(Under Renovation)
Being the subject of a great and powerful destiny isn't all it's cracked up to be.
If anything, it's annoying. And extremely painful.
After awakening to his fate as the purple one, Spike is immediately tasked with preventing the world from falling into the clutches of a being known only as the Shadow Sage; who, after being imprisoned in the distant past, is more than ready to make his grand return.
And what better way to commemorate the event than razing the entire world?
Now, Spike must find the four Guardian Dragons and receive instruction in each of the elements of Fire, Lightning, Ice, and Earth. Mastering all four is the only chance he has of sealing away the malevolent evils to restore order and harmony.
One minor problem: the Guardians are long gone, having faded from history at the time of the Shadow Sage's previous sealing. In addition, his forces have kidnapped the members of the Mane Six for unknown purposes, and now they must be rescued before it is too late.
"Remind me again why the fate of the world is resting on my shoulders?"
This is interesting.
Is this a Spilight perhaps?
You have my interest.
In all honesty I'm surprise something like this hasn't been done before.
3228436 Likewise.
This gonna be a Spike Harem story? Dragon with swag.
A story based of the Legend of Spyro? I like it
! But, I'm also using the title ''the Legend of Spike'' for my series 
. I hope this doesn't cause any problems 
.
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I can change the title if it's a problem. And your story "The Legend of Spike: Discord's Mask" is awesome. It's a great read and really captured the LoZ style well.
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To be honest, I haven't really decided how it's going to end yet. Sort of leaning towards two possibilities at the moment, but still not sure.
3229387 I see
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I don't want it to be a problem, but I would appreciate it if you did. How about ''The Legacy of Spike: Rise of a Hero?''
3229387 It's okay, take your time.
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Actually, I was thinking of a different word, like "Tale" or another word like that. "Legacy" does sound pretty nice, though.
3229387 if this is based off the ledgend of spyro are you gonna use dawn of the dragon?
3230265 Sorry to disappoint,'already used.
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What's already used?
By the way, how do you make the reply comment show the name and not the number?
3230921
Wow, I really liked this! Of course that might be because it also goes along with my headcanon...
One minor thing that may or may not be a thing: When a character talks, you might want to use " " around that sentence, i.e.
As for the pairing, I root for anything other than Sparity. Not that it'll ruin the story, it's just that it's such a common pairing
A fave and thumbs up for you
By the way, the reply comment numbers change into names when you refresh the page!
3229019
I think he made a direct reference with the 'not a goodbye' speech.
Hmm, this description made me think of The Legend Of Spyro, are you using that as a basis for this story or something, you're just going to be using Spyro's story, but Equestrinizing it? I'll start reading now, before I go any further....
Well, it's a little interesting, but I think it probably would have been better if it was probably had a lot more original elements, so to speak... Also, the timeline of events seems a bit skewed, as well as some of Spike's feelings regarding how he felt during the number of times he was left out...
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Thanks. For the record, I was trying to show that they didn't need to speak, since they could guess what the other was thinking. Sorry if I didn't make that clear.
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The story will span across the Legend of Spyro trilogy, though I won't be copying it word for word. Some areas will differ from the original.
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Well, I am basing the main plot on the Legend of Spyro, but that's only in general. I have my own ideas that will be coming into play in later chapters. Also, most chapters won't be written in journal form.
Concerning Spike's reaction, it's been a couple of years since he became independent, so I don't think he would hold a grudge for something in the past especially now that he's older and wiser.
As for the timeline, I apologize if it's vague and skewed. Do you have any suggestions?
3230921 The title 'The Legacy of Spike'. I've actually finished the first in the series. I'm planning on writing the sequel after a few other ideas.
Peewee's back!!!
Peewee!
Man, it's so hard to find a Spike fic with him in it.
Yay for Peewee's return!
Good stuff. Can't wait for the adventure to continue.
Well, this has my interest from the start... based on the Legend of Spyro, but still in the world of FiM...
Wonder how you'll settle the Spyro-Cynder 'romance' if its Spyro instead
3279245 peewee is Sparks
But 100 percent cooler
Oh, yeah! This is Pewee!
This is going to be good.
Burning Desire's kiss.
i hope it ends up as a spilight
Okay. I am hooked. I can't wait for more. I especially like your take on Spike. He's intelligent, snarky, and exactly how I would imagine him to grow up. I really want more. Please provide?
K
First, let me say that this story has lots of promise. I don't read many stories with Spike as the hero, but this is one of the best so far.
I think you're overdoing it with Spike not noticing Apple Bloom's feelings. If I'm reading your story correctly, she's been having feelings for him for around 4 years, but he never picked up on it. It would be one thing if Spike knows about her feelings, but chooses not to talk about them, but Spike not noticing at all seems unrealistic.
I did notice an error, though:
The above section first implies there is only one statue, only for the next sentence to say that there are more than one statue.
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Thanks for your comment. And I didn't notice that little error. There's a lot that I manage to overlook, so I'm grateful for you pointing that out.
As for Spike not noticing Apple Bloom... wait a couple more chapters to see. Don't want to spoil anything, but it involves a confrontation by his mother and aunt.
Sorry, but my writing style sort of favors long stories because I have too much for just one chapter, though I've been trying to restrain myself otherwise none of it would make sense. I prefer to build-up certain things then reveal the real reason later on.
APPLEBOOM IS WITH A BONER NOW, NO?
Well Spike, looks like war is coming. Better power up and get ready for the march.
The shit storm is over here now.
First, about the fight scene, and what I believe about fight scenes in general:
Trying to make your fights like video game fights isn't a good idea, in my opinion. Video game fights are meant to be fun because of the interaction, the challenge, the discovery of all the boss's nasty tricks, and ultimately the triumph. In a fan fiction, or any written work, readers do not get to interact with the work, and any actions done in a fight scene can drag the scene on until it is boring. For example, in Persona 3 the final boss has more than 10 forms to go through. Players would enjoy this for all the challenge and variety it gives them. Someone just watching would be bored, and someone reading about it would want to know what page to skip to so they can get on with the plot. In the end, video games fights have intrinsic entertainment value, but story fights do not.
I think you did well with the fight scene in this chapter because we got to see Spike's thoughts and inner workings, and so readers learn more about him. Story fights that work to advance the plot or further flesh out the characters are good, but fights dragging on for the sake of looking cool don't work so well, in my opinion.
Now that my little rant is over, I'd like to say that you are doing a good job of fleshing out the characters and being descriptive of the surroundings. Keep it up!
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First of all, a very sincere thank you for expressing your opinion. You have a valid point actually; I know I enjoy playing games way more than just watching, so I can see where you're coming from. Story and character development are far more important than 'looking cool', after all. Not to mention that I'm not particularly a fan of overly drawn-out battles. Besides, looking at how I plan to make Spike develop and grow, I don't think the video game battle theme will really work anyways.
Just for the record, there will be some "boss battles" later on. Not too many though, and it will be for plot advancement or at least be relevant to what will happen in the future. What can I say though? It's a fanfiction heavily based off of a game, so boss battles are standard. I will, however, try my best to make sure that they're interesting. And I won't go overboard with the more minor fights.
I still want to make the last boss an epic and climactic battle, that also fulfills its role as the culmination of all the build-up leading to it. With some sort of twist as well. Hmm... well, all I can do is make sure that it's not boring and overly long (I wouldn't have the patience to anyways).
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Since you're copying Zelda, will Spike find some magical item in every major location he visits? If so, will he hold it over his head for all to and admire?I'm also curious about the female characters in this story. Will Applebloom become a Damsel in Distress whose sole purpose is to motivate Spike to action, or does Twilight and the rest of the Elements of Harmony fill that role? I've seen many people butcher characters of one gender with lots of potential simply because they were stuck in the mind set that one gender can't be written with as much care and depth as the other.
Edit:
I just realized this story is based on the Legend of Spyro, not the Legend of Zelda. My apologies.
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It may not be Zelda, but that doesn't mean he won't find a trinket or two.
As for your question, Spike has no problem admitting that Apple Bloom could kick his tail because she can (and has, on multiple occasions in the past, and most likely will on several occasions in the future). Odds are, she'd bust herself out of trouble first and then save him. Conversely, there are tasks she will (very reluctantly) admit that Spike can do that she isn't exactly suited for. Probably won't stop her though.
I don't really like the whole "damsel in distress" thing. Sure, a one-time goal is alright I guess, but if they repeatedly get into trouble and repeatedly need to be bailed out... then they might want to start learning a thing or two. The female characters will be taking a bit of an active part in things in their own way, but there's going to be trouble first.
But I'm not too confident in writing them right now... so, any pointers?
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I don't have any experience writing myself, unfortunately. However, George R. R. Martin does. He once said I've always considered women to be people when asked about how he writes women so well.
I would suggest not making gender a factor in anything important. I would say write the females like men, except with female genitalia, but that would be politically incorrect.
Given your description of Applebloom, you seem to be on the right track.
Another great chapter and it looks like Spike is going to have company on this journey.
I found 2 errors:
Did you mean "Good, I can't afford to waste any more time."?
transfered is really spelled "transferred". The end of the sentence is a bit awkward. "even if the original caster is absent so long" sounds like you forgot some of the words, like "so long as the spell is done in daylight". On the other hand, if you wanted to say that the caster could have cast the spell 3 hours ago and it would still work, you could say "even if the original caster is absent for a long time"
Not every chapter needs to be exciting to be interesting. This chapter had a lot of world building, and a good bit of humor in the middle with the CMC teasing Applebloom, so it was interesting. It would be boring if you simply droned on and on about how the Mane 6 are missing and how bad it is. You kept me interested because I got to learn more about how things worked, and I got a bit more insight into Spike's contributions over the years.
Keep up the good work.
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Thanks again for your review. I already fixed the errors you pointed out, and if you spot any more please feel free to point them out too. There's actually a lot of errors that slip past me, so I'm thankful for the help.
I don't get the point of over emphasizing the seriousness of a situation if you already know how bad it is, especially if you might be able to do something about it. Thanks again.
3471368 DAMMIT, SWEETIE
PS plz put a pony Mercer in dis
Aww, but I liked all the blatant ship teasing.
I'm really enjoying this fic so far. All the references to video games in general are really great. Hope to see another chapter soon!