A Pegasus, born on accident and left to die in the freezing blizzard of the Forbidden Ice Mountains. Adopted by Eskiponies, and then kidnapped. For 6 years of torture, she lived, until she discovered her power to create ice daggers with a wave of her hoof. Gone into hiding, for fear, until she is accepted as the Wonderbolt's student.
An Earth Pony, born to a Wonderbolt Family. Thrown out as an outcast, he ran away, finding himself at the edge of the world, and falls into a pit of lava. Amazed that he's alive, he finds he has the power to create fire and lava with a wave of his hoof. He goes into hiding, until he meets the pony of his dreams. His life seems happy, but his power still haunts him.
One mistake from both ponies, is about to change everything. Equestria is about to crumble, and they are the only ones who can stop it.
since I'm the first to comment I would like to say it is a honnerd. And this is a good story, so keep it up.
3495691 Thank You! I love your avatar!
Great use of sisterly love! Any way, I found just a couple erors, can I fix it up alittle?
3496573 Yeah, sure. I'll be working on Chapter 4 later.
I read the description for the story, and then the romance tag, and you had me hooked. It seems like it can be something worthy of the featured box. Now, time for some criticism. You could use some more detail when writing, longer stories are better than short ones! Your grammar could also use a little touch-up; perhaps you could get an editor.
You have my attention with this story. So excuse me now, I'mma go read some more of it.
This could be a great chapter, but it's rather short. Everything seemed to be rushed. It definitely needs some work.
Can you work on it now? If so, WORK ON IT! I like how it is going so far. Spitfire abandons family? What is wrong w/ her?
3498441 Spitfire cares about the Wonderbolts. Tat's it.
where is chapter 4?
3501932 I'm writing it.
Finally got around to reading this, was going to wait for more chapters but what the hay.
First off I feel slightly offended at having not noticed any mistakes on my first read through, even in over-edited stories I can still find a few pretty easy so good job there.
Story seems interesting thus far and although I don't mind it, it still seems like you're putting more effort into shard's part of the story then molten. Although I still couldn't care less because Shard sounds adorable.
Lastly... um... oh, good story and keep up the good work.
3519011 Well, Melting Sun isn't the one being raised by a tribe.
I am fire not ice
more Molten please
3520849 He's the next chapter!
can't wait
Wow your best story yet!
This is a really great story and I can't wait to read more great job Pinklemonlimesprinkles!