As a fan of the show, I always loved Rainbow Dash and her cutie mark, but I never wanted it to appear on my leg! Now that it has, lots of things are getting weird around here. I'm a guy, not a mare! Cartoon ponies aren't real, right? (Mature version)
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4225850 NAHHHHHHHH It's here!
SRB. Point Blank. Right upside the head. That'll rattle your cage. Karma's a bitch.
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I posted a 27,000 word update. This update is longer than the average story posted to FimFiction!
Posting the epilogue this week as well would have been wasteful.
That was a beautiful story. Thanks for this gripping tale Twisted. 420/10 would re-read in a few years for the nostalgia.
Now I need to find something else to read.
100,000,000 years as a common horse. It's too good for him.
Kinda sad the changelings didn't play a bigger part at the end.
4225399 So Twisted when do I get my copy of Five Score and for how much? Seriously...
7 more days, I don't think I can make it!
It's... it's finally happened... it's over. I've got mixed feelings... I'm glad to see the story completed, but at the same time I don't want it to end...
I just hope Sweetie Belle remembers to restore everyone's memory (and/or teach the spell to some other unicorns)
Jap, its there
But the good thing is: there is still an epilpoge to come
So......beautiful....I'm just speechless. Its sad, yet awesome, to see this finished at last. I don't want it to end. Well, time to be responsible and get back to work.
Pro-tip: Listen to "I See Fire" while reading this.
it's not your’s -> it's not yours
her entire body takes on a plastic hue -> her entire body gains a plastic sheen
beauty, and romance, what’s -> beauty and romace. What's
talk, now is there? - Suspect. I would do -> talk, now, is there?
change its shape -> change shape - You're using repetitive phrasing in this passage
lose it’s shape -> lose its shape
your own good Dash. Bravery isn’t always the answer, sometimes -> your own good, Dash. Bravery isn't always the answer; sometimes
body start to -> body starts to
feel a thing deary, -> feel a thing, dearie,
But you on the other hand, you can still feel pain. -> But you, on the other hand... You can still feel pain.
“Cluck cluck”. -> "Cluck cluck."
beak take it’s place -> beak take its place
chiten -> chitin
hyperventilate “Eww! -> hyperventilate. "Eww!
I feel another chicken egg get laid -> I feel myself laying another egg
resilient, I want to
toyshop -> toy shop
thick spell tomes -> tomes
ricocheting boom that reverbs -> boom that reverberates/ricochets
You are made of only one one type -> You control only one type
to repel that like oil does to water -> to repel it like oil on water
twenty five -> twenty-five
forcefield -> force field
Wha? -> Wha—?
Argh.. -> Argh...
but it’s been a good fight. I think we got Discord -> but it was a good fight. We got Discord
I used had given all of you destinies -> I used gave you all destinies
must of got a defective type of magic -> must have got some defective magic
Gratuitous overuse of the word whelp.
subjects hooves -> subject's hooves
with the Chinese -> for the Chinese
bone biopsy - Hooves aren't bone.
a million miles a minutes -> a million miles a minute
S.Armor -> S. Armor
You’re nightmare -> Your nightmare
massive backside and sweat coated fur -> massive sweaty backside
sort hit -> sort of hit
must of loved -> must have loved
dusty hill going at terminal velocity -> dusty hill at terminal velocity
magically throws her sword hurtling towards him -> magically hurls her sword at him
For Five Score... raised to the exponent of four -> For Five Score to the power of Four
Big Mab -> Big Mac
Holy shit, I meant that to be a short typo-fixing session... It's been an hour.
I assume that Rainbow's mom is actually your OC. Even if you didn't mean it, that's who she is now.
Also, I'm supposing the Elements of Harmony have moved to the next generation, and the Mane Six will be impressive and successful on their actions instead if their virtues, now.
Also where Prisneczt?
Epic story. Truely epic. Can't wait for the epilogue. Celestia and Luna will need to return and I bet a few words are needed to go round to everypony/being.
Thank you for this story and we hope to see more from you when you can.
4225993 freeze yourself up if you can't handle the wait.
Anyway, all end ends well. Very good work. Anyway, soon RDs worst nightmare is coming true.*insert evil laughter here*
This honestly came to an end much sooner than I figured it would. I had been expecting an entire new story arc once they reached Equestria not just a couple chapters. It's still kind of a shock to me, to think that it's over...
As always, Rainbow Dash is best pony. That rainboom in his face...
*Nightcore voice activate* Power up the Orbital Friendship Cannon. *sci-fi recharge sounds* Fire.
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You could say is reign of chaos got... rained...on... I regret nothing.
Well, I guess we could have seen that coming from the founder of the TF group. Too bad it's almost over though
They could always biopsy both - and for added horror, bones aren't dead insensate keratin like hooves./armchair vet
Uh, question?
Whatever happened to Senator Corddis, back in chapter 29?
What that a plotline that got scrapped, or is it just a poorly-written red herring?
It's been one hell of a ride TwistedSpectrum.
And I enjoyed every second of it!
From the pony transformations to entering Equestria, From running and hiding from humans to kicking Discord's ass!
You've brought me to tears in this chapter Spectrum.
Tears of joy.
More will probably be shed in the upcoming epilogue. You truly did send Five Score out with a bang!
I will see you again in a week.
Also, what's an exponent of four? I'm not good with math.
So, is this end of the line? (I know there will be an epilogue next week, but really?)
Still, I'm glad I found this epic fic.
easily one of the best stories on fimfiction hands down..... or is it hooves down?
I'm glad i found and read this story.
I'm a bit annoyed there wasn't a true final battle first and that he wasn't reformed again.
One of the six will now live
away from hatred
away from scorn.
For she has found the peace that roamed this flesh;
the blood that stained bliss
but will soon obtain home within the rainbow.
Awaiting further releases.
That last line, makes me laugh. Because nobody ever seems to question hugging the injured person.
This ending... Twas beautiful.
oh my god, This is the greatest fanfic I have ever read......tears
*Man-Tears* I'm not *sniff* crying! It's *sniff* Liquid- *sniff* Sadness!
That's why I hate good books/stories.
They end.
This is a marvelous story, absolutely something to aspire to. I was worried that the end would seem rushed, but you've certainly shown your mastery of great pacing. Thanks for such a great fic, and I can't wait for the epilogue.
Suddenly feeling very inspired.
This was playing in my head throughout the chapter...
I am beyond tears! this is by far one of the greatest stories that has ever existed!! I dare say it is even better then fallout equestria!!! But now that its over, i feel kinda sad, a good kinda sad, but sad never the less. I loved this story all the way to the end, and I am glad to be a reader of it. If I wasn't busy with other projects, and I found this fic when I first became a brony, then I would have made a movie out of this! Thank you for the experience! I love it a lot, and I will convert it to paper, post hace! (insert shining armor)
Wow. Just wow. I remember stumbling upon this fanfic in the summer of 2013. During that summer, I was traveling, and barely had internet, but when I did have it, I would always try to get Google Docs to download the next story update for this story. I would always love the moments when I got internet, and whenever we were waiting someplace, travelling, or just sitting at home, I would always pull out my phone to read this fanfic. You made me love all the characters and made me feel like I had a personal connection to them. The story was created so elegantly, and I could feel how your writing improved throughout the chapters. The plot, the plot twists, the twists of the plot twists, all of them were created so well. I haven't had any book made me feel like I was right now. This adventure I read made me feel like I was in it as well, and the characters were beside me the whole time. The characters were developed so well that I just can't describe. The nightmare part really scared me, and I was worried you were going to end it with a bad ending, especially since you are twisted (haha, name joke, get it? no? ok). But Pinkie (loved her character) found a way out, and eventually, they defeated the tyrant of all of Equestria.
TwistedSpectrum, you are one hell of a writer. You caused the moderators of the sites to create their own rule (I was there for that) where people couldn't write about this, but people who already started a story could continue. I was so happy that you could continue, so I followed your story to see where it went. It went places, I'll tell you that. Please write more stories. It would be nice if you could make another Five Score one, but they are sort of banned :/. It was one adventure Twisted. I don't mean this in a homo way, but I love you. Hope to see you making a publisher-worthy fanfiction again soon.
~Cooler Brony
I've never had a name for eye floaters.
awesome end i can't wait for the epiloge
I can't think of anything specific to say so...
Wooo! Go Mane 6! Go ponies! Cheering noises!
You know what? Two words: SIMPLY AMAZING!
Good job pal!
Why does it have to end?
I think I need to re-read the entire thing once the epilogue is here... But seriously, I followed this since the beginning... it's so sad to see it end
im gonna cry reading this.
There will be plenty of HiE/AiE fics in the future.
There will be plenty of TF fics in the future.
There will never be another "Five Score" moment.
It's a sad feeling knowing that.
I had to, it deserves this moment
It was good whilst it lasted and I've enjoyed the hours I spent reading it. Good show Twisted.
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I was inspired from lots of famous battle speeches. Independance Day, LOTR, Gladiator, etc
I was also listening to a Two Steps from Hell album, so I found myself cranking up the heroicness as high as it could go
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Hehe, the thought has crossed my mind to get a hard print going. I'd have to go through it all again and fix more typos before I attempted that though.
...keep your ears open around June. I'll make a blog post about it when I think it's ready to print
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If you want another type of story with Dash and a human as the protagonist, a human leaving how to live as a pony, and a 1st person story told with bits of humor mixed in, I recommend Dash of Humanity by Kaidan. It's a pretty fun fic
"Don't cry because it's over. Smile because it happened." ~Dr. Seuss
Too late, Seussy. Too late.
too bad that they might have screwed earth over in 100 million years. Even if discord dosent have his memories or powers, a feral horse transforming into discord might cause some issues. But who cares?! Cause we dont!
That is future earths problem.
And it ends. What a wonderful ride.
I wonder if some of the ponies will stay behind on earth. Possibly setting up a pony population there. Magic on earth would sure be useful. As for equestria, I dare say that the bloodshed isn't over. You have a clean slate of a country, no government, no food supply, limited shelter and several thousand ponies newly without a home. There will be shortages and perhaps more horrifically, a power vacuum. Let the aftershocks commence.
Oh, and if discord's gone, shouldn't the world have returned to a normal landscape? (Things would still be destroyed, but the canterlot/etc would return where they belonged (if canterlot was even on a mountain to begin with) Or do the ponies need to manually reverse discord's damage?
But anyway, thank you so much for this amazing piece of literature. 10/10 would read again. Don't ever let this get lost to the ravages of time.
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You humble me with your review, IrraticDrop, thanks for the comments.
I encourage you to look around and read some of the other great fics on this site as well! There are so many amazing works and so many things here to make you glad you're part of this community.
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The Senator was just an avatar of Discord, an aspect of him that was working to fuel the conflict on Earth.
The real Discord never left Equestria though, he had no reason to since he controlled the entire planet. He just created the Corddis character to ensure the ponies on Earth would have their own problems keeping them busy.
If you want to read more, check out Return of the Dawn by pchn00.
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That just means to the fourth power, otherwise knows as "That number times itself... four times"
The curse for Discord was Five Score to the exponent of four, which equals this:
(5*20)^4
=100^4
==100 x 100 x 100 x 100
===100,000,000 years
====A really, really long time.
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Thanks for the kind words, Cooler Brony. I'm going to miss seeing your comments every time a post a new chapter, I got to know so many of you guys and it makes me sad to see this all coming to an end.
Thanks for letting me have this little impact on your life, and thanks for falling in love with the characters that I enjoyed just as much as you
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Oh the story may have come to an end, but the ride doesn't have to. It's all very simple. Just create another sprawling epic story that becomes so popular and beloved that it spawns dozens of spinoffs and prompts the site mods to specifically clamp down on you. Easy peasy. Then you get to continue to enjoy our adoration.
And there we are, the end war.
Evil defeated, homes reained.
Lives lost, lives saved.
Back to equestria, where we were banished.
The king was conquered, the king was banished.
The story finished, the story closed.
Now we are back, after the curse.
Five score divided by four, the story will still go on for more.
Friend. My rhymes suck, but one thing is sure; that story was beautiful. it was so great that I would pay to see a movie/series/animation adaption for it or even its own comic series adaption.
4229601 No matter how many fanfics I read, this one will always stay a part of me. Please write more, I NEED more! And I'm so glad you are one of those authors that actually finishes his fanfics, instead of randomly stopping and causing all the readers to burst into tears realizing they will never find out what happened next :)
Beautiful just beautiful man. I can't wait to see how you wrap it all up next week.
This is one of the first stories that I fell in love with when I joined the site a few months ago. I just want you to know that I have enjoyed every minute of it.
Just wow... This story is simply amazing, I would honestly like to see this made into a book, it's certainly long enough P.S.
I'm not crying, it's liquid pride