As a fan of the show, I always loved Rainbow Dash and her cutie mark, but I never wanted it to appear on my leg! Now that it has, lots of things are getting weird around here. I'm a guy, not a mare! Cartoon ponies aren't real, right? (Mature version)
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Eh I broke my last comment...
Needs about.... 5/4ths more clop.
Nice chapter, you're surprising me with the plot developments each time.
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Tee hee. i c wut u did dere. Giggity.
Seriously though, while I excited for the story to be continuing and the final showdown to be approaching, I'm also sad too. It's the FINAL showdown after all. I don't want it to be over.
I got a mobile notification for this one right after I finished setting up my new tablet. I'm psyched to be on the ball for this one lol. You're awesome, thanks for writing!!!! XD this is literally my favorite fabric I've ever read, and I openly gush about it on a regular basis. This wa s a great chapter, regardless of the amount of mature content :-).
Wicked happening here.
Yes! Make them fuck like anima-................Yes! Let them fuck!
Moving a couple thousand ponies across multiple states in a single day? This looks like a job for... the Power Po- *gets slapped*
3742234 Unless one of your shirts doubles as a mobile device (in which case, send me a link), or you need to fix your autocorrect.
Whoo! they found the portal! now for them to get the 1000+ ponies and assorted there and through, deal with discord and live cloppily ever after!
That one line in there made me thought of this video.
A clopfic compilation?! You spoil us, Twisted!
Oh, and just so you know, "err'ing" should be just "erring"; it needs no apostrophe.
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If that is still the same Chrysalis as in A New Hive then she consider them her children. She just doesn't let all of them hatch duo to concerns of being able to feed them all.
So she could, but probably wouldn't unless things turned dire.
It can't be as that crissy hasn't reached the farm in their story...
Gambling. Lots and lots of gambling.
At two different locations: 'Diamond Jo Casino' and 'Mystique - Dubuque Greyhound Park & Casino'. I miss being 20 minutes away from those. It was a good excuse to get out of boring Platteville on the weekends. Thank you roulette tables and off-track betting! I rarely picked correctly at the greyhound park... though my wife usually does alright on those dogs.
I don't trust this "Celestia." The way she acts is a bit fishy...
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True... but sending your legions of literal children to give six people you might even care that much about a chance to be the heroes?
I'd frankly argue she'd be completely in the right to say no. Especially since the current oh so cunning plan appears to be go there, kick butt, ???, profit!
I realize that there hasn't been much then the revel of the deadline, yet... but if I was in this situation? I'd frankly argue for waiting until the next opportunity and use that time to supply and train the variable army of ponies they currently just have milling about. The place has been in Discord's clutches for twenty-five years already. Will two and a half years of further damage even be noticeable compared to that?
Just rushing in to what almost certainly will be a blasted wasteland of checkered ground and cotton candy skies just seems like a good way to get killed or worse.
3743220 Just gonna leave this here.
You sir. Are getting my hype up from 01/10 to 9999/10. MOAR
3743311 the trouble with that plan is supplies. Or more lack there of. Shining said they have enough food for 2 weeks tops. There is going to be a huge challenge in finding enough food for 2 and a half years. Let alone the fact that they may get even more mouths to feed in that time
The "rapid escalation meter" just went from 10% to 1000% in no time flat.
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Better a mundane challenge like that then facing a chaos god on what he has turned into his turf unprepared. That's my opinion, at least.
Even with the implied cover-up and the nastiness that implies, I think the ponies should try to reason with the government... Or try to avoid that entirely by going public now that they have so many on their sides.
The worst the human world can do to them is the "Government Lab" stereotype. The worst Discord can do is far, far worse then that. Remember, he magically dismembered the mane six as a joke in his original canon appearance.
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It is the same Chryssi, the author of that story just fell behind. Give him a few weeks though and you'll see it's one of the same.
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That was unintentional, she wasn't supposed to be suspicious. The scene came off a bit forced because there are multiple side fics with Celestia in them, and I didn't want to make or break any single one of them. So I kept this Celestia very vague about her reasons, and showed she was still alive but moved out of the way to let the mane six finish what they started in this story.
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If this was real life, I'd agree with you, they should just wait another 2.5 years and in the meantime go public for support. I avoided that in this story for two reasons.
1) No one wants to seem them sit on their ass for 2 years. The story is more fun when things are moving, even when they are moving dangerously and foolishly fast.
2) I've been working hard to intentionally avoid going public and/or getting the government involved. I feel the whole "former humans living on earth as ponies, alongside humans in the public" trope has been done to death with the Conversion Bureau. Five Score was unique in that all the human-turned-ponies were laying low and the public had no idea what was going on.
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Eh, fair enough. Still, I'd argue the Conversation Bureau is a beast apart considering the mental changes in that universe are much nastier then in 5S/4, but I get what you mean.
I still hope there will be some debate about the plan and a few attempts at gearing up, but as long as the characters realize it's one heck of a gamble I could see it happening.
...And I must admit I wonder quite a bit what this will mean for their human lives and families, but I realize I'll only get 'no comment' so I'll not ask right now.
dang looks like the rush to the portal has started. it is going to look interesting as they try to douge all of the humans to get to the portal.
Ugh always with the cliffhangers...at least I don't have to wait a year like books...unless Twisted decides to do that.
3743951 I'm glad you're writing it the way you are, it's what makes it one of my favorite stories besides just the tf/tg aspects in it. Which was what originally got me reading it in the first place.
The pacing in this chapter was nice and it does move very quickly, which I like. There are just enough believable mental changes that they keep their character but are still obviously influenced by their new bodies. Which is how I imagine it would be in a real scenario. That pretty much describes what I like about the story is that you write it so that it's real and believable for the situation and makes the characters come to life.
I'll be sad when it's over but I look forward to re-reading it again and again. +10 cool points for this chapter Twisted and I look forward to the 1000 follower fic
3744139 That's one of the main reasons I don';t like most CB fics, the Mental Changes thing. What fun is it watching humans become ponies when their mind is changed completely or in such an extreme way. You take away the only humanity they have left and make them 100% ponies.
I'm pretty sure that Twilight isn't a pony you would call a "Computer Genius" (or maybe you would I don't know), but you would think that she would have just downloaded the archives and then used the 'Search for word' tool in notepad++ on all of the files at once. I mean, it's not like they had better text formats back then than .txt
3742511 *think, and I'm pretty sure that was the idea.
3742316 wow *face hoof*
It feels so close to finished now... it makes med sad
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You're right. The data probably would have been stored in proprietary formats only readable by whatever program the school purchased to run its records against. (And probably flat files, so report generating would be hair-pullingly frustrating, too.)
So yeah, Ctrl+F in Notepad would likely be a no-go.
"She shakes my head."
I think that was the only mistake in the entire chapter, at least that I noticed, so good job!
Oh, and, it's okay, you don't have to put a ton of clop in, I mean, if you don't want to...
Aww, who am I kidding, you love that stuff. It doesn't ruin the story, I read the mature version for the more "realistic" (IMO) character interactions.
I feel bad for the ponies that are still stuck elsewhere in the World. There's no way they'll make it to the portal before it closes again for another 2.5 years.
On the other hand, the portal is there and it will open again. And since things have been happening around it every few years, it would appear than even Discord can't seal it off. Makes me wonder if he knows about it. Might be a nasty trap or a dead end-- Discord couldn't destroy the portal so he buried it beneath a mountain a mile underground (borrowing from Stargate:1's setup here, minus the handy tunnel to the surface).
I'm guessing there's no diamond dogs on the Pony Farm, eh? I wonder how good changelings are at tunneling? They seemed fairly proficient at surviving in the Badlands where most of the hive is underground like a giant ant colony.
Dun-Dun-Duuuuuuuuun!
Well as long as Twi can figure out a mass teleport spell, everything should be fine
the shit is going to hit the fan... and it will be GLORIOUS!!!!!!!
I've been waiting a damn good while for this chapter and once again, I'm impressed.
Dat cliffhanger tho.
I Like it, but it seemed like AJ had a lot of hate for Flim and Flam when she doesn't remember being scorned is there something I am missing?
Awesome chapter! Dat plot devopment tho...
Can't wait for more! So keep going!
I just realized something: why have bronies not swarmed the farm by now? I've been reading the stories that have been integrated with this one and so far I haven't seen any explanation for this. Or is Shining Armor that good of a deterrent?
3748164 they slowly get memory back
A CLOP COMP!? AAAAAAH YYYEEESSSS
MOAR CLOP! Also Celestia lives! Or does she?
3752627 is that so? hmm I guess I just missed that I thought only the crusaders had any real memory
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Jack was a pretty hardcore brony, so she knows all about them and what they were like.
And I think they are slowly, slowly starting to feel more like their pony selves and have some of their old emotions. I tried to show that with how Jack seemed pretty eager to get back to the Apple Farm in this chapter. Jack "feels more like Applejack" with each day, and combined with his knowledge from the show about the Flim Flam brothers, probably felt a little apprehensive towards them.
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The location of the farm is a secret, no one in the public knows that's the location of the mane six. (Dash did the Sonic Rainboom over Iowa City, about a hundred miles to the west.)
So the real question is not "how come bronies aren't at the farm", but instead it's "how did all those side fic ponies know the way to the farm?"
Anyway, the answer to that is mostly via Luna. She has been shown to visit ponies in their dreams, so I imagine she shared the address with every pony in the region so they could all meet up safely.
3759584 Yes, the side fics I've read have taken your cue and used Luna to tell them where to go. At least in Five Score: A New Hive, anyway. They actually showed the dream sequence, which was nice.
Thank you for your explanation and your time. Keep up the good work, if you don't mind.
Details!
This girl knows what really matters in life. Apples.
HOLY SHIT those are good!
Though this is a good description of what happens, I think the sentence structures are too similar to have this close together.
Wonder how much sex is going on around this farm now? Couldn't Fluttershy sense it in a way?
If I could hug Twi, I would. Floppy disks, those things sucked. 1.44 MB of storage, that shit is near useless now.
Just like manbearpig! But in all seriousness, Fluttershy should LAY THE FUCK OFF TWILIGHT!
Suddenly, CELESTIA!
I am currently editing Return of the Dawn for pnch00. I'm on to you!
Fluttershy's cottage has internet? How? Does it even have electricity?
Stutters don't repeat the start of the sentence, just the sound. So no need to double capitalize.
I don't know about you, but this uneven spacing is starting to PISS ME OFF! Just like all these snakes on this motherfucking plane!
Oh, and called it. But, you know, pnch00 might have clued me in that I should get my rear in gear on the edits. Fuck. Me.
I thought so too, and I asked Jen. "Hey, what's up with Celestia not being in a volcano." Her answer, "Oh, I just ignored that."
My story idea of Celestia trapped in granite for 25 years would totally work. She is immune to volcanoes! I hope I never catch that.
Cause pnch00 ignores what she doesn't like... Don't let her know I told you. She's crazy man... I don't want to go back to the dungeons...
I think it was Little Foot, no... Midget Legs? Tiny Hoof? Short Tail? Meaningless Adventure?
Celestia comes, really doesn't tell them to do anything different from what they already are doing, but she adds more stresses. Sounds about right. Oddly enough, this is like pnch00 as well...
Oh HO HO! They all were male at one point or another weren't they?
Dude, paranoid much? Chryssi is super chill, just give her the pomf, bitch loves her pomf.
Pinkie loves the lamp. I am pretty sure she has a hand grenade as well.
Only single quotes here.
I like wearing err'ings too!
Someone got a little excited here. But isn't Twilight kinda in charge? And Chryssi talked with Twilight?
One too many closing quotes.
It's in Iowa, how convenient. Though, I still think this story could do with more battleship.
I love you Tes—Twilight.
FALSE! Purple Alicorn.
Orrrrr, it was settled cause of geographic boons, like being next to a river.
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HAHA, A TICKING CROCK!
But honestly, did you do the math on this? Cause I am sure someone (not me) will. (Ok maybe I might... But pnch00 wants me to edit... Cause that is was good editors do, they edit, they edit to the tune of pnch00.)
Awwww hell YEAH! Though, I am not sure if you can top Royal Duties, I really liked that one. Also, fun seeing you and Kaidan working together.
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Yeah, I wish I could have gone into more detail with the dream, and talk more with Celestia, etc.
Unfortunately I really boxed myself into a corner. I told people like 15 chapters ago that I wasn't going to choose between multiple side fics of the same pony and "canonize" one over the other. There were three people writing Luna side fics, and I promised I wasn't going to gut and sacrifice any one of them by making the other one appear in Five Score.
So I was stuck, I had to be awkwardly vague in my Luna and Celestia scene. Probably wasn't the best way to handle things.
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Aye, it pisses me off too. It's something FimFic does when it imports out of my G-docs. I honestly have no idea what the spaces appear like that, when I type on G-Doc I tab for every paragraph, yet, FimFic interprets my text as half the paragraphs have those half tabs.
I'll usually go through and fix them whenever I post the chapter. I seemed to have forgotten to do this chapter, I'll do it now.
I just want to point out how awesome I am, and how the writers totally stole that idea from me. In today's episode Pinkie uses pretty much that exact line, but let the courts show that I published it first