• Member Since 12th Mar, 2013
  • offline last seen Jan 20th, 2016

Flutterguy89


T

When you have no one else to turn to, when all Fillydelphia PD can turn up is dead-ends, when it’s eleven ’o clock and you don’t know where your foals are, who do you turn to? Ragged Wings Detective agency, that’s who. Don’t let the smell of burnt coffee fool you, when it’s all on the line there and there is no one else to turn to, you can count on Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy, private eyes.

For a fee of course. What? Don’t look at me like that, Flutters! Want to find out if we can still work if our power gets shut off?!

Dashie, please... I’m, uh…sure we can work something out if they can't pay…if that’s okay…

((Cover image by Utruiwe, original can be found here. ))

Chapters (6)
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!
Comments ( 42 )

i like this idea, i want to find out where this is going:rainbowderp::pinkiehappy::fluttercry:

Interesting....:pinkiehappy: I shall follow this and see how it all goes along! :pinkiegasp:

Phillydelpia’s

I think you mean Fillydelphia.

LOVE IT!!

[youtube=5XjsFILvnjQ]

2419342 Thanks for the catch, fixed now

If you were locked up, you wouldn't be able to continue. :fluttercry:

XD

But anyway, this was fun! I haven't read a lot of stories of this genre, but I do have to say it really makes me want to get more into it. It feels much like a film noir, there's something driving things along, and of course, the FluterDashie awesomeness is a bonus. Good stuff! :twilightsmile:

2429016 Glad you're enjoying it! Honestly it's probably less true to real noir fiction than I'd like, but I'm basing this more off the ridiculous over the top mysteries I love to read. Be they urban-fantasy, a la "The Dresden Files", or the just plan crazy mystery/thiller "Serge A. Storms" series by Tim Dorsey.

In the end my goal in writing this was to have as much fun as possible (Some say too much :pinkiecrazy:) and if I'm doing that why wouldn't I slip in my OTP :yay::heart::rainbowderp:

Yeah, true enough! XD But the elements are around, and even if it's a little less true, at least it's fun. :pinkiehappy:

I don't blame you there, I'd slip my favourite pairing into something if I were writing an homage to a genre I liked. :derpytongue2::raritywink:

:yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

:raritystarry: Idea! I should do a Serge Storms tribute with Pinkie as Serge (Spree killer with a heart of gold who kills the worlds various assholes in elaborate and ironic fashions, also rabid history buff and crazy ass manic personality)... With maybe Berry Punch as Coleman (permanently drunk/high sidekick).

-puts on potential to-write list-

2429106 Have fun with that, then! :pinkiehappy:

This is quite unique. Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash as detectives... very interesting. :moustache: I really like it so far actually.

So, this is a mystery fic with Flutterdash laced in it? :duck:

NINJAS!!??
[youtube=jDWZJ1KIYmg]

Will our heroes be able to escape from these ninjas?!
Will they find Diamond Tiara before it's too late?!
How more over the top will this fanfiction get?!
Track this story and find out on the next chapter, whenever the author feels like posting it!
Same story!
Same website!

2431538 Ever thought of a career as a carnival barker? You seem to have some wonderful gumption there, good sir/madam.

2429228 I'm a detective too! Did I win?

2429228 That's the gist of it, yup :twilightsmile:

Not the ninjas!!

The head of a lavender unicorn popped up from behind the counter

*super gay voice* caaaalled it

Very promising! Before this Chapter I thought this might be a nice, but relatively linear story.
Now the plot seems to be quite well thought out, keep that up. I hope this story will be long, if this was act one, how many are there going to be?

On a side note, I'm not a fan of Twishy in any form, and I'm not sure what purpose it should serve. Comedy? Advancing the Flutterdash romance plot by introducing the theme? Real competition (Please no)?
Luckily it is one sided from the only tolerable side.
That is of course only my opinion ( highly allergic to FlutterX(not)Dash ) and you are free to do what you want.

Looking forward to more.

2464910 I'm the same with FlutterDash as my OTP, though I find myself more allergic to (not)FluttersxDashie than the opposite, well except for FlutterMac and DiscoShy that stuff can all be burnt to the ground, Fluttershy is and always will be a filly-fooler in my head-canon. But I digress.

The TwiShy was introduced for a couple reasons. First being that her flirting with Shy, while unnoticed by Flutters herself, was picked up on by Dash and served as a subconscious fuel for her animosity towards Twilight (and an unrealized possibility that their friendship may run deeper). The second reason was to show that, by way of Fluttershy turning down the offer of a date, that Fluttershy, despite the knowledge that her relationship with Dash remains stagnant, hasn't abandoned hope for its evolution.

Oh and for laughs at an antiquity related pick-up line :twilightsheepish:

I really had only conceived two acts to this story unfortunately. As much as I'm loving writing it, I'm worried the plot would feel stretched if I added too much filler. Though the idea of the vacation to Fluttershy's cottage arose organically from writing this chapter, so perhaps I'll tack on a nice fat epilogue set in Ponyville where I'll resolve the romantic elements.

TLDR; no worries about the TwiShy

What is this... feeling? No, no. It can't be. And yet... it is.

I... fell bad... for Diamond Tiara.

Ow. Ow, it literally hurts to say that. But it's true! I am generally worried about Diamond Tiara's well-being!

OW!

I think you missed putting a line of space between two paragrpahs near the end. :derpyderp1:

Besides that little oops, you did quite nice showing how the characters feel towards each other and such. This is an interesting development. I wonder when Fluttershy finally gets the courage to tell her. Keep up teh good work! :twilightsmile:

2515284 Fixed :pinkiehappy:

Yeah I felt it was time to give a deeper look into the psyches of our heroines, seeing as they had finally hit a bit of a lull in the case. :twilightsheepish:

Poor Fluttershy...:fluttershysad: It must be torture to be living with the mare of her dreams, but feeling so scared to make a move for fear of angering her. Only in her dreams can she have her beloved Rainbow Dash...:fluttercry::fluttershbad:

But overall, this is pretty good! We're getting more and more leads, cracking the case some more, oh yes! This is getting interesting! :raritystarry:

2515676 Yeah, Flutters is having a rough go of it, as far as romance is concerned :fluttercry: It can really suck being alone with your thoughts too much, but the situation that is causing her such anxiety is also what is bringing Dash around to the realization that perhaps she could use a little more of her best pal in her life :rainbowderp:

2515711 Oooh, I'm sure it would! :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Flutterguy89 deleted May 2nd, 2013

2515778 Not at all! XD I know how you feel!

People get the impression that when you write, you're in complete control. That's directed writing. However, it really doesn't apply more than half the time. A lot of what we end up writing along the way becomes a result of the story taking a life of its own. The story is telling us what to do, the characters are telling us what they're thinking, and it's not even us in control anymore! We the writers have to follow orders! We can't just put random things on paper and be done with it!

So, I know what you mean! X3 We're just as much the readers as the readers are!

2515792 No doubt :pinkiehappy: And sometimes there is nothing better than sitting back and just retreading that crazy journey. I think that's why I feel rather proud of this chapter, the characters spoke to me more than ever before :twilightsmile:

And thanks for the writing insight, NG :twilightsheepish: if you ever want to/have the time to do a collab or need an extra quill for anything I'd jump at the chance!

Ugh I accidentally deleted a comment when I meant to edit it... Okay I'm officially too tired to post. Good game insomnia, but I think I'll be taking my ball and going home.

2515801 There you go, that's just what I mean! :twilightsmile: And you're welcome!

:raritystarry: All of my yes! I am so there! I'll take you up on it!

2515871 Woohoo!
I mean... Your most generous acceptance is simply marvelous :raritystarry:

I’m all for human interest pieces

I'm betting Lyra writes those!

2516838 Oops... Gonna fix that :twilightsheepish:

2516838 Equine-interest pieces, there we go. That works.

“Oh no, I just have to be up this earlier,”

I think you mean early

I think there's some other mistakes that I can't remember as well.

Still I'm interested to see what'll happen next!

Flutterdash detectives ... WIN:rainbowwild:

What Fluttershy had said when she was half asleep ... lol... I like where thats going...

This is really good. Sucks that it's unlikely that the author'll return... Oh well, I'll keep watch incase this does continue.

Login or register to comment
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!