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In an attempt to help her school's losing soccer team finally bond, team manager Twilight Sparkle takes the whole team to a ranch over spring break. Already uncomfortable being around her otherwise entirely male team, Rainbow Dash is dragged along reluctantly for the ride. However, finding herself in sunny, open fields, Rainbow realizes she is quickly falling for one of the farm hands, a freckle-faced blonde teeming with southern charm. AppleDash, human. Rated T for use of language and suggestive themes.

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 166 )

I don't get why this is getting such bad ratings...

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I just hope it's merely pairing flames, not a reflection on my writing... :fluttershysad:

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I thought it was written really well considering the context. I'm not a big fan of the actual idea but it's not a bad slice of life.

The story is great man, really great. Don't worry about the ratings, Appledash gets a lot of hate, and so do Humanized fics. This already is likely to become the best human Appledash on the website; that couple (my absolute OTP) has some amazing fics, but not too much human ones, so I'll be following this one closely. Best of lucks.

Man, that was a fast update. And a very good chapter too.
Another one!

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Thanks for the support! It inspires me, it really does! Another chapter coming in the next day or two, don't worry.:pinkiehappy:

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No problem, I don't comment too often, even though I read quite a lot fanfiction, specially Appledash, it's a guilty pleasure of mine (as the whole of MLP is anyway, most people who know me would never believe I'm such a huge fan of this), but overall I'm an avid reader, so I like to think I don't like just anything that I read on the Internet. I normally comment on fics that I think are very good but are not getting enough praise (the only two other stories in which I've commented are Chocolate Covered Grapes by Callisto and Morgoth in Equestria by Imperius)
There are, however, some spelling mistakes that you should be aware of. I can't help you too much in these matters because English is not my first language, Spanish is (I'm from Chile, South America).
I'll be expecting the new updates the next days.

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Yeah well I write it mostly drunk and only read it once over before I upload, and having written it I don't pay close enough attention lol... so don't expect perfection. MLP is one of my own personal guilty pleasures and I don't think a soul in my real life knows about my AppleDash fetish lol... So I know how you feel. I don't often comment on fanfics either, I'm rather selective myself and put all my opinions in my own writings.

Anyway, I appreciate the feedback and I hope you'll keep reading!

Oh yah! Can't wait to read more loving it so far

And now we need more:twilightsmile::yay:

Im loving this story so far keep the updates coming:twilightsmile:

Another excellent chapter, and great to see updates so often.

You don't like it? it was the most entertaining so far to me. I couldn't help but imagine you just as drunk while writing it.

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Yeah I definitely was lol, I am just not sure if there's enough purpose in it is all.

So you write this drunk..... best talent ever lol

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Hahaha glad you think so!:pinkiecrazy:

This is awesome:rainbowlaugh:

You have got to update this soon. We will die of wait if you don't:pinkiehappy:

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Oh don't worry, expect the next chapter today or tomorrow. :ajsmug:

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Awesome!! Can't wait!

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there ya go, hope you like it!

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I did!


1. This story isn't rushed or anything. Well pased and nothing seems out of place. (:moustache:)
2. You did a good job leading up to what Dash did and all but a few things stood out.
1. AJ didn't really do much after it. She kinda thought about it but went back to her work like nothing happened.
2. What happened to Dash after she kissed AJ? I mean she ran off but AJ did nothing. I mean, yeah she talked to Big Mac about it (kinda) but didn't really think to much about it.

Thats all I have to say. Seriously, other then that this story is spot on and pure awesome! Keep up the good work I can't wait for more:twilightsmile:

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Well to avoid spoiling the ending I had to be vague, but I thought that under such circumstances AJ would try to pretend that it didn't happen. Being raised with a strict upbringing in a culture that otherwise says nothing about this kind of relationship, she's entirely dumbfounded. That's how I imagined it anyway. That's why she just kind of fell apart then acted like nothing was wrong. In the next few chapters it would become clear what Rainbow thought and what AJ is hiding, hopefully. Thanks for the feedback!! I will probably go over the story again when I'm sober (if that ever happens) and notice more of what I did wrong, lol. :twilightsheepish:

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Sober:rainbowlaugh:

Yeah that makes more sense. Just thought I should point that out.:twilightsmile:

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Well I definitely need another opinion besides my own, seeing as how I write this almost entirely alone and wasted.... and by almost, I mean very much entirely. :applejackunsure: I like having some feedback to work off of, so thanks again!! I try to make this true to character, but everyone's opinion of character seems to change so that's difficult... Perhaps I shall try harder!! :rainbowdetermined2:

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hahaha well shankyaverymuuuch :pinkiehappy:

:eeyup: Is best Big Brother, no doubt. And I was wondering where Apple Bloom was, I don't think she had appeared before didn't she?
I agree with the comment that said that the pacing of this story is great. Can't wait to read Dash's point of view in the next chapter.

And I just realized you're a woman... it's a detail really but on the Internet you tend to assume most people are men...

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Yeah fair enough, and I am a woman... if that makes any difference in your opinion of me :applejackunsure: ... any who, I liked writing big mac as the supportive big brother, he doesn't seem to get enough screen time as such. I think the only time applebloom was in it was at the dinner table in an earlier chapter, she didn't speak too much lol... Im glad you like the pacing, I just pretty much threw it together an idea one night and continually checked the dialogue-text ratio as best I could without rereading it ten thousand times... anyway, glad you like it thus far!!:yay:

Of course it doesn't make any difference of opinion. it was just a comment. My favourite fic of all time was written by a woman (Chocolate Covered Grapes by Callisto).

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It ain't like I would mind if you thought differently of me, so long as it was a positive change. I know when I play video games a lot people think I'd a guy. It doesn't bother me either way, sometimes it's just a fun surprise :pinkiehappy:

Can I even put into words how much I ADORE this?! You have earned a favorite, like AND a watcher :pinkiehappy:

Now... Off to break at work and to read more! *insert wooshing Freakazoid here*

But seriously... I admire your skills :twilightsmile:

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That makes me so happy to hear!! :yay: smiling the whole time I read that

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Tis the truth :twilightsmile:

Well... Except for the whole Freakazoid thing. Sadly I couldn't do that in my office or I'd get in trouble

But seriously... i can haz moar? :pinkiehappy:

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lawl yeah the office might not appreciate that... but yes, there should be another chapter up today or tomorrow, I have to go over it one last time for editing and make sure I'm happy, then it will be up no prob. Thanks to your support, I shall get to it right now!:raritywink:

NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO :flutterrage:
AJ don't Rainbow walk out :fluttercry:

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:rainbowderp: there's the reaction I was looking for!! Don't worry, it's not over yet...

That was cruel. But I know it will be worth it in the end.
Great chapter.

Well talk about denile!!! AJ all I have to say to you is simple, your making a HUGE mistake:flutterrage::flutterrage:

I can't wait for more! Humanized Appledash is awesome (so is appledash but humanized just doubles it):pinkiehappy:

This was a aweseome chapter, keep up the good work. I found one mistake tho

I didn't meant to offend her or scare her or whatever I did

mean not meant

That was all! :twilightsmile:

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Thanks apparently I am not double reading it well enough... error shall be fixed!!:twilightblush: and thanks, I enjoyed writing it so I hoped you guys would like reading it!!

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Well you know what you need to do:trixieshiftright: GET WRITING:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

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You don't have to tell me twice, words erupting from my body as we speak!! :pinkiecrazy:

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lol pretty accurate, except I'm laughing maniacally the whole while. :rainbowlaugh:

So this is pretty great so far. I just clicked onto the site, wondering if anything new or interesting had popped up, and bam! New awesome Appledash with a bunch of chapters already up. I was not disappointed.

Like some others have already said, don't let the silly ratings get you down. There're a bunch of turds out there who automatically downvote Humanized or certain pairings (or just shipping in general) without actually reading anything or judging based on actual content. So yeah, solid start (haven't seen this premise done before) and I'm definitely hooked. Onward!

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Yay!:yay: I'm excited to hear it! Yeah, ratings are kind of making me anxious, probably just some unresolved inferiority complex or something... anyway, I am working hard for the very few who do like the pairing and story, I liked the idea of having the two first meeting and the whole high school new girl thing seemed played out, so I tried a different approach. Thanks for the feedback! More chapters arriving almost daily! :pinkiehappy:

the way her shit hugged at her curves.

I laughed more than I probably should have. :derpytongue2:

Still going strong, I see. A few typos here and there, but some of them have humourous results (see above). Onward!

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