

you're pretty good at conveying emotions. Really hit me hard (only term i can think of atm). Sadness and then happiness... awesome. I can't wait to read the next chapter

At least 20% more adorable than the others...:heart:

I agree with spitfire:rainbowkiss:

And now, time for another review
Vocabulary... Scholarly
Grammar... Great
Storyline... Amazing
Attention Grabbers... Plentiful
Mistakes... Petty
Action... In Necessairy Places
Emotional... There When Required
Short Review,
Wow, just... Wow. If you ever become an author, I will not be suprised in the sleightest. It was an emotional roller coaster and it completely shows your abilities to portray emotions.


Max strongly approves
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335862 As an aspiring writer, I appreciate the compliments. I actually write books usually. One of them will be completed (eventually) and submitted to an editor (when I can afford it). It's a good thing I'm sick and can't go outside, 'cause now I have more time to write! BITCHIN'!

335912 Well, im sure that book will kick ass, bro

I just read through the first five chapters of the story and I gotta say that I am very impressed with your ability to convey emotions. This story was just favorited, liked, tracked, and you have earned yourself a watcher.

Gosh.. I read chapter after chapter.. simply not able to let this go.. I just had to find out more and see what would happen!

I'm not afraid to admit I actually spilled tears a few times in some of Rainbow's really tight situations..:fluttershysad: This story is just so touching.. it really reaches out to you.. you have some fantastic writing skills!

Please write more soon!

337527 My friend, I cried during that scene, and I WROTE the damn thing. Thanks for the compliments though. You'll be happy to know that I'm currently sick and can't do anything else but write this story. NO LIFE FOR ME! :D

I cannot express in word how much I love this story, I think I shed some tears :pinkiesad2:

OOOOHHH HAY! This just got real!

rainbow dash moving out without saying a thing saddens me
seems quite out of character but considering how bad she is :pinkiesad2:

339357 Damn you sir i was about to post that exact comment.

Anywho very well done, please keep up the spectacular work.

Expect a review from yours truly when all is said and done.

Devilblade out :coolphoto:

Squeee! I actually did squee when I saw another chapter of this story had been posted :twilightblush:

Things are getting tense with the griphon situation too! More I need more! This is just brilliant!

Drunken Hoof Style, pfffft xD

Applejack is totally baddass and drunken hoof style GO GET'EM PINKIE!

I am really loving this story please keep up the great work!

drunken hoof style oh god yes yes yes so much win

OMG! Don't scare me like that! I was practically sitting on the edge of my chair during those really intense situations AJ and Twilight got themselves into!

Thankfully Pinkie Pie came and kicked some rotten griphon butt! You go Pinkie! :pinkiecrazy: Drunken hoof style rocks xD

Pinkie Pie the master of being drunk: canon NOW!

drunken hoof style. that was probably the most epic thing i've read EVER

343272 I'm loving how that is the big takeaway from this chapter. Honestly, I was surprised that no one else had thought of it. I came up with the idea yesterday and researched it. Couldn't find a reference to it so I typed up this chapter as soon as possible.

Rock lee pinkie comes to the rescue
:applejackconfused:
:pinkiecrazy:
:twilightsheepish:

I am so excited to see dash comeback and save the day :rainbowkiss:

CLIFFHANGINGISH ENDING.

D:

edit: i was listening to loyalty when you posted this.

Very nice chapter. Rainbows vivacious attitude never fails to impress

Squee! Rainbow Dash is back to save Ponyville! :pinkiehappy: *dances happily* Gilda is soooo going down! In 10 seconds flat! :rainbowkiss:

I had goosebumps at the end of that chapter :pinkiegasp:
Rainbow is in da house, the party is just getting sttarrrttteeddd :rainbowwild: awesome chapter as usual!

You sir just ..... incredible I have no words.

In the fight scene i was all :rainbowdetermined2: shit just got real

Then when rainbow as in the hospital i was all :fluttercry: :pinkiesad2: :raritycry: :raritydespair: :applecry:

And at the end i was all :yay: :twilightsmile: :twilightblush: :pinkiehappy: :rainbowkiss:

Have all my :heart::heart::heart: you deseve it

That was very touching... Especially at the end. :raritycry: I tip my hat to you, and hopefully you write some more

349167 oh I'm not done yet. we still have plenty of ground to cover

349140 I will cherish it forever buddy :D

349196 Hey dude because I love your amazing story and I was wondering if you could give me your opinion on mine?

Its called Blaze Of Glory, Broken Shadows and its my first fic respond when you can.

:raritycry:
At the hospital scene, that almost got me

I was wondering if you will cover AJ and rainbow's relationship growing and being worked by both on this fic, that would be awesome :rainbowkiss:

or maybe in a sequel story :scootangel:

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