The Lady Rarity enjoys throwing the occasional supper party, but this one has ended in tragedy. She and her five guests stand as the only suspects in a grisly slaying. It is up to Inspector Redeye to ferret out the murderer, but who could it be? The washed-up daredevil? The socialite who prefers the backroom to the ballroom? The University researcher and 'Favored of the Princess'? The timid nun from the local orphanage? The scion of the local apple magnate? Or perhaps even the Countess of Maresfield Manor herself, the Lady Rarity?
((Have fun with this noir-ish whodunit, as always if anyone can provide cover art it would be greatly appreciated.))
Chapters (5)
Ooh, a murder mystery... I haven't yet seen a successful one of these, and I hope this turns out well! Just judging from this chapter it's gonna be good.
Actually, come to think of it, I wish I was part of this... I'd normally offer my services as a proofreader but judging by your writing you don't need one, and the only other way I could get involved would be as a collaboratorive author and I presume you don't want this to be a collab, and if you did you'd probably want it to be with someone with verifiable writing experience. So I'll just lurk in the shadows and regret various things.
2328231 Thanks for the offer but I would sorta like to write this one on my lonesome. However I'd be more than willing to collaborate on a future project.
Some call Hercule Poirot!
2329482 Cool! Message me anytime you feel like collaborating.
So his name really was Half-Cocked?
I thought the other guy was being sarcastic at first.
It'll be interesting to see what sort of motives they might have had to kill the maid of all ponies.
Bet their all guilty of something. Even the nun.
2331384 everyone has their secrets.....
I'm kinda pissed that you killed derpy but in the magical world of equestria, anything is possible. Perhaps the body is a mere illusion to distract from a robbery taking place on the other side of the manor. Perhaps derpy is in on it and she faked her own death at the promise of untold riches. (But still, you murdered Derpy. You monster.)
This isn't the first pony to perish that was related to the household. That puts rares on the top of my list and is probably why I'm not a detective.
I finally got around to reading this and im glad i did. Its great! The details are amazing and i do indeed like a good mystery. To chapter two!!!
I think its fluttershy personally, although it could be a "murder on the orient express" thing.
“Hey that means I get one more question, right? So I saw how you were comforting the nun, and you guys spend holiday’s together right? So tell me, Have you been peaking at what’s under that habit?”
That isn't right.
But apart from that a good chapter! It also provided me with the inspiration as to where my character is going to go in Anthropomorphism (a previously cancelled story I took over). If you don't mind, I'd perhaps like to plug your story somewhere in Anthropomorphism, due to the fact that I think I owe it to you for the inspiration.
Long post needs moar moustache
2388786 Plug away, my good man, plug away.
Thanks for the spell check too
I love this so far. You have so many details which are essential in a murder mystery or a regular mystery. Really can't wait for an update.
"She had record of violent offences that I had known of, and given her level of celebrity I figured I would know of any."
But also good chapter! This is a good story, and hopefully it'll become more popular with a plug, which I just wrote into the chapter.
Write on good sir.
2393586 oops... Uh typo. it's supposed to read "She had no record of violent offences that I knew of..."
Fixed now.
2393614 Well that was quick
2393631 Redeye isn't the only one who doesn't keep normal hours
Fluttershy is the killer. Killing Derpy makes Rarity miserable so that Fluttershy can swoop in and comfort her in her time of grief. And Rarity, grateful for Fluttershy's support, then decides to donate even more money to the struggling orphanage, perhaps even on a regular basis.
The silverware thing is an unrelated crime committed by Applejack so she can sell the real silver for money.
2411009 That's an interesting theory. I like your motives, but I will neither confirm nor deny your theory, because well... Spoilers
This reeks of the movie Clue.
AND THAT'S EXCELLENT.
Once I have some free time, I'm totally reading this.
2411009
Nah ...
The silverware thing is Rarity herself. The Countess has been hemorrhaging money ever since her husband died. She sold the real silver years ago to help fund her charitable donations. That would explain why she only has the one servant - she can't afford to keep anyone else on. Probably couldn't even pay Derpy, but the late Ms. Hooves stayed on anyways out of loyalty to her employer. It also explains why her influence with the nobility would be waning, and why she couldn't buy out Applejack. Heck, it would also explain why none of her guests at the party are true nobility (Twilight doesn't count) - the Canterlot and Manehattan elite would have recognized the silver as counterfeit from the start, and from there could probably piece together that Rarity had fallen on hard times. With these ponies at least, the Countess can reasonably expect to be able to keep up appearances.
Dun Dun Dunn. Love the continuation and can't wait to find out which one of these 'innocent' mares
did it. Or if there was some outside party that did it.
Butler did it!
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"But the butler was the victim."
"A suicide, perfect! No arrest needed."
I have made my accusation! It was Colonel Mustard in the Dining Room with a Dumbbell! - wait...this isn't Clue? Huh...well I mean...Hasbro did make a remake of the board game so...